Issue130 【☆09GRE作文冲刺组】swbai2月28日作文

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题目：ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
字数：511          用时：0:45:00          日期：2009-2-28
Everyone talk about education, which is essential in our daily lives. Education is an investment, which can cause big return indeed; education is the inheriting of national culture, through people know what their ancestors do and how glorious of the nation's past; education is also a media, which pass the useful information of modern technologies, which is the power of production. As it is so important, we can not help to think about it seriously. How does the education of children determines the society, and what can we do to make a better society through education of children?

Education of children benefits the whole society. Looking back to human history, the nation which concerns much about the education of children still have their essence of culture of thousands of years ago, which leads to the flourish of the nation, and also contributes great on the culture of human race. Take the Judah for example. As the nation nearly lost its terrain for two thousand years, surprisingly, they inherited their culture in David's time, and their language, has never been changed. The Judah culture now has widespread all over the world, especially their business culture. All of this is due the essence of children education.

The education of children should not only be concerned with teachers, but also parents as well. Parents stay with the children for a very long time, and their actions are copied by children as well. The way parents think about value, how to choose friends, and whether the parents are lazy about work or not strongly influence the children. There are many cases, that because of the father smoke, the son smoke too, just as what his father did. Then the parents must have no bad habits in front of children. The teacher did this as well. Sometimes people say that a teacher who does not have a devotion on his works cannot teach his student to fight hard for their jobs. So what the teacher should do is to take care of their work and inspires the children as well.

Certain available methods are present to educate, all the teacher have to do is just make some promotion of it. Two methods of education is present. The Chinese teaches their students to concentrate on learning and remembering the knowledge which is useful, while the Americans emphasis on find new knowledge oneself. Then big gaps come to the two: the Chinese is good at using old knowledge and makes fewer mistakes, yet not well at finding new things, while the American is good at creative thinking and do badly on calculation. So the key point is how to avoid the bad effects of both and benefit from both. A mingle of two methods is acceptable and must be efficient, and it has been in test in many place of China.

In conclusion, education of children is determining the development of whole society. We care about ourselves, and we also care about our futures. Only through seriously consideration of education can we finally make the fast development of our society.

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Everyone talk about education, which is essential in our daily lives. Education is an investment, which can cause big return indeed; education is the inheriting of national culture, through people know what their ancestors do and how glorious of(is) the nation's past; education is also a media, which pass the useful information of modern technologies, which is the power of production. As it is so important, we can not help to think about it seriously. How does(去掉) the education of children determines the society, and what can we do to make a better society through education of children?

Education of children benefits the whole society. Looking back to human history, the nation which concerns much about the education of children still have their essence of culture of thousands of years ago, which leads to the flourish(这个词名词的意思貌似和动词不一样，用prosperity吧) of the nation, and also contributes great on the culture of human race. Take the Judah for example. As the nation nearly lost its terrain for two thousand years, surprisingly, they inherited their culture in David's time, and their language, has never been changed. The Judah culture now has widespread all over the world, especially their business culture. All of this is due the essence of children education.

The education of children should not only be concerned with teachers, but also parents as well. Parents stay with the children for a very long time, and their actions are copied by children as well. The way parents think about value, how to choose friends, and whether the parents are lazy about work or not(怎么感觉有点冒然,不要也足够吧) strongly influence the children. There are many cases, that because of the father smoke, the son smoke too, just as what his father did.(There are many cases indicate that the phenomenon of children smoking is just a imitation of their fathers. 仅为建议 ) Then the parents must have（conduct） no bad habits in front of children. The teacher did（must fallow） this as well. Sometimes people say that a teacher who does not have a devotion(devotion就好,它不可数) on his works cannot teach his student to fight hard for their jobs. So what the teacher should do is to take care of their work and inspires the children as well（不确定这里可不可以换成in the meanwhile,但感觉as well用太多了）.

Certain available methods are present to educate, all the teacher have to do is just make some promotion of it. Two methods of education is(are) present. The Chinese teaches their students to concentrate on learning and remembering the knowledge which is useful, while the Americans emphasis on find（finding） new knowledge oneself. Then big gaps come to the two: the Chinese is good at using old knowledge and makes fewer mistakes, yet not well at finding new things, while the American is good at creative thinking and do badly on calculation. So the key point is how to avoid the bad effects of both and benefit from both. A mingle of two methods is acceptable and must be efficient, and it has been in test in many place of China.

In conclusion, education of children is determining the development of whole society. We care about ourselves, and we also care about our futures. Only through seriously consideration of education can we finally make the fast（steady and continued比较适合吧） development of our society.


啊，，这是我第一次改别人作文咧，，有错的话请多多包涵噢
很羡慕你可以写够字数啊
我都没话可说老是在抠用词