ISSUE143【DIES IN FLAMES 0910G长线突破组】TASK I BY jessicalulu

jessicaluluUID: 2471730

Artists plunge themselves into the creation of artworks, including paintings, music, literature, performance and so on. Artworks enrich people’s lives, ameliorate people’s qualities and make our society full of beauty and sensibility. Although the multiform modes of expression, the essence of art is almost the same, which encompasses artists’ life experience, emotions, imagination, inspiration, motivation and even their likes and dislikes. After all, art is a personal creative process, or we may say an artist is fundamentally lonely whether with or without the support, encouragement and even criticism by other people.

Because identifying, judging and apperceiving the internal properties of these work is such a tough work, which needs the judges have the knowledge of art history and basic aesthetic insight, not everyone can achieve it. This is, of course, within the realm of critics. They may open out the symbols, subjects and themes affiliated with this work and how the work relates to the culture and times in which it was produced, may disclose the essential properties and important values of the works. They may play an important role in leading public’s aesthetic tend. A common person who doesn’t accept a series of professional exercise, when he/ she see an object of art, may just find superficial information, such as the shape, color and materials of it, they may have no idea about the true value of it, thinking the antique is just a common object, but when he/ she knows the connotative of it by the analyses of the critics, they may feel and justice the production of art deeply, and appreciate the true value of it. The criticism may be connect the artists and the public and make they know each other clearly.

But, as mentioned before, the creative process may be totally alone. The loneliness is not only appeared at the time when the artists exhaust themselves to create, but also when their works cannot be understood by other people. Even professional critics, when they evaluate a production of art, there are always opposite views. The backing side may totally agree with the arts’ creative intention, but the opposite side may entirely tease the arts’ creation. Reason of the divergent result maybe associated with the life experience, educational status, time spirit, and their personal aesthetic viewpoint. So although an artist is lampooned by some critics, it cannot be considered the artist is failed, or his/her works is worthless. What’s more, some artists have the extraordinary talent to create great works, which may hardly have the possibility to be understood and to be accepted by so-called critics of the time. However the true works is not submerged forever. With the development of human advancement, more and more neglected artworks were digged, such as paintings by Van Gogh we all know. What’s more, in modern times, some artists collude with the critics to recommend their works for the intention of becoming famous, rich. So the criticism should not be significantly viewed by artists at all.

Critics always explore treasure of art, but their cognizance is so limited and is consistent with the public that they cannot discern some outstanding works but constrain them. As a lonely creative activity, artists must somehow deal with their flow of feelings through visions of the beauty and torment of the world personally but neglect other opposite voice. Keeping their inner emotions and create clingingly all the while.

这一次的issue感觉很不好，尤其是晚上让同学看了提纲后被抨击惨了，他说我写的这个完全不叫analytical writing，且根本看不出来观点在哪里，在看了我的头两段后说，这头两段完全是可以删掉的废话。
我很郁闷。。。。。。
还是咬牙写完了，姑且不论好坏吧。。。。。
且例子的问题，找得不好，或者说我不知道该怎么找例子啊。用了一个很鸡肋的，几乎等于没用。
就让我自生自灭吧。。。绝望。。。。

winning1030UID: 2538401

Artists plunge themselves into the creation of artworks, including paintings, music, literature, performance and so on. Artworks enrich people’s lives, ameliorate people’s qualities and make our society full of beauty and sensibility. Although the multiform modes of expression, the essence of art is almost the same, which encompasses artists’ life experience, emotions, imagination, inspiration, motivation and even their likes and dislikes. After all, art is a personal creative process, or we may say an artist is fundamentally lonely whether with or without the support, encouragement and even criticism by other people. (要增加为什么创作过程是孤独的解释，因为楼主在后文中反复强调了这一点，但是我们不知道楼主所指的孤独创作是什么)

Because identifying, judging and apperceiving the internal properties of these work is such a tough work, which needs the judges have the knowledge of art history and basic aesthetic insight, not everyone can achieve it. This is, of course, within the realm of critics. They may open out the symbols, subjects and themes affiliated with this work and how the work relates to the culture and times in which it was produced, may disclose the essential properties and important values of the works. They may play an important role in leading public’s aesthetic tend. A common person who doesn’t accept a series of professional exercise, when he/ she see（sees） an object of art, may just find superficial information, such as the shape, color and materials of it, they may have no idea about the true value of it, thinking the antique is just a common object, but when he/ she knows the connotative of it by the analyses of the critics, they may feel and justice the production of art deeply, and appreciate the true value of it. The criticism may be connect the artists and the public and make they know each other clearly. （楼主这一段解释了critic的作用——connect the artists and the public and make they know each other clearly，但是和后文没有联系，artist该不该注意critic和critic把艺术的真谛传递给public有联系么？）
But(删), as mentioned before, the creative process may be totally alone. The loneliness is not only appeared at the time when the artists exhaust themselves to create, but also when their works cannot be understood by other people. Even professional critics, when they evaluate a production of art, there are always opposite views. The backing side (one side) may totally agree with the arts’ creative intention, but the opposite side may entirely tease the arts’ creation. Reason of the divergent result maybe associated with the life experience, educational status, time spirit, and their personal aesthetic viewpoint. So although an artist is lampooned by some critics, it cannot be considered the artist is failed, or his/her works is worthless. What’s more, some artists have the extraordinary talent to create great works, which may hardly have the possibility to be understood and to be accepted by so-called critics of the time. However the true works is not submerged forever. With the development of human advancement, more and more neglected artworks were digged (reevaluated), such as paintings by Van Gogh we all know. What’s more, in modern times, some artists collude with the critics to recommend their works for the intention of becoming famous, rich. So the criticism should not be significantly viewed by artists at all. （觉得最后的分论点，A与C合谋没有解释清楚，如果AC串通，为什么A不应重视，而且这个A是什么A（没有和C合谋的A？）。我觉得这个对社会作用更大，不是A该不该VIEW的问题，并且这个和楼主的该段的论点不和，楼主该段从the creative process may be totally alone而引导出一系列A不该重视C的原因，最后却突然彻到AC合谋的问题，觉得很突兀）Critics always explore treasure of art, but their cognizance is so limited and is consistent with the public that they cannot discern some outstanding works but constrain them. As a lonely creative activity, artists must somehow deal with their flow of feelings through visions of the beauty and torment of the world personally but neglect other opposite voice. Keeping their inner emotions and create clingingly all the while.


楼主的功底很强，语言很流畅，句与句之间过渡自然。我的感觉是，楼主的成文没有你的提纲那么惊艳。那时看到你的中文提纲，我觉得非常好，我自己完全没往那方面想。可是不知道为什么觉得写出来变了味。觉得没有必要解释A与C的作用，特别是那段C的作用，因为虽然C对A的解读让大众收益，但C对大众的好处与A该不该重视C无关，因为A与C的矛盾在于C误读A的时候，所以该段和主题无关。最后，我觉得不能单方面说C对A的不利使A不该重视C，还有说A在C的误读下坚持的重要性，因为楼主的主旨是neglect other opposite voice. Keeping their inner emotions and create clingingly all the while.比如那个梵高的例子，如果扩展下，会是一个好的例子，但楼主一笔代过了。