Issue4 寄托4人组 8-31

bridgewalkerUID: 208595

TOPIC：ISSUE 4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
WORDS：422          TIME：AM 12:45:00          DATE：31/8/2005

The speaker believes that only if outsiders bring in their new knowledge and experience can any field of study be significantly advanced. In my point of view, I concede that in the era of modern science when interdisciplinary researches loom large, outsiders can benefit the field a lot. However, from a broader perspective, outsiders are unnecessary, and even impossible under extreme circumstances for the sake of great breakthroughs in researches.

Admittedly, owing to outsiders' knowledge, techniques and perspective, many disciplines have been greatly promoted recently. Take the paleoanthropology for instance. Long gone are the days when paleoanthropologists collect information from human fossils merely by measuring their differences in physical dimensions. After the combination of paleoanthropology and molecular biology, a branch called molecular paleoanthropology is created. With the help of modern genetic techniques, paleoanthropologists formed a new theory on origin of human race -- the "Eve theory" -- addressing that all human beings at present can be traced back to a common black mother in Africa millions of years ago.  As the example illustrates, such a significant advancement in paleoanthropology would be impossible in the absence of molecular biology. Thus it is reasonable to assert that outsiders have the potential to bring about a big leap in the researches of certain fields.

However, in some cases, outsider does not serve as an indispensable factor for the advancement of study. History is abundant of examples. For instance, centuries ago, Galileo made one of the greatest discoveries in physics -- the law of free fall -- by experiments. During his experiments, there was no outsider but Galileo himself. That is to say, without outsiders, scholars from certain fields can advance their studies by endeavor of themselves alone.

In addition, in some extreme cases, it is impossible for outsiders to promote studies of certain fields with their knowledge and experience. Take the mathematics for example. Although science and engineering always borrow theories such as linear control, nonlinear control and chaos control from mathematics to improve themselves, mathematics has no discipline to refer to. The mathematical research is so pure and fundamental that almost no other disciplines can give it a hand. While this example might be extreme, it properly proves that the circumstance under which outsiders have nothing to offer truly exists.

In sum, it is true that many fields of study have been benefited from outsiders’ contribution, nonetheless, it is also the case though rare that outsiders are not indispensable for significant advancement in researches. Moreover, they even have nothing to contribute under extreme circumstances.

tangjihedeUID: 2107695

zhan!

tangjihedeUID: 2107695

TOPIC：ISSUE 4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
WORDS：422          TIME：AM 12:45:00          DATE：31/8/2005

The speaker believes that only if[when] outsiders bring in their new knowledge and experience can any field of study be significantly advanced. In my point of view, I concede that in the era of modern science when interdisciplinary researches loom large, outsiders can benefit the field a lot. However, [自己的要表达的Ts最好统合成一句，IN my point of view, although,..;yet…]from a broader perspective, outsiders are unnecessary, and even impossible under extreme circumstances for the sake of great breakthroughs in researches.

Admittedly, owing to outsiders' knowledge, techniques [and前加逗号。新学的。]and perspective, many disciplines have been greatly promoted recently. Take the paleoanthropology for instance. Long gone are the days when paleoanthropologists collect information from human fossils merely by measuring their differences in physical dimensions. After the combination of paleoanthropology and molecular biology, a branch called molecular paleoanthropology is created. With the help of modern genetic techniques, paleoanthropologists formed a new theory on[the?] origin of human race -- the "Eve theory" -- addressing that all human beings at present can be traced back to a common black mother in Africa millions of years ago.  As the example illustrates, [没有看出来新技术怎么帮助得出这一结论的，最好解释一下。]such a significant advancement in paleoanthropology would be impossible in the absence of molecular biology. Thus it is reasonable to assert that outsiders have the potential to bring about a big leap in the researches of certain fields.[这一段的内容还可以加上一下现代学术分科的一些弊端，搞考古的对分子技术一无所知，而outsiders正可以弥补这一点，比如你的例子。]

However, in some cases,[ 加一句突出主题：然而，speaker过于夸大了outsders的作用。并不是每一个学科都是这样。] outsider does not serve as an indispensable factor for the advancement of study. History is abundant of examples. For instance, centuries ago, Galileo made one of the greatest discoveries in physics -- the law of free fall -- by experiments. During his experiments, there was no outsider but Galileo himself. That is to say, without outsiders, scholars from certain fields can advance their studies by endeavor of themselves alone.[仅仅把例子举出来了，但没有分析原因。可以说本领域的专家经过长期不懈的研究，也会确定突破。甚至可以举陈景润的例子，他的7平米小屋也从形象上隔开了outsiders――如果嫌伽利略用的太多了的话]

In addition, in some extreme cases, it is[not only of no necessity but also 加强和上一段的逻辑联系] impossible for outsiders to promote studies of certain fields with their knowledge and experience. Take the mathematics for example. Although science and engineering always borrow theories such as linear control, nonlinear control and chaos control from mathematics to improve themselves, mathematics has no discipline to refer to. The mathematical research is so pure and fundamental that almost no other disciplines can give it a hand. While this example might be extreme, it properly proves that the circumstance under which outsiders have nothing to offer truly exists.[还是那样，不要只列出例子。可以一开始先说纯理论学科由于自身的特别，外人做不出什么贡献，比如数学。。]

In sum, it is true that many fields of study have been benefited[好像不用被动也可以] from outsiders’ contribution,[分号。记住要适量的使用分号！] nonetheless, it is also the case [ though rare/ 可以省it is么？不确定] that outsiders are not indispensable for significant advancement in [some]researches. Moreover,[改成破折号――on the contrary,…变成一句] they even have nothing to contribute under extreme circumstances.

[结构语言都没什么问题，就是注意不要只列例子，一定要有抽象的分析，然后用例子来阐明。加油！]

bridgewalkerUID: 208595

嗯！例子多分析一下！

嘶喊的牧歌UID: 197463

可看看专才通才的范文里。
B1里是怎么分析那一段引用的。
虽然“”部分占了大半。后面只跟了短短一句阐释。
但是就把整个“”紧紧扣上了TS。