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weiweizhuUID：179352

题目：ISSUE 51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
字数：520          用时：0:45:00          日期：2005-9-6

For quite a long time, people have been searching for the best educational system to cultivate the students. Until recently, some educators propose a seemly sound way that designs education specifically to satisfy the individual needs and interests. In my opinion, its start point maybe of importance to some extent, however, utilize it in practice seems unrealistic.

What requires us to realize is that education truly should be different according to different type of students. Some of them are interested in art such as painting and music, with unique perspective on their own. Fantastic inspiration can usually be drawn from their mind. While refer to the natural science, they do not show any capability in dealing with mathematic problem or analyze the physics theory. If this kind of students is forced to take unified courses as physics or chemistry in regular school, too poor performance would hurt their confidence and make them lack of interesting in learning every thing. Not only is it a disaster to students themselves, but our society would also lose brilliant artist in the future.

To make the education suitable for different kind of students, it is really possible to group them and design variety of curriculums for them. However, specifically planning scheme to everyone sounds impossible. The problem lies in that there are so large amount of students waiting to be specially designed,
no any schools or organizations are capable to deal with the work. It is still difficult to find someone who knows what each students need objectively and completely. Maybe somebody would suggest parents' participating. But factors show that even parents know the desire of their children, they usually ignore it and direct a way which they think would better prepare children for future work. For example, Michelangelo, one of the third greatest men in the Renaissance, who show great intelligence ever since the childhood. His father is a carper himself. But when he saw his son interesting in carve, he irritated and throw all the works of Michelangelo. If he abide his fathers will to be a lawyer, we can never seem the great statuary "David".

What is more, the diverse designs make a unified criterion impossible. In the regular school, teachers can distinguish students from their examination score and some competitions. All of them have the same textiles and similar teaching styles which enable them to start at the same line, so the judgement is based on the fair standers and selection would be more efficient. Let us assume that every one study some certain subjects and take examination which just fit their own then get scores bases on such exams, how could the society discriminate excellent from normal? Who can be admitted in the top universities and others go to just normal ones. So many unsolved problems would exist that the proportion would not be taken into action.

Therefore, to designed specific education system so as to meet different kinds of students' satisfaction as well as make a fair and possible stander for society to select students, it is better

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-9-6 at 23:39 ]

mmeiwUID：2101523

For quite a long time, people have been searching for the best educational system to cultivate the students. Until recently, some educators propose a seemly sound way that designs education specifically to satisfy the individual needs and interests. In my opinion, its start point maybe of importance to some extent, however, utilize it in practice seems unrealistic.

What requires us to realize is that education truly should be different according to different type of students. Some of them are interested in art such as painting and music, with unique perspective on their own. Fantastic inspiration can usually be drawn from their mind. While refer to the natural science, they do not show any capability in dealing with mathematic problem or analyze the physics theory. If this kind of students is forced to take unified courses as physics or chemistry in regular school, too poor performance would hurt their confidence and make them lack of interesting in learning every thing. Not only is it a disaster to students themselves, but our society would also lose brilliant artist in the future.（恩，思路有点象，不过语言比我的强多了）
To make the education suitable for different kind of students, it is really possible to group them and design variety of curriculums for them. However, specifically planning scheme to everyone sounds impossible. The problem lies in that there are so large amount of students waiting to be specially designed,
no any schools or organizations are capable to deal with the work. It is still difficult to find someone who knows what each students need objectively and completely. Maybe somebody would suggest parents' participating. But factors show that even parents know the desire of their children, they usually ignore it and direct a way (in) which they think would better prepare children for future work. For example, Michelangelo, one of the third greatest men in the Renaissance, who show great intelligence ever since the childhood. His father is a carper himself. But when he saw his son interesting in carve, he irritated and throw all the works of Michelangelo. If he abide his fathers will to be a lawyer, we can never seem the great statuary "David".(是否应该稍做总结？)

What is more, the diverse designs make a unified criterion impossible. In the regular school, teachers can distinguish students from their examination score and some competitions. All of them have the same textiles and similar teaching styles which enable them to start at the same line, so the judgement is based on the fair standers and selection would be more efficient. Let us assume that every one study some certain subjects and take examination which just fit their own then get scores bases on such exams, how could the society discriminate excellent from normal? Who can be admitted in the top universities and others go to just normal ones. So many unsolved problems would exist that the proportion would not be taken into action.

Therefore, to designed specific education system so as to meet different kinds of students' satisfaction as well as make a fair and possible stander for society to select students, it is better

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weiweizhuUID：179352

我就说为什么一直写不长
一直觉得没话说
原来少了你这段 some alternation to improve education这部分啊


呵呵，下次我要注意了

cxlbread84UID：184012

For quite a long time, people have been searching for the best educational system to cultivate the students. Until recently, some educators propose a seemly sound way that designs education specifically to satisfy the individual needs and interests. In my opinion, its start point maybe（may be,注意词性） of importance to some extent, however, utilize（utilizing or to utilize） it in practice seems unrealistic.

What requires us to realize is that education truly should be different according to different type（types，注意复数形式） of students. Some of them are interested in art such as painting and music, with unique perspective on their own. Fantastic inspiration can usually be drawn from their mind. While refer to（When it comes to，这样地道） the natural science, they do not show any capability in dealing with mathematic problem（problems 不然你要加限定词） or analyze the physics theory. If this kind of students is forced to take unified courses as physics or chemistry in regular school, too poor performance would hurt their confidence and make them lack of interesting in learning every thing. Not only is it a disaster to students themselves, but our society would also lose brilliant artist in the future.

To make the education suitable for different kind（kinds，注意复数形式，again） of students, it is really possible to group them and design variety of curriculums for them. However, specifically planning scheme to everyone sounds impossible. The problem lies in that there are so large amount of students waiting to be specially designed,
no any（not any or no） schools or organizations are capable to deal with the work. It is still difficult to find someone who knows what each students need objectively and completely. Maybe somebody would suggest parents' participating. But factors show that even parents know the desire of their children, they usually ignore it and direct a way which they think would better prepare children for future work. For example, Michelangelo, one of the third greatest men in the Renaissance, who show great intelligence ever since the childhood. His father is a carper himself. But when he saw his son interesting in carve, he irritated and throw all the works of Michelangelo. If he abide his fathers will to be a lawyer, we can never seem the great statuary "David".

What is more, the diverse designs make a unified criterion impossible. In the regular school, teachers can distinguish students from their examination score and some competitions. All of them have the same textiles and similar teaching styles which enable them to start at the same line, so the judgement is based on the fair standers and selection would be more efficient. Let us assume that every one study some certain subjects and take examination which just fit their own then get scores bases on such exams, how could the society discriminate excellent from normal? Who can be admitted in the top universities and others go to just normal ones. So many unsolved problems would exist that the proportion would not be taken into action.

Therefore, to designed specific education system so as to meet different kinds of students' satisfaction as well as make a fair and possible stander for society to select students, it is better

cxlbread84UID：184012

Originally posted by weiweizhu at 2005-9-6 21:12
我就说为什么一直写不长
一直觉得没话说
原来少了你这段 some alternation to improve education这部分啊


呵呵，下次我要注意了

你思路挺清晰的，赞一个先。
However, 520 words are enough, if not too much, for you. What you should pay attention to is your mistakes presented above, rather than the number of words.

foreveraUID：202035

For quite a long time, people have been searching for the best educational system to cultivate the students. Until recently, some educators propose a seemly sound way that designs education specifically to satisfy the individual needs and interests. In my opinion, its start point maybe语法错误。。谓语？ of importance to some extent, however, utilize it in practice seems unrealistic.

What requires us to realize is that education truly should be different according to different type of students. Some of them are interested in art such as painting and music, with unique perspective on their own. Fantastic inspiration can usually be drawn from their mind. While refer to the natural science, they do not show any capability in dealing with mathematic problem or analyze the physics theory. If this kind of students is forced to take unified courses as physics or chemistry in regular school, too poor performance would hurt their confidence and make them lack of interesting in learning every thing. Not only is it a disaster to students themselves, but our society would also lose brilliant artist in the future.

To make the education suitable for different kind of students, it is really possible to group them and design variety of curriculums for them.这里怎么出现转折了呢？要不就把第一句搞到一段。。 However, specifically planning scheme to everyone sounds impossible. The problem lies in that there are so large amount of students waiting to be specially designed, no any schools or organizations are capable to deal with the work. It is still difficult to find someone who knows what each students need objectively and completely. Maybe somebody would suggest parents' participating. But factors show that even parents know the desire of their children, they usually ignore it and direct a way which they think would better prepare children for future work. For example, Michelangelo, 语法啊！！！！one of the third greatest men in the Renaissance, who show great intelligence ever since the childhood. His father is a carper himself. But when he saw his son interesting in carve, he irritated and throw all the works of Michelangelo. If he abide his fathers will to be a lawyer, we can never seem the great statuary "David".例子完了怎么没点总结的？这个例子也和TS没什么关系

What is more, the diverse designs make a unified criterion impossible. In the regular school, teachers can distinguish students from their examination score and some competitions. All of them have the same textiles and similar teaching styles which enable them to start at the same line, so the judgement is based on the fair standers and selection would be more efficient. Let us assume that every one study some certain subjects and take examination which just fit their own then get scores bases on such exams, how could the society discriminate excellent from normal? Who can be admitted in the top universities and others go to just normal ones. So many unsolved problems would exist that the proportion would not be taken into action.

Therefore, to designed specific education system so as to meet different kinds of students' satisfaction as well as make a fair and possible stander for society to select students, it is better


语言还不错。。。不过似乎通篇提到need and interest的地方不怎么多哦。。。。后几段提到的diverse design。。。不过读者也不知道这些design是不是由于meet need and interest带来的呢。。。。