issue144 【0906G背水一战三月小组】第2次作业 By Yuanhuijun

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Issue144
提纲：1.支持论题观点，艺术家给社会带来一些具有持久价值的东西。
     2.提出评论家的作用。论证评论家也可以给社会带来一些具有价值的东西。
    3.说明两者之间的互补关系。两者都可以给社会带来有价值的东西。


  Is it the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of last value? In response to this issue,we need to analyze the proposition,comprehensively from the  dialectic perspective,investigating the nature of the truth by critical analysis of concepts and hypotheses.The author declares that it is the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of lasting value.However,it over simplifies this issue.The final judgment in my point of view should depend on a case-by-case analysis.



First and foremost, at the risk of sounding too simplistic. My main proposition that the art hold  important status in society Can be  summarized in one saying that the artist gives society something of lasting value.Art ,in its broadest meaning,is the expression of creativity or imagination .




However,the critic gives society something of lasting value .Critics can help us understand and interpret art,a critic who is familiar with a particular artist and his or her works might have certain insight s about those works that layman would not.Also a critic's evaluation of an art work serves as a filter which helps us determine which art is worth our time and attention. The critic can provide feedback for artists and constructive criticism, if taken to heart, can result in better work.



To successfully curb such unfavorable blights, it is imperative for us to take several efficacious steps into consideration.Artists and critics supplement each other. As time passes ,the greatest works are those which are created by artists and evaluated by critics which draw people's attention towards those works.


Form the analyses made above .I strongly commit to the notion that we need to call for a balance between the artists and the critics.

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iIssue144
提纲：1.支持论题观点，艺术家给社会带来一些具有持久价值的东西。
     2.提出评论家的作用。论证评论家也可以给社会带来一些具有价值的东西。
    3.说明两者之间的互补关系。两者都可以给社会带来有价值的东西。


  Is it the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of last value? In response to this issue,we need to analyze the proposition,comprehensively from the  dialectic perspective,investigating the nature of the truth by critical analysis of concepts and hypotheses.The author declares that it is the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of lasting value.（都是在引作者观点 没必要重复两遍吧，或者改改句型，最好换个说法，比如你可以开头不使用问句，而是写社会上对这二者的看法）However,it over simplifies this issue.The final judgment in my point of view should depend on a case-by-case analysis.



First and foremost, at the risk of sounding too simplistic.（主语呢？？） My main proposition that the art hold  important status in society Can be  summarized in one saying that the artist gives society something of lasting value.Art ,in its broadest meaning,is the expression of creativity or imagination .（这句应该是你的论点吧，论据呢？）




However,the critic gives society something of lasting value .Critics can help us understand and interpret art,a critic who is familiar with a particular artist and his or her works might have certain insight s about those works that layman would not.Also a critic's evaluation of an art work serves as a filter which helps us determine which art is worth our time and attention. The critic can provide feedback for artists and constructive criticism, if taken to heart, can result in better work.（本段内容较上段显丰富些， 不过我觉得三小点都可以有深入些的空间，比如有了critic的这些帮助之后，art 对大众来说有了那些具体的变化呢）



To successfully curb such unfavorable blights, it is imperative for us to take several efficacious steps into consideration. Artists and critics supplement each other.（怎么个supplement,为什么他们之间要supple,最好写的具体些） As time passes ,the greatest works are those which are created by artists and evaluated by critics which draw people's attention towards those works.（How??）


Form the analyses made above .I strongly commit to the notion that we need to call for a balance between the artists and the critics.
总结：首先我觉得各段模板化有点重啊，如果每段都能深入论证的话，这样的模板是没有问题的，但是每段都是感觉看到了论点，正打算看精妙论证时，没了。语言还行，就是不够深入，只有理没有证和因。个人见解而已！

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语法和修辞 我也很菜 我谢谢我对内容的看法把
Is it the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of last value? In response to this issue,we need to analyze the proposition,comprehensively from the  dialectic perspective,investigating the nature of the truth by critical analysis of concepts and hypotheses.The author declares that it is the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of lasting value.However,it over simplifies this issue.The final judgment in my point of view should depend on a case-by-case analysis.
首先，这个开头段里面，对作者的观点阐述的有点多，  一个疑问句中包含了，后面又再叙述一遍，觉得这样不好，建议是 可以写成I disagree with the author’s proposition that it is the artist ,not the critic ,who gives society something of lasting value. 因为你用the author declares 的话，等于重复一遍题目，并且没给出你的观点，这样不是很有利。


First and foremost, at the risk of sounding too simplistic. My main proposition that the art hold  important status in society Can be  summarized in one saying that the artist gives society something of lasting value.Art ,in its broadest meaning,is the expression of creativity or imagination .

连接词用的不太好，个人感觉， First of all 就可以。  这段是支持观点的，最好写一两个例子，不然显得单薄，比方说 why the art hold important status in society？ 可以 举出一两点 比方说 它对文化的承载作用，给人们美感，等等，不需要穷举 但一定要写一点。。。并且最好配上例子


However,the critic gives society something of lasting value .Critics can help us understand and interpret art,a critic who is familiar with a particular artist and his or her works might have certain insight s about those works that layman would not.Also a critic's evaluation of an art work serves as a filter which helps us determine which art is worth our time and attention. The critic can provide feedback for artists and constructive criticism, if taken to heart, can result in better work.

However,the critic gives society something of lasting value .Critics can help us understand and interpret art，转的太急了。。。我的建议  （不是很好） 用not only artist 创造价值，。but critic also   做出贡献的。。。这个句型，而且 话也太白了基本上抄袭题目的，最好有点改写，还是缺乏例子
To successfully curb such unfavorable blights, it is imperative for us to take several efficacious steps into consideration.Artists and critics supplement each other. As time passes ,the greatest works are those which are created by artists and evaluated by critics which draw people's attention towards those works.

缺乏例子的论述。。。不太具备说服力。。。。。
Form the analyses made above .I strongly commit to the notion that we need to call for a balance between the artists and the critics.
观点 我觉得前面给比后面给好，，，，不要有千呼万唤死出来的感觉。。。。


嗯 我自己也是写不好~~~这是我浅薄的一些意见把~~~希望对楼主有用

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2# 周禹馨

非常感谢～哎不是我不想写例子啊  我自己都不知道这两者能有什么例子可以说！直接就是没有话写issue太痛苦了！还请指点一二啊～

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3# 小出云

谢谢你给予的宝贵意见。

我真的很菜了啦 不是我不想说例子～是实在是不知道说什么。我对这个题目就没什么看法 愁人～还望指点啊～