Argument38 自认为还过得去，但限时失败~恳请猛拍，拍必回

freda_xinUID：2133401

Argument38 第一次发Argu，请猛砸！！！！！:L
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces.A study reports that in nearby EastMeria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice prevent colds.Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and word, we recommend the daily use of  Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."

In the argument, the alleged innovative treatment for absence brought forward by the author that using Ichthaid(a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil) daily seems feasible and plausible at first glance, but close inspection would reveal it fraught with oversimplified and unwarranted  claims in several aspects.

In the first place, whether the times of visiting the doctors for the treatment of cold could be a reasonable measure of the times that people catch cold needs to be discussed. Since that actually, when people catch a cold, they usually go to drugstores to buy some Over-the-Counter(OTC) drugs, which are generally competent for the treatment to cure common cold, rather than visit the doctor immediately. Accordingly, unless it can be assured that people in East Meria(EM) visit the doctor as long as they catch a cold, the statistic of times might probably not become a reference.

Further more, granted that people in EM really seldom catch a cold, and while it is true that people there customarily eat a substantial amount of fish, it can not be concluded without a moment's thought that having amount of fish can prevent colds. In respect that in common sense, various factors can lead to colds, such as climate changes, infecting flu virus, being caught in rains, bad environmental conditions and so on. One could audaciously suppose that maybe in EA, the climate is pretty comfortable, and the environment there is fairly good and inhabitable, so people there seldom have colds. In contrast, Even if eating fish can prevent colds at a certain extent, if the climate of WA often changes, or people there have some uncivil habits like expectorating everywhere, throwing garbage away everywhere, having fish perhaps no use for preventing colds.

In addition, that colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work does not mean that colds are the real reason for most of the absences. Because people catching a cold may get well in 1 or 2 days as a rule, as a pretext, catching a cold often becomes the best choice to get a leave of absence. Therefore, there is no sufficient evidence to prove that colds are the very reason causing the absences.

Moreover, assume that all the analysis of the author is reasonable, the conclusion drawn by him/her is questionable. Is that eating fish can prevent colds equal to that eating the nutritional supplement derived from fish oil can prevent colds? Probably not. Besides, it is hard to guarantee that there will not be other new reasons taking place after preventing colds.

To sum up, the argument is neither logically nor persuasive. To better bolster and strengthen the argument, the author would first make a comprehensive and thorough investigation of the reasons why the absenteeism is so high, take a calm analysis about what reported, and then consider the solution,  rather than send such a brash suggestion  to the public.

freda_xinUID：2133401

拼死了写才485个字~~~五五~~~~高手指教字数怎么才能提高（issue 也是，不知怎么才能写长）

mmeiwUID：2101523

485个字还少？！据权威人士说350以上就足够了。还是把精力放在论证上吧：）

In the first place, whether the times of visiting the doctors for the treatment of cold could be a reasonable measure of the times that people catch cold needs to be discussed. Since that actually, when people catch a cold, they usually go to drugstores to buy some Over-the-Counter(OTC) drugs, which are generally competent for the treatment to cure common cold, rather than visit the doctor immediately. Accordingly, unless it can be assured that people in East Meria(EM) visit the doctor as long as they catch a cold, the statistic of times might probably not become a reference. ..（感觉论证不是很充分，套话似乎多于实质论证内容。）

Further more, granted that people in EM really seldom catch a cold, and while it is true that people there customarily eat a substantial amount of fish, it can not be concluded without a moment's thought that having amount of fish can prevent colds. In respect that in common sense, various factors can lead to colds, such as climate changes, infecting flu virus, being caught in rains..（这属于天气变化的一种吧？）, bad environmental conditions and so on. One could audaciously suppose that maybe in EA, the climate is pretty comfortable, and the environment there is fairly good and inhabitable, so people there seldom have colds. In contrast, Even if eating fish can prevent colds at a certain extent, if the climate of WA often changes, or people there have some uncivil habits like expectorating everywhere, throwing garbage away everywhere, having fish perhaps no use for preventing colds...（表达稍微感觉有点乱，语言是否应再组织一下？避免出现重复性内容）

In addition, that colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work does not mean that colds are the real reason for most of the absences. Because people catching a cold may get well in 1 or 2 days as a rule, as a pretext, catching a cold often becomes the best choice to get a leave of absence. Therefore, there is no sufficient evidence to prove that colds are the very reason causing the absences...（总结一下，所以预防感冒并不一定能减少缺席率）

Moreover, assume that all the analysis of the author is reasonable, the conclusion drawn by him/her is questionable. Is that eating fish can prevent colds equal to that eating the nutritional supplement derived from fish oil can prevent colds? Probably not...（why？没有列出原因，如果不是重点批判的点，可以跟在上段的后面提一下，不必另起一段，否则感觉论证很不充分。）. Besides, it is hard to guarantee that there will not be other new reasons taking place after preventing colds....（这句话有点模糊，不知道要表达什么意思）

一点建议：总体感觉批判的点已经足够了，但论证过程有点乱。
               字数不必追求太多，关键是表达清楚，逻辑思路清晰，以理服人。
               
批的够狠吧！能力所限，失礼之处请见谅！:)