argument200 "为我所用" 第十二次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collectedfrom dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint whilevisiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to bedistressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists whoadvertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasizeboth the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity oftheir staff to nervous or suffering patients.
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The author recommends that dentists whomake an advertisement to attract patients should target the male consumer andemphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and thesensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients because he offerstatistics to demonstrate it. After careful examination, I find some logicflaws in this argument which make it unconvincing as it stands.

To begin with, for statistics to beaccurate, it must be provided detailed data. In the argument above, though, weknow nothing the total amount of the male patients and the female patients. Ifthe fact is that the total amount of male patients is completely huger thanwomen's then it is no wonder that more men faint when they visiting the dentistthan women. In addition, the statistics also provides nothing about the ages,backgrounds, and general health of the patients’ involved. Further, if mostmale patients are children or the olds, while most women are actually adults,it is also can explain such a reason. If either scenario is the case,statistics which dentists provide fail to convince us any more.

Secondly, even assuming that three timesmore men than women faint, it is too hasty to draw a conclusion that men aremore likely to be distressed than women when they had dental work done. Perhapswomen are afraid and refused to visit dentist at the beginning they realizedthat such disease has occurred to them. They lose their courage to visitdentist, contrast with men, though they also feel distressed and even faint,they still persist to visit dentist. Without considering and ruling out such apossibility, the author cannot persuade us that men are more distressed thanwomen when visiting the dentist.

Thirdly, the author advised the dentistthat they should target male consumers and emphasize the skillful anestheticstechniques and sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.However, the author fails to offer any evidence to demonstrate that the sensitivityof dentists can keep patients calm even relax their tensions. Perhaps a gloomyand cold operation room has distressed patients and they otherwise faint. Itappears reasonable, therefore, for dentists who plan to attract more consumersneed focus on this possible situation than just techniques and sensitivity.

In sum, it is pitiful that author'srecommendation unconvincingly persuades us. To bolster it, the author shouldprovide detailed total amounts of both male and female patients and detaileddocuments about the whole patients. To better improve it, I also need astatistic about how many patients refuse to visit dentist. In addition, theauthor should emphasis more on improving the condition of the clinic as it maybe a reason why patients always faint.