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发表于 2007-3-8 12:04:17 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Issue 208         用时1小时20分钟
With the current rapid development of the culture, it has been more and more difficult to get a deep comprehension of a society's ideas and values though an overall careful analyzing of the history of the culture. Consequently, people tend to judge these from observing the appearance and behaviors of the society's people basing on the common sense that people' attitudes and interests determine the way they look, dress and act. However, because of the complexity and diversity of society, in some cases, this common sense may not be effective as people expect.

To a large extent, how people dress, in what way they act are impacted by their personal attitude and interests. In fact, performing and behaviors is a very common way for people to express their ideas and preference. For instance, young people often show preference to the fashionable clothes which contain some factors like lighting and different colors, outstanding designing. Chasing fashion seems to their entrance key to the contemporary social team, which represent their desire to express their characters. By contrast, old people don't have the same preference and prefer to wear clothing that is more traditional, which show their treasuring of past memory and seeking for peaceful lives.

           In some cases, appearance and behaviors of people really provide an accurate signal about the values and ideas. The society itself is constituted by individuals and the relationship between them and social trend and preference is the representation of individual common values. For instance, in the middle-east countries, the black clothing of women cover them so completely that we can only see their eyes and in social custom it is not allowed from them to appear in the public place such as the football yard and political meeting even appearing on the TV is forbidden. This is a reflection of the discrimination of women in these countries. In the European countries, it is common to see variety of different clothes on the road and any public places is opened for everyone, which show the liberty and democracy concept of the society.

           However, in some respects we will not get accurate and complete understanding of a social culture just by interviewing the appearance and behaviors of its people. There are two facts supporting this judgment. Firstly, people will take on different clothes according to different conditions and surroundings. For example, it is very common for people to dress well on a ball or on a banquet. So we should not make the judgment that value of the society is chasing flamboyance and enjoyment. Secondly, if we just judge a person by his performance, sometimes we will lose the fact. A well-dressing and acting with manners gentlemen can be a successful person in a field and also can be a ferocious and relentless planter controlling hundreds of slaves. Unfortunately, our tending to coherent good performance and good nature leads to losing of the real fact.

           In sum, when we just need a superficial understanding of a society' values, judging from people's behavior and appearance may be the most convenient and effective way. And when we need a further and overall comprehension, much more should be done.



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Argument 47
1.       没有遗留下来历史纪录闪光并不代表没有闪光,有可能记录闪光的历史记录都遗失了本来留下来的纪录就很少,也可能小行星撞击位置是无人区或是在海洋上。
2.       a loud sound 并不一定就是火山爆发产生的,也可能是小行星撞击的声音。
3.       文章中缺少证据说明造成气候变冷的原因就是这两种中之一,还有其他的可能如冰川活动等

Argument 140
1.       班级大不一定就是因为受欢迎
2.       给学校带来的研究资助超过她的年薪不能说明她的teaching and research abilities
3.       没有证据表明如果不加薪Thomas就会离开Elm City 大学到别的学校就职。
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今天累了,等睡一会再上来

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With the current rapid development of the culture, it has been more and more difficult to get a deep comprehension of a society's ideas and values though an overall careful analyzing of the history of the culture.(这句话是想做一个让步,说不能从Culture的history看出社会的一些特征吧,感觉有点冗长,而且history不是很适合吧,改成传成及包含了古又有今会不会好一些) Consequently, people tend to judge these from observing the appearance and behaviors of the society's people basing on the common sense that people' attitudes and interests determine the way they look, dress and act. However, because of the complexity and diversity of society, in some cases, this common sense may not be effective as people expect.--感觉这段话逻辑比较混乱,先是否定了可以从culture history看社会,从后consequently让人感觉应该可以从attitudes and interest获得信息,然而最后However还是否定...(最后是不是想部分否定的啊,但是没有表现出来)

To a large extent, how people dress, in what way they act are impacted by their personal attitude and interests. In fact, performing and behaviors is a very common way for people to express their ideas and preference. For instance, young people often show preference to the fashionable clothes which contain some factors like lighting and different colors, outstanding designing. Chasing fashion seems to their entrance key to the contemporary social team, which represent their desire to express their characters. By contrast, old people don't have the same preference and prefer to wear clothing that is more traditional, which show their treasuring of past memory and seeking for peaceful lives.--写完两个例子后,再加点总结是不是更好~

           In some cases, appearance and behaviors of people really provide an accurate signal about the values and ideas. The society itself is constituted by individuals and the relationship between them and social trend and preference is the representation of individual common values. For instance, in the middle-east countries, the black clothing of women cover them so completely that we can only see their eyes and in social custom it is not allowed from them to appear in the public place such as the football yard and political meeting even appearing on the TV is forbidden. This is a reflection of the discrimination of women in these countries. In the European countries, it is common to see variety of different clothes on the road and any public places is opened for everyone, which show the liberty and democracy concept of the society.--还是应该再分析下例子,总结一下的

(第二节在第一节的基础之上做了一个递进,从个人上升到社会,很8错哦-举的例子也很有说服力)

           However, in some respects we will not get accurate and complete understanding of a social culture just by interviewing the appearance and behaviors of its people. There are two facts supporting this judgment. Firstly, people will take on different clothes according to different conditions and surroundings. For example, it is very common for people to dress well on a ball or on a banquet. So we should not make the judgment that value of the society is chasing flamboyance and enjoyment. Secondly, if we just judge a person by his performance, sometimes we will lose the fact. A well-dressing and acting with manners gentlemen can be a successful person in a field and also can be a ferocious and relentless planter controlling hundreds of slaves. Unfortunately, our tending to coherent good performance and good nature leads to losing of the real fact.

--感觉第一个First后的例子表述的意思不清楚,是想讲people will take on different clothes according to different conditions and surroundings.但这与这段的论点有什么联系没有说明出来。

           In sum, when we just need a superficial understanding of a society' values, judging from people's behavior and appearance may be the most convenient and effective way. And when we need a further and overall comprehension, much more should be done.


--angway,一篇很工整的文章,思路也很清晰~学习~

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发表于 2007-3-13 21:19:46 |只看该作者
With the current rapid development of the culture, it has been more and more difficult to get a deep comprehension of a society's ideas and values though an overall careful analyzing of the history of the culture. Consequently, people tend to judge these from observing the appearance and behaviors of the society's people basing (?很少见这种用法啊)on the common sense that people' attitudes and interests determine the way they look, dress and act. However, because of the complexity and diversity of society, in some cases, this common sense may not be effective as people expect.(写得好啊,both句式and逻辑)

To a large extent, how people dress, in what way they act are impacted by their personal attitude and interests. In fact, performing and behaviors is a very common way for people to express their ideas and preference. For instance, young people often show preference to the fashionable clothes which contain some factors like lighting and different colors, outstanding designing. Chasing fashion seems to their entrance key to the contemporary social team, which represent their desire to express their characters. By contrast, old people don't have the same preference and prefer to wear clothing that is more traditional, which show their treasuring of past memory and seeking for peaceful lives.(这个对比写得满好的)


           In some cases, appearance and behaviors of people really provide an accurate signal about the values and ideas. The society itself is constituted by individuals and the relationship between them and social trend and preference is (这里似乎应该用are吧)the representation of individual common values. For instance, in the middle-east countries, the black clothing of women cover them so completely that we can only see their eyes and in social custom it is not allowed from (?from?)them to appear in the public place such as the football yard and political meeting even appearing on the TV is forbidden. This is a reflection of the discrimination of women in these countries. In the European countries, it is common to see variety of different clothes on the road and any public places is opened for everyone, which show the liberty and democracy concept of the society.

           However, in some respects we will not get accurate and complete understanding of a social culture just by interviewing the appearance and behaviors of its people. (这种写两面得方法值得借鉴,我一直不敢两边都说)There are two facts supporting this judgment. Firstly, people will take on different clothes according to different conditions and surroundings. For example, it is very common for people to dress well on a ball or on a banquet. So we should not make the judgment that value of the society is chasing flamboyance and enjoyment. Secondly, if we just judge a person by his performance, sometimes we will lose the fact. A well-dressing and acting with manners gentlemen can be a successful person in a field and also can be a ferocious and relentless planter controlling hundreds of slaves. Unfortunately, our tending to coherent good performance and good nature leads to losing of the real fact.

           In sum, when we just need a superficial understanding of a society' values, judging from people's behavior and appearance may be the most convenient and effective way. And when we need a further and overall comprehension, much more should be done.(感觉结尾写得单薄了)

老大,你是怎么复习得?讲讲经验吧。

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