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glasses415UID: 2603267

Many teachers assign homework to students every day.Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students ?Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.


Remember when I was a primary scholar, my life was full of homework and I could hardly to get some time for me to play with my friends .Also in junior middle school and senior high school, just after school, the homework came to me. So I hated the homework what the teachers assign to us very ,very much. And I didn’t think the daily homework is necessary for us students.

To begin with, always daily homework is just that review the lessons we had , do a preview on the lesson we will learn and do some exercise .Also ,the need for home work differs from subject to subject.In my opinion,homework is mostly like the policy something teachers give us and we have to do it.,whatever we need it or not.. Sometimes ,although we had learn the lessons very well and we must to do the daily homework. That just a series of meaningless exercises. It’s a waste of time.No homework can not be that we are not studying on the way.

Otherwise,with the amounts of daily homework for the students,they had little time to do something they like.Perhaps in their leisure time after school,they could do some play things and learn something for their hobbies.But with the daily homework above them, they could do almost nothing.In the era of 21century,having a high score isn’t a key to success,doing daily homework isn’t the key to having a high score. Just let the children be theirselves.

For what I am thinking above,come to the conclusion.I don’t the daily homework is so necessary as the teachers think about. Lots of daily homework may also cause an opposite effects and a student will learn less.To teach the students how to study ,don’t just let them to study.

capricon2006UID: 2278984

(Remember) when I was a primary scholar, my life was full of homework and I could hardly (to) get some time (for me) to play with my friends .Also in junior middle school and senior high school, just after school, the homework came to me. So I hated the homework what (改为that) (the) teachers assign to us very, very much. And (Then) I didn’t (don’t) think the daily homework is necessary for us students.

To begin with, always daily homework is just (that) review (reviewing) the lessons we (加上has) had, do (doing) a preview on the lesson we will learn and (or) do (doing) some exercise. (Also,) the need for home work differs from subject to subject. In my opinion, homework is mostly like the policy (something) teachers give us and we have to do (it), whatever (without ask us if ) we need it or not. Sometimes, although we had learn (learnt) the lessons very well (and), we must (to) do the daily homework. That (加上is) just (a series of) meaningless exercises(. It’s 改为and ) a waste of time. No homework can not be that we are not studying on the way. (没看懂这句话)

Otherwise (otherwise表转折，Further more), with (because of) the amounts of (much, lots of) daily homework (for the students), they (students) had (have) little time to do something they like. Perhaps (in their leisure time) after school, they could do some play things (play games) and (or) learn something for their hobbies. But (However,) with the (so much) daily homework (above them), they could (can) do almost nothing. In the era of 21century (In the 21st century), having a high score isn’t a key to success, doing daily homework isn’t the key to having a high score. Just let the children be theirselves (themselves). (最后两句排比句不是很恰当)

For what I am thinking above, come to the conclusion. (不通，改为For reasons as above,) I don’t (think) the daily homework is so necessary as the teachers think (about). Lots of daily homework may (also) cause an opposite (negative) effects (effect) (and a student will learn less多余). To teach (the) students how to study, (加上but) don’t just let them (to) study.

总结：

1. 楼主语法知识严重欠缺，很多语句是直接把中文“按顺序”翻译过来的。对连词、冠词的使用尤是……
2. 文章结构虽然正确，但内容空泛。例子也不是很好，文章缺乏逻辑性。词汇也较简单

可能lz学英语没有多长时间吧，加油！！

yoyodandyUID: 2456812

Remember when I was a primary scholar（这个词一般是用来指学者student）, my life was full of homework and I could hardly get some time (for me语义重复） to play with my friends. Also in junior middle school and senior high school, the homework came to me after school. So I hated the homework what the teachers assigned to us very ,very much（有些Chinglish）. And I don’t think the daily homework is necessary for us.

To begin with, doing daily homework is for reviewing the lessons we have learnt, previewing the lesson we will learn. But the need for home work differs from subject to subject. In my opinion, homework is mostly like the policy that something teachers give us which we have to do, whatever we need it or not. Sometimes, although we had learnt the lessons very well，we still have to do the daily homework as for me is just like a series of meaningless exercises. It’s a waste of time. No homework can not be that we are not studying on the way.(不是很能理解这句话的意思。)
你的主题句表达的意思是做daily homework的好处，而你支持的观点是每天做不好。。。。

In addition, with the amounts of daily homework for the students, they had little time to do what they like. Perhaps in their leisure time after school, they could do some games and learn something for their hobbies. But with the daily homework above them, they could do almost nothing. In the era of 21century, having a high score isn’t the key to success, doing daily homework isn’t the key to having a high score.(这个排比句貌似不是很好。。) Just let the children be themselves .
For what I am thinking above, I don’t believe daily homework is so necessary as the teachers support. Lots of daily homework may also cause an opposite effects such as a student will learn less. In my judgment, to teach the students how to study is much more important than just ask them to study.% I; q0
楼主应该写完以后自己没有读过吧，文章中有不少缺少谓语动词的句子，并且段与段之间逻辑性不够强，在每段支持自己观点的地方需要加上具体的例子来展开说明。在表达是最好能够多变换几个不同的词语，来表达你想表达的意思。希望楼主能够再接再厉，多加练习。必要时可以去寻找新东方的课程来听。还有就是标点符号需要注意一下。
我的作文连接重新改过。有空帮我改一下吧

alwayslzUID: 2373553

无语

ilovelxlxUID: 2613222

ilovelxlxUID: 2613222

我来水一水 嘿嘿

glasses415UID: 2603267

3# yoyodandy \
我会好好努力去把作文写好的···以后假使你要帮我改也不会这么累了··哈··
哎····由于能力有限··我帮你改的也不好，请见谅···

glasses415UID: 2603267

4# alwayslz
你怎么无语了么？···
额··
你是说我写的太烂了？···

glasses415UID: 2603267

6# ilovelxlx
你这个坏人····还打击我····