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Have you heard of the recent popular comments that learning specific knowledge is not as essential as usual in one’s school life? And the developers of it contend teacher in modern school should regard the cultivation of self-confidence superior to knowledge. As for me, however, it is totally nonsense. “ Knowledge is the power” still works in every aspect of today’s life and typically as follows.

In the first place, to capture enough expertise is the dominate point in the process that students hurt for desirable jobs. Nearly every famous company put the professional capability into the first rank to recruit graduates. For example, the HONDA Company in Guangzhou City only provides the formal position to whom among the top-50 students in my department last year. This case is not alone, the ACER, the third biggest computer provider in the world, always request the interviewers with a 3.0 GPA or higher and other impressive credentials such as CET-6 and NCRE certifications. In short, it is almost impossible for whom with a poor proficiency to catch a perfect career.

To back up my point, emphasizing on the specific knowledge studying could promote our society further developed. In countless different fields, professional knowledge plays the identical important role to impel such industries. For instance, the Informational Technology industry, which produces various functional equipments like digital camera, mobile phone, need huge numbers of people possessing electronic skills to invent more amazing things. And the hospital also requires guys with the knowledge on body structure, disease symbols and so on, to provide better treatment to patients and protect healthy people far from sickness. If our schools decrease the importance of knowledge imparting, could we make life more fascinating as our fathers did.

Admittedly, self-confidence is a favorable factor to personal characters development. However, without enough expertise, would the self-confidence turn into arrogance? A good example of this standpoint is my brother, Jason. Jason did was a clever boy when he was a child, in every semester his name was always put on the top-5 ones of the grade list, since preliminary school to junior high school. But he made a stupid decision that stop high school study to take university entrance exam in senior high school 1. He tried twice and the result is, of course, wasting two-year precious time due to exaggerate his wise. This instance is not rare. Never be too much self-confident if you still limited with knowledge, or you will be driven to a wrong way.

To sum up, specific knowledge should still be treated as the most important consideration in our education system, for it could bring access to a wonderful job, promote society approaching, and work as the bedrock of self-confidence.

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Have you heard of the recent popular comments that learning specific knowledge is not as essential as usual in one’s school life? And the developers of it contend teacher in modern school should regard the cultivation of self-confidence superior to knowledge. As for me, however, it is totally nonsense. “ Knowledge is the power” still works in every aspect of today’s life and typically as follows.: F: {& z% i( M
   In the first place, to capture enough expertise is the dominate point in the process that students hurt（hunt?） for desirable jobs. Nearly every famous company put the professional capability into the first rank to recruit graduates. For example, the HONDA Company in Guangzhou City only provides the formal position to whom(who are是不是好些啊) among the top-50 students in my department last year. This case is not alone, the ACER, the third biggest computer provider in the world, always request（s） the interviewers with a 3.0 GPA or higher and other impressive credentials such as CET-6 and NCRE certifications. In short, it is almost impossible for whom with a poor proficiency to catch a perfect career./ _- q( {- x  
To back up my point, emphasizing on the specific knowledge studying could promote our society further developed(developing). In countless different fields, professional knowledge plays the identical important role to impel such industries. For instance, the Informational Technology industry, which produces various functional equipments like digital camera, mobile phone, need huge numbers of people possessing electronic skills to invent more amazing things. And the hospital also requires guys with the knowledge on body structure, disease symbols and so on, to provide better treatment to patients and protect healthy people far from sickness. If our schools decrease the importance of knowledge imparting, could we make life more fascinating as our fathers did.4 i  Admittedly, self-confidence is a favorable factor to personal characters development. However, without enough expertise, would the self-confidence turn into arrogance? A good example of this standpoint is my brother, Jason. Jason did was a clever boy when he was a child, in every semester his name was always put on the top-5 ones of the grade list, since preliminary school to junior high school. But he made a stupid(说哥哥stupid不好吧，用immature吧)decision that stop high school study to take university entrance exam in senior high school 1. He tried twice and the result is（was）, of course, wasting two-year precious time due to exaggerate his wise. This instance is not rare. Never be too much self-confident if you still limited with knowledge, or you will be driven to a wrong way.9 ~  s! V( {3 W
    To sum up, specific knowledge should still be treated as the most important consideration in our education system, for it could bring access to a wonderful job, promote society approaching, and work as the bedrock of self-confidence.
又是一位功力极深的楼主啊，我简直改不出什么错误来，还怕越改越差了。非常棒的文章，文字功底也很深，继续加油哈，一定会考出好成绩的。

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Have you heard of the recent popular comments that learning specific knowledge is not as essential as usual(前面有not, as ...as 要换成so ...as) in one’s school life? And the developers of it(换成proponents怎么样) contend that teachers in modern school should regard the cultivation of self-confidence superior to that of knowledge. As for me, however, it is totally nonsense. “ Knowledge is the power” still works in every aspect of today’s life and(换成逗号，前面有work但and后无动词) typically as follows., {9 _& s, I4 z" |*

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In the first place, to capture enough expertise is the dominate point in the process that students hurt（hunt） for desirable jobs(简化：enough expertise dominates when students hunt for desirable jobs). Nearly every famous company put the professional capability into the first rank to recruit graduates. For example, the HONDA Company in Guangzhou City only provides the formal position to whom among the top-50 students in my department last year. This case is not alone, the ACER, the third biggest computer provider in the world, always request (require) the interviewers with a 3.0 GPA or higher (a minimum GPA of 3.0) and other impressive credentials such as CET-6 and NCRE certifications. In short, it is almost impossible for whom with a poor proficiency to catch a perfect career



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To back up my point, emphasizing on the specific knowledge studying could promote our society further developed. In countless different fields, professional knowledge plays the identical important role to impel (propel) such industries(这句话没表达清楚). For instance, the Informational Technology industry, which produces various functional equipments like digital camera, mobile phone, need huge numbers of (enormous) people possessing electronic skills to invent more amazing things. And the hospital also requires guys with the knowledge on human body structure (人体结构), disease symbols and so on, to provide better treatment to patients and protect healthy people far away from sickness. If our schools decrease the importance of knowledge imparting, could we make life more fascinating as our fathers did(额…..这句话没看懂).! u& p9 m; H, d1 V
Admittedly, self-confidence is a favorable factor to personal characters development. However, without enough expertise, would the self-confidence turn into arrogance? A good example of this standpoint is my brother, Jason. Jason did was a clever boy when he was a child, in every semester his name was always put on the top-5 ones of the grade list, since preliminary school to junior high school. But he made a stupid decision that stop high school study to take university entrance exam in senior high school(这句话意思不清) . He tried twice and the result is, of course, wasting two-year precious time due to exaggerate (exaggeration of) his wise (wit). This instance is not rare. Never be too much self-confident if you are still limited with knowledge, or(otherwise) you will be driven to a wrong way.

To sum up, specific knowledge should still be treated as the most important consideration in our education system, for it could bring access to a wonderful job, promote society approaching, and work as the bedrock of self-confidence.


楼主的几个论点都写的不错，只是个别句子表达不清楚（已标注），句式多样，值得学习。

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非常感谢~~