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issue177 The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceptive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.

We all share a belief that anyone who is deprived of appropriate education would loss one of the most important opportunities to succeed in his later life. As people have moved from elementary school to university and college, at each rung of education, their perspectives on the world change greatly after studying the disciplines. I will follow my reasoning from two realms of study—astronomy and biology

When it comes to realm of astronomy, the study of Copernican Theory and modern astronomy has greatly altered the way we see the universe. If we cast a look back at the medieval history, we would find that many people, in the sixteenth century, believed the earth to be the centre of the world. Due to their limited knowledge on astronomy for one hand, and for that pervasive recognition of the world coincided their daily observations on the other hand, people had taken geocentric perceptive for granted for centuries. Owning to the study of Copernicus, one of the most influential astronomers in the course of scientific history, people's misconception about the universe had been corrected. If not for his sun-centered system of the universe, people might have still been distracted from the truth, that in fact it is the earth that revolves annually around the sun. To be sure, after studying the Copernican Theory and latter modern astronomy in its maturity, how people view the universe with no doubt differs vastly from before.

The argument of how studying a discipline alters the way we see the world can also be applied to biology. Just several hundred years ago, most people would deem themselves as a superior intellectual over other species. Proud of the wisdom accumulated for thousands of years and embodied in various books and tools, our predecessors further opined that their superiority had existed since the first day when humans were created, by God or whatsoever. The education about biology, however, convinces us that nothing could be further from the truth than this assertion: all living creatures on this planet, from microscopic bacteria to plants, insects, birds, and mammals, unexceptionally share one ancestor from the very beginning. Although humans now differ enormously with other species in almost all angles, after we study the evolution theory, we know that humans and other species pertaining to this world are biologically interrelated. Birds fly in the sky, and fish swims in the water; but how we see them has changed.

In conclusion, the study of academic disciplines do change the way we perceptive the world. After studying Copernican Theory, people have realized that the sun does not revolve the earth but that the opposite is true. Similarly, owning to knowledge gained from biology, our perceptive toward the natural life is forever altered. In short, deep down in disciplines we are not with the same eyes to see the same world.

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issue177 The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceptive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.

[We all绝对了吧] share a belief that anyone who is deprived of appropriate education would loss[lose] one of the most important opportunities to succeed in his [or her]later life. As people have moved from elementary school to university and college, at each rung of education, their perspectives on the world change greatly after studying the disciplines. I will follow my reasoning from two realms of study—astronomy and biology

When it comes to realm of astronomy, the study of Copernican Theory and modern astronomy has greatly[换个词] altered the way we see the universe. If we cast a look back at the medieval history, we would find that many people, in the sixteenth century, believed the earth to be the centre of the[ world.宇宙？] Due to their limited knowledge on astronomy[ for/  on the] one hand, and for that pervasive recognition of the world coincided[with] their daily observations on the other hand, people had taken geocentric perceptive for granted for centuries. Owning[owing这个要注意！] to the study of Copernicus,[ one of the most influential astronomers in the course of scientific history,累赘] people's misconception about the universe had been corrected. If not for his sun-centered[/heliocentric] system of the universe, people might have still been distracted from the truth, [that in fact it is the earth that revolves annually around the sun. 没有必要]To be sure, after studying the Copernican Theory and latter modern astronomy in its maturity, how people view the universe with no doubt differs vastly from before. [我觉得可以省下那些常识性的话，如我文中标的那些。加上日程认识和学术研究之间的不同指出，从而从更深的层次分析为什么进行学术研究后人们的认识会发生改变。]

The argument of how studying a discipline alters the way we see the world can also be applied to biology. [可以用一段分析日常认识和学术研究之间的不同指出，然后再用两个例子来说明，是不是显得更好些？]Just several hundred years ago, most people would deem themselves as a superior intellectual over other species. Proud of the wisdom accumulated for thousands of years and embodied in various books and tools, our predecessors further opined that their superiority had existed since the first day when humans were created, by God or whatsoeve[ whosoever？]r. The education about biology, however, convinces us that nothing could be further from the truth than this assertion: all living creatures on this planet, from microscopic bacteria to plants, insects, birds, and mammals, unexceptionally share one ancestor from the very beginning. [进化论的观点正遭受置疑，特别是ets似乎比较反感进化论，一个例证就是gre的阅读中几乎成为规律的一个现象，即作者都会批判进化论。你可以说学了进化论之后，虽然不一定改变了人们的信仰，但至少给人们提供了一个新的解释框架来看待人和动物之间的关系，不要像现在这样这么绝对。]Although humans now differ enormously with other species in almost all angles, after [we study/studying] the evolution theory, we know that humans[换几个词。Human beings] and other species pertaining to this world are biologically interrelated. Birds [still]fly in the sky, and fish [still]swims in the water; but how we see them has changed.

In conclusion, the study of academic disciplines do change the way we perceptive the world. After studying Copernican Theory, people have realized that the sun does not revolve the earth but that the opposite is true. Similarly, 【owning×】 to knowledge gained from biology, our perceptive toward the natural life is forever altered. In short, deep down in disciplines we are not with the same eyes to see the same world. [你的语言为什么波动这么大呢？这篇还可以，但不如昨天看的那篇。难道写作文也穿不同的马甲？]

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