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[未归类] 5.6月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 llacat 第4作业 [复制链接]

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本帖最后由 llacat 于 2009-4-29 21:12 编辑

After experienced the complicated life in cities, many people prefer to let their children grow up in the country for a sort of sample but comfortable life. But for me, make my own children living in cities are worth of troubles because it is beneficial to their physical health, education conditions and characters.


As we all know, physical health is the most important thing for a child. The medical conditions in cities are far more advanced than in the country. Suppose that you were lived in a small village, what were you doing when your children got a fever in midnight but there were no emergency call there? What was your feeling when your children got hurt in a little accident but there were no drugstore nearby? And what kinds of action were you took when you wanted to have a physical examination for your kids but the departments in the hospitals were not enough? Being in those situations, I think, nearly most patents may be anxious and get angry about the poor surroundings. While living in cities will solve all of these problems since the medical conditions there are clear superiority than the countryside.


In addition to enjoy the better medical conditions in cities, children would also have more chances to get education with high quality. In our city, for example, the number of high schools and universities are larger than the villages. What’s more, city universities have a great number of spaces provided for local students, but they have relatively fewer spaces for residents from the villages. That means, the difficulty for children in cities may decrease when they applied for these universities.


Finally, the life in cities are colorful and variable which are useful for children’s growing in some aspects. In cities, children would be more convenient to visit the parks, museums and theatres they like. They would also have chances to meet people from other parts of the country even all over the world. Absorbing knowledge and culture in their life intentionally or unintentionally may help them become a knowledgeable and erudite person.


According to the discussions above, we can safely draw the conclusion that city’s life is better than country’s life for children. Of course I can not deny the fact that living in country may also provide happiness and comfort for children because they would not suffer from loneliness. But considering other aspects of recourses, I believe that in the end its benefits outweigh its drawbacks.
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本帖最后由 melody106 于 2009-4-30 23:03 编辑

After experienced(应为ing) the complicated life in cities, many people prefer to let their children grow up in the country for a sort of sample(这个sample为什么用这里呢,hard to understand) but comfortable life. But for me, make my own children living in cities are worth of troubles(trouble这个词用这里也有点突兀) because it is beneficial to their physical health, education conditions and characters.: E1 a2 F! q( L. N6 D  X& ?3 T6 @0 F! Z


As we all know, physical health is the most important thing for a child. The medical conditions in cities are far more advanced than(that of the country,比较句型不要漏掉对象词) in the country. Suppose that you were(were去掉) lived in a small village, what were you doing(will you do) when your children got a fever in midnight but there were no emergency call (emergency room)there? What was your feeling when your children got hurt in a little accident but there were no drugstore nearby? And what kinds of action were you took when you wanted to have a physical examination for your kids but the departments (不妨换成doctors)in the hospitals were not enough? Being in those situations, I think, nearly most(前两个词换为almost) patents may be anxious and get angry about the poor surroundings. While living in cities will solve all of these problems since the medical conditions there are clear(definitely) superiority than (that of)the countryside. ' V& _& y, N* M. z# Y7 i  s
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In addition to enjoy the better medical conditions in cities, children would also have more chances to get education with high quality. In our city, for example, the number of high schools and universities are larger than the villages. What’s more, city universities have a great number of spaces provided for local students, but they have relatively fewer spaces for residents from the villages. That means, the difficulty for children in cities may decrease when they applied for these universities.9 a* r/ T$ F) S
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Finally, the life in cities are colorful and variable which are useful for children’s growing (growth)in some aspects. In cities, children would be more convenient to visit the parks, museums and theatres they like. They would also have chances to meet people from other parts of the country even all over the world. Absorbing knowledge and culture in their life intentionally or unintentionally may help them become a knowledgeable and erudite person.


According to the discussions above, we can safely draw the conclusion that city’s life is better than country’s life for children. Of course I can not deny the fact that living in country may also provide happiness and comfort for children because they would not suffer from loneliness. But considering other aspects of recourses(hard to understand), I believe that in the end its benefits outweigh its drawbacks
结构比较完整,论点也可以对主题进行支持。加强语言。
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