同主题ARGUMENT242 =August Rush=小组第1次作业 by 尾羽

尾羽UID: 2482591

242The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.
"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codessimilar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."

分析：
conclusion:GC的edtitorial认为，institutions应该都采用honor code来替代老师监考的考试机制；
reason:有report显示作弊数量大幅度增长
support:在GC的调查显示作弊数量逐年下降，说明honor code 在GC是成功的
        1.an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported  
        2.进一步说明honor coded成功之处：
       （1）第一年，21例作弊；
       （2）第二年，14例；
       （3）最近对一个专业的学生调查，说有honor code在，他们就不太可能去作弊。

提纲：
1.对GC学生的调查可能存在缺陷：
（1）只对一个专业进行调查，结果是不可靠的；
（2）被调查的也许都是本就很少作弊的好学生。

2.就算对GC学生的调查结果是可信的，作弊数量下降可能是其他原因造成的：
（1）当地的学生数量逐年减少，参加考试的学生也减少，作弊的case数量也自然减少；
（2）老师加强了对学生作弊的思想教育；
（3）考试比较简单或者考察制度不单单根据考试成绩，没有必要作弊。

3.即使honor code在CG的确成功，也不一定适合所有院校采用：
（1）honor code本身存在缺陷，是否会造成更多学生间的矛盾（向faculty member打小报告）；
（2）有些学校的作弊情况本来就很少

4.作为整个argument的reason的那个report的可信度也受质疑，因为没有给出关于这个report的所调查对象、时间、内容和方式等任何信息。
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不知道有没有不合理的地方呢~请指教

lela900UID: 2634833

哇，写得很详细~
有的跟我的不同~
A242
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=967568&page=1&extra=

尾羽UID: 2482591

提纲里的第四点没有写~感觉，写上去之后结构怪怪的，也有强词夺理的嫌疑
人生第一篇A，望各位海涵赐教！
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In this editorial the author recommends that colleges and universities should adopt honor code similar to Groveton's,in order to combat the recently dramatice increase in cheating among students.To support this recommendation the author points out that Groveton's honor code has replaced the old-fashion system in which students were closely invigilated by teachers.This argument rests on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions,and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.

A threshold assumption upon which the recommendation relies is that a report shows that the numeber among students who cheated in tests has decreased by year after year.However the editorial fail to substantiate this crucial assumption therefor lacking information about who conducted the report ,who responded ,or how the report was conducted.For instance,perhaps the investigated students in the report are good ones who often gains grade A in homework,thus they can do excellently in the academic endeavors without fraud. Accordingly,the author cannot draw any conclusion from the report about why the honor code replaced the old-fashion system.

Even assuming that the report was scientific and justifiable,the author relies on the addtional assumption that this investigation was responsible for the decrease in cheating among universities and colleges students recently.However,it is entirely possible that one or more other facts were instead responsible for the decrease.For example,if there are less students comparing with the students before the past a few years who enrolled in the Groveton College,it results that less students attend the examination and naturelly less cheating cases.And perhaps teachers has enhanced the diciplinary educatoin before the students'exam season.Or,it is unnecessary to cheat in exam at all,because the apprasial system in Groveton College rules that the grade students gained in exam is not the only component in the final score of the semester which composed by grade of homework,performance in class,etc.

Even assuming that the reduced cases of cheating among college students are attribute to the honor code which is successful in Grovton College,the author fails to consider possible differences in some aspects in other colleges that might help bring about the honor code might be unsuccessful.For instance,firstly,honor code has a original weakness that it ecourages students to notify a faculty member when they suspect others have cheated,that might result in discord in students of other colleges,and even so do Groveton's.Moreover,it might be few cheat cases happen in other colleges that there is no need to replace the old system by honor code.

In conclusion, to persuade me that universities and colleges shoulde adopt the honor code similar to Groventon's the author must apply clear evidence that the honor code in Groveton College,and not some other fact,was resposible for the decease of students cheating cases in universities and colleges.The author must also to provide evidence that other factors affecting honor code to be successful in all universities and colleges are otherwise essentially the same.

lela900UID: 2634833

改好了~

crepuscularlywUID: 2645654

终于改好了~~