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发表于 2007-2-4 16:33:47 |显示全部楼层
TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
WORDS: 472          TIME: 0:37:00          DATE: 2007-2-4

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1, 有统计得出男人比女人紧张没根据
2,广告目标定在男人没理由
3,强调麻药有效性和员工对病人的理解不一定能有用

By citing statistics collected from dentists which indicate that three times more men than women faint while vesting the dentist, the arguer claims that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than woman are. And accordingly, the argument forwards a recommendation that dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. However, several logical disconnections invalidate this argument.

Firstly, it is not reasonable to assert that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than woman are, by simply quotes the statistics that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. To begin, there are no relative numbers of men and woman in the statistics. If men is more men in the statistics visits dentist, for reasons like men are more likely to have dentist or men are more sensitive to their teeth problems, then it is natural that more men than women faint while visiting the dentist even if there is no underlying difference between men and women in this issue. Lacking of relative numbers between men and women undermines the assertion from the statistics. In addition, there is no ground from the assertion that men faint more than women do is due to the difference in distress. There is possibility that men faint for physical reasons, like men are more sensitive to medicine used in dental care or men waits until serious problems have developed for business or negligence so they encounter more terrible treatment while in the dentist's.

Secondly, the arguer fails to illustrate that why dental advertisement should target men consumers, even if it is true that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done. There is no evidence provided to substantiate that advertisement is able to reduce the distress of men and hence increase men visits, and hence gives a better market effect than targeting at female or without gender specification.

Finally, there is no necessary help that by emphasize both effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients, patient visits would increase. On one hand, it is ungrounded to assume that men are distressed because of pain, or misgiving about the effective of anesthetic. Perhaps they are distressed by the clinic environment or the instrument used in treatment. On the other hand, men may not recognize or expect their nervousness or distresses about dental work. In either case, advertising stresses as advised would not help to attract consumers.

In sum, miss elements and hasty deduction cause the argument lack of convincing power. For a potent argument, the arguer needs to gather more information and to elaborate in rigorous reasoning.

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
WORDS: 472          TIME: 0:37:00          DATE: 2007-2-4

Outline:
1, 有统计得出男人比女人紧张没根据
2,广告目标定在男人没理由
3,强调麻药有效性和员工对病人的理解不一定能有用

By citing statistics collected from dentists which indicate that three times more men than women faint while vesting the dentist, the arguer claims that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than woman are. And accordingly, the argument forwards a recommendation that dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. However, several logical disconnections invalidate this argument.

Firstly, it is not reasonable to assert that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than woman are, by simply quotes the statistics that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. To begin, there are no relative numbers of men and woman in the statistics. If men is more men in the statistics visits dentist, for reasons like men are more likely to have dentist or men are more sensitive to their teeth problems, then it is natural that more men than women faint while visiting the dentist even if there is no underlying difference between men and women in this issue. Lacking of relative numbers between men and women undermines the assertion from the statistics. In addition, there is no ground from the assertion that men faint more than women do is due to the difference in distress. There is possibility that men faint for physical reasons, like men are more sensitive to medicine used in dental care or men waits until serious problems have developed for business or negligence so they encounter more terrible treatment while in the dentist's.

Secondly, the arguer fails to illustrate that why dental advertisement should target men consumers, even if it is true that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done. There is no evidence provided to substantiate that advertisement is able to reduce the distress of men and hence increase men visits, and hence gives a better market effect than targeting at female or without gender specification.

Finally, there is no necessary help that by emphasize both effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients, patient visits would increase. On one hand, it is ungrounded to assume that men are distressed because of pain, or misgiving about the effective of anesthetic. Perhaps they are distressed by the clinic environment or the instrument used in treatment. On the other hand, men may not recognize or expect their nervousness or distresses about dental work. In either case, advertising stresses as advised would not help to attract consumers.

In sum, miss elements and hasty deduction cause the argument lack of convincing power. For a potent argument, the arguer needs to gather more information and to elaborate in rigorous reasoning.

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