[TOEFL 2009上半年-Dark_Tournament写作组 happylr 第19次作业]

happylrUID: 2618525

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It’s more important for a teacher try to help students to gain confidence than to teach them specific knowledge. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(03/10/07)

Some people who hold the viewpoint that school education aims to impart specific knowledge to students rather than to shape students’ personality claim that students stay longer at home and in society where students learn to gain confidence, in my opinion, teachers are supposed to spend more time in helping students to gain confidence rather than only improving their grade in class.

Initially, confidence plays an indispensable role in enabling students to broaden their knowledge. Knowledge is infinite and one won’t master all the knowledge all over the world in his life. Even a teacher, he is also only specialized in some specific fields which determines that he could only make students familiar with limit subjects such as anthropology, history, physics, chemistry, literature, art, geology, astronomy and so on. In other words, teachers just guide students to recognize one specific subject. Therefore, only students equipped with correct study method could master more knowledge since they are eligible to learn whenever they want. Correspondently, teachers are responsible to help students confident at learning by themselves instead of tedious instillation of professional sermon.

An additional factor involves the recognition that confident students are inclined to obtain much more attainment than mere knowledgable students. Yes, you may be an excellent student who are studying in a famous university and you are expected to pursue a job in a well-known company. Then, what about next? What will you do in such a competitive workplace? You know that each worker around you are all considerate strong and you are confronted competition with them. At this moment, confidence help you succeed. Everyone is equivalent in intelligence quotation and what you need to do is just perseverance and to believe that you will win the game finally. On the other hand, a doleful student won’t succeed even if he has a broader wide of knowledge.

Lending more credence to my point is that students who get confidence at school will bear burden easily when they become adults. As students go to university, they will leave home and live in dormitory. So, they will spend more time with their teachers and classmates. Problems in study and life may make them confused and they are pliable to get depressed in such a circumstance. If they can’t deal with these problems well, they will lose heart. Over and over again, they will get lost. Correspondently, I believe teachers should take students’ emotion at first and help them establish positive attitude toward life. Thus, students won’t be panic when they face terrible situations.

In conclusion, to teachers, helping students obtain confidence is more important than merely teaching them specific knowledge in the long run cause confidence benifts students to study by themselves, to gain achievement and to learn deal with plight.

gaofei323UID: 2588256

Some people who hold the viewpoint that school education aims to impart specific knowledge to students rather than to shape students’ personality claim that students stay longer at home and in society where students learn to gain confidence, in my opinion, teachers are supposed to spend more time in helping students to gain confidence rather than only improving their grade in class. " k1 V& X  t( o. h3 V% ?2 O. Y/ f
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Initially, confidence plays an indispensable role in enabling students to broaden their knowledge. Knowledge is infinite and one won’t master all the knowledge all over the world in his life. Even a teacher, he(or she 或者前文写teachers) is also only specialized in some specific fields which determines that he could only make students familiar with （acquaint students 比 感觉make。。。好一点）limit subjects such as anthropology, history, physics, chemistry, literature, art, geology, astronomy and so on. In other words, teachers just guide students to recognize one specific subject. Therefore, only students equipped with correct study method could master more knowledge since they are eligible（有资格？？。。capable怎样） to learn whenever they want. Correspondently, teachers are responsible to help students confident at learning by themselves instead of tedious instillation of professional sermon.

An additional factor involves the recognition that confident students are inclined to obtain much more attainment than mere knowledgeable students. Yes(indeed, yes太口语了), you may be an excellent student who are studying in a famous university and you are expected to pursue a job in a well-known company. Then, what about next? What will you do in such a competitive workplace? You know that each worker around you is all considerate strong (强壮？outstanding) and you are confronted competition with them. At this moment, confidence helps you succeed. Everyone is equivalent in intelligence quotation and what you need to do is just perseverance and to believe that you will win the game finally. On the other hand, a doleful student won’t succeed even if he has a broader wide of knowledge.

Lending more credence to my point is that students who get confidence at school will bear(cope 感觉bear这个词就不easily了 呵呵) burden easily when they become adults. As students go to university, they will leave home and live in（enter in有动作表示状态改变） dormitory. So, they will spend more time with their teachers and classmates. Problems in study and life may make them confused（confuse them） and they are pliable to get depressed（face depression 不会坚韧的去沮丧吧） in such a circumstance. If they can’t deal with these problems well, they will lose heart. Over and over again, they will get lost. Correspondently, I believe teachers should take students’ emotion at first and help them establish positive attitude toward life. Thus, students won’t be panic when they face terrible situations.(感觉这一段的句子都是人物作主语，换几个吧~)

In conclusion, to teachers, helping students obtain confidence is more important than merely teaching them specific knowledge in the long run cause confidence benefits students to study by themselves, to gain achievement（achievements 多一点好~） and to learn to deal with plight.
写的很不错~ 功力绝对在我之上 不敢乱改 呵呵 有几个建议
看样子是新东方的同学吧 呵呵 这个开头。。 真的被用烂了~ 不知道会不会雷同呀
老师教过句子开头 多换一下好看一点
水平有限~ 自己再斟酌斟酌哈 祝最后分数高高~

风辰的眼泪UID: 2618183

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s more important for a teacher try to help students to gain confidence than to teach them specific knowledge. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.(03/10/07)% I0 n9 k7 r& W- }7 e

Some people who hold the viewpoint that school education aims to impart specific knowledge to students rather than to shape students’ personality claim that students stay longer at home and in society where students learn to gain confidence（不清楚你想表达什么意思，是想说学生在家和社会自己就能学着自信还是什么？语意不明确哈。）, in my opinion, teachers are supposed to spend more time in helping students to gain confidence rather than only improving their grade in class.
    Initially, confidence plays an indispensable role in enabling students to broaden their knowledge. Knowledge is infinite and one won’t master all the knowledge all over the world in his life. Even a teacher, he is also only specialized in some specific fields which determines that he could only make students familiar with limit subjects such as anthropology, history, physics, chemistry, literature, art, geology, astronomy and so on. In other words, teachers just guide students to recognize one specific subject. Therefore, only students equipped with correct study method could master more knowledge since they are eligible to learn whenever they want. Correspondently, teachers are responsible to help students confident at learning by themselves instead of tedious instillation of professional sermon.
) An additional factor involves the recognition that confident students are inclined to obtain much more attainment than mere knowledgable （knowledgeable）students(论点句没有提到confidence哈). Yes, you may be an excellent student who are(is) studying in a famous university and you are expected to pursue a job in a well-known company. Then, what about next? What will you do in such a competitive workplace? You know that each worker around you are all considerate（considerable） strong and you are confronted competition with them. At this moment, confidence help(s) you succeed. Everyone is equivalent in intelligence quotation and what you need to do is just perseverance and to believe that you will win the game finally. On the other hand, a doleful student won’t succeed even if he has a broader wide of knowledge.
   Lending more credence to my point is that students who get confidence at school will bear burden easily when they become adults. As students go to university, they will leave home and live in dormitory. So, they will spend more time with their teachers and classmates. Problems in study and life may make them confused and they are pliable to get depressed in such a circumstance. If they can’t deal with these problems well, they will lose heart. Over and over again, they will get lost. Correspondently, I believe teachers should take students’ emotion at first and help them establish positive attitude toward life. Thus, students won’t be panic when they face terrible situations.
%In conclusion, to teachers, helping students obtain confidence is more important than merely teaching them specific knowledge in the long run cause confidence benifts (benefits)students to study by themselves, to gain achievement and to learn deal with plight.
楼主功力不是一般的深哈，写的很好哈，都不知道怎么改，如果楼主是在完全没查字典的情况下写了这篇文章，那楼主的词汇量考托福真是绰绰有余啦！！！强人啊，请多多指教哈

HYPS2011UID: 2618437

Some people who hold the viewpoint that school education aims to impart specific knowledge to students rather than to shape students’ personality claim that students stay longer at home and in society where students learn to gain confidence, in my opinion, teachers are supposed to spend more time in helping students to gain confidence rather than only improving their grade in class. " h6 U6 c' \; [! E9 M

Initially, confidence plays an indispensable role in enabling students to broaden their knowledge. Knowledge is infinite and one won’t master all the knowledge all over the world in his life. Even a teacher, he is also only specialized in some specific fields which determines that he could only make students familiar with limit(limited) subjects such as anthropology, history, physics, chemistry, literature, art, geology, astronomy and so on. In other words, teachers just guide students to recognize one specific subject. Therefore, only students equipped with correct study method could master more knowledge since they are eligible to learn whenever they want. Correspondently, teachers are responsible to help students confident(help sb confident ？) at learning by themselves instead of tedious instillation of professional sermon.* j/ ^& j% x* O( u! e% D8 c/ l

An additional factor involves the recognition that confident students are inclined to obtain much more attainment than mere knowledgable students. Yes, you may be an excellent student who are studying in a famous university and you are expected to pursue a job in a well-known company. Then, what about next? What will you do in such a competitive workplace? You know that each worker around you are all considerate (considerable) strong and you are confronted competition with them. At this moment, confidence help you succeed. Everyone is equivalent in intelligence quotation and what you need to do is just perseverance and to believe that you will win the game finally. On the other hand, a doleful student won’t succeed even if he has a broader wide of knowledge.
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Lending more credence to my point is that students who get confidence at school will bear burden easily when they become adults. As students go to university, they will leave home and live in dormitory. So, they will spend more time with their teachers and classmates. Problems in study and life may make them confused and they are pliable to get depressed in such a circumstance. If they can’t deal with these problems well, they will lose heart. Over and over again, they will get lost. Correspondently, I believe teachers should take students’ emotion at first and help them establish positive attitude toward life. Thus, students won’t be panic when they face terrible situations.- s4 ~: H) H) Z2 [

In conclusion, to teachers, helping students obtain confidence is more important than merely teaching them specific knowledge in the long run cause confidence benifts students to study by themselves, to gain achievement and to learn deal with plight.
我又来了哈上次一组的.感觉你倒数第二段句式可以多样化一点.其它的都很好哈

happylrUID: 2618525

2# gaofei323
意见提得很中肯，之前我都没有注意到呵呵，谢谢了哈哈

happylrUID: 2618525

4# HYPS2011

谢谢你的关注啊，倒数第二段句式确实单调了点，跟gaofei323提得意见一致，以后会注意的呵呵
共同进步啊

laqfanfanUID: 2618864

Some people who hold the viewpoint that school education aims to impart specific knowledge to students rather than to shape students’ personality claim that students stay longer at home and in society (功力不够..不是很懂)where students learn to gain confidence, in my opinion, teachers are supposed to spend more time in helping students to gain confidence rather than only improving their grade in class.
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Initially, confidence plays an indispensable role in enabling students to broaden their knowledge. Knowledge is infinite and one won’t master all the knowledge all over the world in his life. Even a teacher, he is also only specialized in some specific fields which determines that he(/she) could only make students familiar with limit subjects such as anthropology, history, physics, chemistry, literature, art, geology, astronomy and so on. In other words, teachers just guide students to recognize one specific subject. Therefore, only students equipped with correct study method could master more knowledge since they are eligible(有资格?) to learn whenever they want(这句话与文章主题有偏离..即使后面有个correpondently) Correspondently, teachers are responsible to help students confident(help  sb adj?可以这样用不?)lves instead of tedious instillation of professional sermon.' U" H4 a6 I" W9 ^+ S# Z

An additional factor involves the recognition that confident students are inclined to obtain much more attainment than mere knowledgable students. Yes, you may be an excellent student who are studying in a famous university and you are expected to pursue a job in a well-known company. Then, what about next? What will you do in such a competitive workplace? You know that each worker around you are(is) considerate strong and you are confronted competition with them. At this moment, confidence help you succeed. Everyone is equivalent in intelligence quotation and what you need to do is just perseverance(用形容词perseverant) that you will win the game finally. On the other hand, a doleful student won’t succeed even if he has a broader wide of knowledge.
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Lending more credence to my point is that students who get confidence at school will bear burden easily when they become adults. As students go to university, they will leave home and live in dormitory. So, they will spend more time with their teachers and classmates. Problems in study and life may make them confused and they are pliable to get depressed in such a circumstance. If they can’t deal with these problems well, they will lose heart. Over and over again, they will get lost. Correspondently, I believe teachers should take students’ emotion at first and help them establish positive attitude toward life. Thus, students won’t be panic when they face terrible situations.( K& A4 W. p1 N+ ~) }, M

+ k! U) h" o4 ?9 eIn conclusion, to teachers, helping students obtain confidence is more important than merely teaching them specific knowledge in the long run cause confidence benifts students to study by themselves, to gain achievement and to learn deal with plight.

用词太好了..太值得学习了...共同加油..