issue 50 求高手指点

wuliangjieericUID: 2539458

TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
I greatly agree with the author's opinion that the faculty of the university should spending enough time outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, except for some small defects lies in the claim.


When the author exclude some special academic areas such history- researching, literary, and philosophy, the claim will sound impeccable. As to the research of these kinds of professions, it hardly exist the outside environment that can do favor to the research, maybe the academic environment which can make the researchers calm down to probe the truth in university is an umbrella against the temptation of the material profits, and some kinds of science like theory physics or mathematics is just the same, they all need a pure academic circumstance that guarantee the purity of the academic.

But, when it comes to the subject greatly relevant to the practical life, it is sensible to encourage the researchers to pay enough attention to the outside practical environment. It will benefit both the researchers and the students they teach, and it will do good not only to the academic world but also to the practical life.


As we all know that there are always a lot of inspirations to academic research lying in the reality life, take Architecture for example, because a real architecture exist in reality world, and it is build up by pieces of concrete joints and materials, so when we study a new method to construct a building, we cannot isolate ourselves away from the spot where the building is constructed. Only through ceaselessly participating into the process of the construction can make the engineer realize which the most effective method to make the building perfectly stand on the ground is. Maybe someone insists on the importance of the academic research, but it is no doubt that some subject, when it is cut off from the real world, will become valueless. It is the researchers' duty to link the academic to the real world to make the academic research hold more practical value and the practical experience hold more academic value.
When it comes to the students, I will tell you according to my own experiences that a teacher who holds more practical experience can give students more inspirations, and when students attend to their lectures or classes, they will always illustrate a profound issue with everyday life examples, which can make it easier to be understood. In one word, the more the researchers participate into the practical life, the more charming they become.


In modern society, a lot of curriculums are set in the university to train the students to be qualified for the future career, so when the students' teachers have an amount of experience outside the academic world, it will do a great favor to the students. The teacher can impart some knowledge which will never be taught on the text book to the students.

In sum, if the author can exclude some apparently defects lying in his statement, his claim will be greatly welcomed by both the students and the faculty of the universities.

jackzhenguoUID: 2654215

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      I greatly agree with the author's opinion that the faculty of the university should spending enough time outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, except for some small defects lies in the claim.《
有个别小错误，spending------spend)


When the author exclude some special academic areas such[img][img](as加好点）[/img][/img] history- researching, literary, and philosophy, the claim will sound impeccable. As to the research of these kinds of professions, it hardly exist the outside environment that can do favor to the research, maybe the academic environment which can make the researchers calm down to probe the truth in university is an umbrella against the temptation of the material profits, and some kinds of science like theory physics or mathematics is just the same, they all need a pure academic circumstance that guarantee the purity of the academic. （这个例子欠缺啊，好像。难道在学校外参加相关领域的培训就会受物质的诱惑吗？ 物理 数学 最好在 在学校 （在你看来是禁得住物质诱惑的）吗？，即便是，你也要看 （）里的站得住叫吗？

But, when it comes to the subject greatly relevant to the practical life, it is sensible to encourage the researchers to pay enough attention to the outside practical environment. It will benefit both the researchers and the students they teach, and it will do good not only to the academic world but also to the practical life.


As we all know that there are always a lot of inspirations to academic research lying in the reality life, take Architecture for example, because a real architecture exist in reality world, and it is build up by pieces of concrete joints and materials, so when we study a new method to construct a building, we cannot isolate ourselves away from the spot where the building is constructed. Only through ceaselessly participating into the process of the construction can make the engineer realize which the most effective method to make the building perfectly stand on the ground is. Maybe someone insists on the importance of the academic research, but it is no doubt that some subject用复数）(, when it is cut off from the real world, will become valueless. 的确是这样的，但是什么学科不得基于现实呢？，这与上面说的物理等有矛盾）It is the researchers' duty to link the academic to the real world to make the academic research hold more practical value and the practical experience hold more academic value.
When it comes to the students, I will tell you according to my own experiences that a teacher who holds more practical experience can give students more inspirations, and when students attend to their lectures or classes, they will always illustrate a profound issue with everyday life examples, which can make it easier to be understood. In one word, the more the researchers participate into the practical life, the more charming they become.


In modern society, a lot of curriculums（（curriculum 是总课程的意思 ，不要加s） are set in the university to train the students to be qualified for the future career, so when the students' teachers have an amount of experience outside the academic world, it will do a great favor to the students. The teacher can impart some knowledge which will never be taught on the text book to the students.

In sum, if the author can exclude some apparently defects lying in his statement, his claim will be greatly welcomed by both the students and the faculty of the universities.



(恕我直言，总体感觉讨论的方面有些少，抓住学科的特点论述，不若就facluty 的文化程度 、 精力分配、 如何去做这些培训等方面。总之，考场上，要有话可说。

jackzhenguoUID: 2654215

恕我直言，总体感觉讨论的方面有些少，抓住学科的特点论述，不若就facluty 的文化程度 、 精力分配、 如何去做这些培训等方面。总之，考场上，要有话可说.
  不够清晰，重发。

dedjeUID: 2500433

I greatly agree with the author's opinion that the faculty of the university should spending (spend) enough time outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, except for some small defects lies (lie) in the claim.（不知道是不是应该说明下你所说的small defects是什么。还有下文中的一些单复数一致的问题我就不帮你改了。另外因为你也有些不赞成，所以是不是应该把greatly改为fundamentally？）

When the author exclude some special academic areas such history- researching, literary, and philosophy, the claim will sound impeccable. As to the research of these kinds of professions, it hardly exist the outside environment that can do favor to the research, maybe the academic environment which can make the researchers calm down to probe the truth in university is an umbrella against the temptation of the material profits, and some kinds of science like theory physics or mathematics is just the same, they all need a pure academic circumstance that guarantee the purity of the academic.（段落结束应该总结一下。）

But, when it comes to the subject greatly relevant to the practical life, it is sensible to encourage the researchers to pay enough attention to the outside practical environment. It will benefit both the researchers and the students they teach, and it will do good not only to the academic world but also to the practical life.（文中有几处提到teach，可以换几个词，例如instruct，guide等。）


As we all know that there are always a lot of inspirations to academic research lying in the reality life, take Architecture for example, because a real architecture exist in reality world, and it is build up by pieces of concrete joints and materials, so when we study a new method to construct a building, we cannot isolate ourselves away from the spot where the building is constructed. Only through ceaselessly participating into the process of the construction can make the engineer realize which the most effective method to make the building perfectly stand on the ground is. Maybe someone insists on the importance of the academic research, but it is no doubt that some subject, when it is cut off from the real world, will become valueless. It is the researchers' duty to link the academic to the real world to make the academic research hold more practical value and the practical experience hold more academic value.
When it comes to the students, I will tell you according to my own experiences that a teacher who holds more practical experience can give students more inspirations, and when students attend to their lectures or classes, they will always illustrate a profound issue with everyday life examples, which can make it easier to be understood. In one word, the more the researchers participate into the practical life, the more charming they become.


In modern society, a lot of curriculums are set in the university to train the students to be qualified for the future career, so when the students' teachers （这里直接用teacher时就可以了。）have an amount of experience outside the academic world, it will do a great favor to the students. The teacher can impart some knowledge which will never be taught on the text book to the students.

In sum, if the author can exclude some apparently defects lying in his statement, his claim will be greatly welcomed by both the students and the faculty of the universities.（结束部分应该多写点，总结整篇文章的观点。而不是一笔带过。）




一点点小意见，望指正，也请你有空帮我改改，谢谢。
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