argument216【0906背水一战三月小组】第三次作业 by yuxin

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题目：ARGUMENT216 - The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.

"Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
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日期：3/4/2009 5:04:53 PM
住房消费较去年低不一定就合适，可能一向都相当高；房产税可能比非邻近高，这样的话人们不一定非选择在这。
承诺问题，比一定实现，承诺内容不一定使人有兴趣，可能还正好说明现在该地不好。
医生数量不能表明医疗质量

In the article, the speaker recommend that the Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. He figures out seeming attractive advantages of living in Clearview, including the fallen significantly housing costs, the lower real estate taxes, the mayor's promises and the greater number of physicians. However, all of them can not be effective evidence supporting his conclusion, for he oversimplified some factors.

To begin with, the information of housing costs and real estate taxes cannot follow that the living costs can be cheaper in Clearview. On the one hand, the author fails to provide information about the housing cost in the past year, then even if the housing costs have fallen significantly, we cannot ensure they will cheap enough. It is entirely possible that the housing cost there is very high for several years, and the after reducing, it is still unaffordable for the retired. On the other hand, only stating the real estate taxes remaining lower than the neighboring towns, we cannot ensure it will be suitable to seek Clearview as the retiring place. Perhaps the real estate taxes in the non-neighboring places are even lower, and if so it is hard to persuading the people to seek here.

What's more, the author assumes that the promise made by the mayor could attract the retired, however, it is may not the case at all. First, since there the schools, streets and public services would be improved, it may imply that the current situation is terrible or out of desire, and it may be prevent people to seeking living in Clearview. Second, they may concern little about the improvement of school, then this point cannot serve to attract p. Third, the author fails to tell people when the promise can be carried to effect. Perhaps the new program cannot be complete if the mayor is lost in the next election. Without considering these scenarios, the author can hardly convince us the Clearview is the top choice.

Finally, in asserting the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average, he assumes that the retired who intend to choose Clearview can enjoy excellent health care. Common sense tells us that the greater number of the physicians does not mean the higher quality, if it is actually the case, the excellent health can be open to doubt. In addition, the author has not offered the information about the physicians, may be only a small of them are suitable for the old people, while most of them are the pediatricians. Also, there is possibility that the density of people in Clearview is greater than the national average, and then the physician will not be enough for the people here, when considering the ratio of doctor to patient. The information is so incomplete that the the health care in Clearview is highly suspicious.

In sum, so untenable is the argument, we cannot be convinced that the Clearview will be a top choice for the retire people. In order to better buttress the argument, the speaker need to make sure what are the retire people most concern before jumping to his conclusion.

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In the article (this argument or advertisement), the speaker recommend that the Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. He figures out seeming (ed)attractive advantages of living in Clearview, including the fallen significantly housing costs, the lower real estate taxes, the mayor's promises and the greater number of physicians. However, all of them can not be effective evidence supporting his conclusion, for he oversimplified some factors.

(or you could point out first which kind of logical mistake the author makes)
To begin with, the information of housing costs and real estate taxes cannot follow (represent) that the living costs can be cheaper in Clearview. On the one hand, the author fails to provide information about the housing cost in the past year, then even if the housing costs have fallen significantly, we cannot ensure they will be cheap enough. It is entirely possible that the housing cost there is very high for several years, and then after reducing, it is still unaffordable for the retired people. On the other hand, only stating the real estate taxes remaining lower than the neighboring towns, we cannot ensure it will be suitable to seek Clearview as the retiring place. Perhaps the real estate taxes in the non-neighboring places are even lower, and if so it is hard to persuading(e) the people to seek (chose) here.

What's more, the author assumes that the promise made by the mayor could attract the retired, however, it is may (maybe) not the case at all. First, since there(delete) the schools, streets and public services would be improved, it may imply that the current situation is terrible or out of desire, and it may be(delete) prevent people to (from) seeking living in Clearview. Second, they may concern little about the improvement of school, then this point cannot serve to attract p. Third, the author fails to tell people when the promise can be carried to effect. Perhaps the new program cannot be complete (or start?) if the mayor is lost in the next election. Without considering (explaining) these scenarios, the author can hardly convince us the Clearview is the top choice.

Finally, in asserting the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average, he assumes that the retired (people) who intend to choose Clearview can enjoy excellent health care. Common sense tells us (a little chinese, it is a common sense) that the greater number of the physicians does not mean the higher quality, if it is actually the case, the excellent health can be open to doubt.(I feel you are talking to yourself) In addition, the author has not offered the information about the physicians, may be only a small number of them are suitable for the old people, while most of them are the pediatricians. Also, there is possibility that the density of people in Clearview is greater than the national average, and then the physician will not be enough for the people here, when considering the ratio of doctor to patient. The information is so incomplete that the the health care in Clearview is highly suspicious.(we also need surgeon)

In sum, so untenable is the argument, we cannot be convinced that the Clearview will be a top choice for the retire people. In order to better buttress the argument, the speaker need to make sure what are (delete) the retire people most concern before jumping to his conclusion.

总体感觉挺好的，你可以选择性的做一个自己的模版，还是很有用的，在考试的时候
改得不恰当的地方见谅  ：）

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