Issue120

swbaiUID: 2600532

【09年2月-3月GRE作文突击小组】swbai2月6日作文issue120
题目：ISSUE120 - "So much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living in the present."
字数：448          用时：0:45          日期：2009-2-10
Today's society is changing faster than ever. To survive from the society and make a good living, one needs to study the knowledge from time to time. The rise of the computer technology and the internet in recent decades makes all of the employees have the ability of using computer to catch up with the trend of industrialization.
But this does not mean that men could neglect the study of the past and the ancient knowledge. Learning from the past attributes greatly to the development of human society. Study of former achievements often inspires the present of human race. For example, a student inspired by the courage and tenacity of history's great explores might decide as a result to pursue a career in archeology, oceanography, or astronomy. This decision can, in turn, profoundly affect that student's everyday life in school and beyond. Even for student not inclined to pursue these sorts of careers, studying historical examples of courage in the face of adversity can provide motivation to face their own personal fears in life. In short, learning about grand accomplishments of the past can help us get through the everyday business of living, whatever that business might be, by emboldening us and lifting our spirits.
In addition, mistakes of the past can teach us how to avoid repeating those mistakes. As get through the history of the two world wars, the Germanys always regret their mistakes of war in the anniversary day. As the reorganize of the history, they never make the same mistake again. Thus all the people around the world do not take war again, which made the Germanys flourish as those days. As the nations which are invaded, they should remember the mistreat which is the cause of the poor more vividly, and this is a power of the development of the nation, a drug which keeps a nation awake all the time. And at the same time, remembering the disaster which war has brought to people, can help the entire nation to avoid war in solving all of the problems.
Studying human history can also help us understand and appreciate the morals, values, and ideals of past cultures. A heightened awareness of cultural evolution, in turn, helps us formulate informed and reflective values and ideals for ourselves. Based on these values and ideals, students can determine their authentic life path as well as how they should allot their time and interact with others on a day-to-day basis. Finally, it might be tempting to imply from the speaker's allegation that studying history has little relevance even for the mundane chores that occupy so much of our time each day, and therefore is of little value.

ccdUID: 2535452

我今天晚上下课了回来改，好吗？

保证~

ccdUID: 2535452

【09年2月-3月GRE作文突击小组】swbai2月6日作文issue120
题目：ISSUE120 - "So much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living in the present."
字数：448          用时：0:45          日期：2009-2-10

Today's society is changing faster than ever. To survive from the society and make a good living, one needs to study the knowledge from time to time. The rise of the computer technology and the internet in recent decades makes all of the employees have the ability of using computer to catch up with the trend of industrialization.(The rise of the computer technology and the internet enables people to catch up with the trend of industrialization.这样表达更简练一点~employee是相对而说的，放这里好像不太合适)

But this does not mean that men could neglect the study of the past and the ancient knowledge.（这一句放在首段末尾的话逻辑会更清晰一点） Learning from the past attributes greatly to the development of human society. Study of former achievements often inspires the present of human race. （？）For example, a student inspired by the courage and tenacity of history's great explores might decide as a result to pursue a career in archeology, oceanography, or astronomy. This decision can, in turn, profoundly affect that student's everyday life in school and beyond. Even for student not inclined to pursue these sorts of careers, studying historical examples of courage in the face of （这个词组中间没有冠词THE吧。）adversity can provide motivation to face their own personal fears in life. In short, learning about grand accomplishments of the past can help us get through the everyday business of living, whatever that business might be, by emboldening us and lifting our spirits.

In addition, mistakes of the past can teach us how to avoid repeating those mistakes. As get through the history of the two world wars, the Germanys always regret their mistakes of war in the anniversary day. As the reorganize of the history, they (+will） never make the same mistake again. Thus all the people around the world do not take war again, （这句不太实际和严谨）which made the Germanys flourish as those days. As the nations which are invaded, they should remember the mistreat which is the cause of the poor more vividly, and this is a power of the development of the nation, a drug which keeps a nation awake all the time. And at the same time, remembering the disaster which war has brought to people, can help the entire nation to avoid war in solving all of the problems.

Studying human history can also help us understand and appreciate the morals, values, and ideals of past cultures. A heightened awareness of cultural evolution, in turn, helps us formulate informed and reflective values and ideals for ourselves. Based on these values and ideals, students can determine their authentic life path as well as how they should allot their time and interact with others on a day-to-day basis. Finally, it might be tempting to imply from the speaker's allegation that studying history has little relevance even for the mundane chores that occupy so much of our time each day, and therefore is of little value.

蓝色是我觉得你写得很好的句子~逻辑上很通畅，语言也不错~！
绿色的是我觉得有待商榷的~你参考一下吧！
红色的是我没看懂的。。

PS：弱弱地说，对我的文章你能不能再多给点意见啊。。