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As the rapid development of the high technology, there are more and more means of transportation, like car, boat, train and airplane. However, no one can replace others for there are applicable to different circumstances. Also, different people have different habit in choose(choosing) the way of transportation. Therefore, I strongly disagree with the statement that the car has a greater impact on our society than the airplane has.
Undoubtedly, the car do has a great influence on our daily life. It's convenience for us to travel to other places if we own a car of ourselves. In addition, it helps people in different places to easily communicate with each other. For instance, in the early twentieth century, (people of different states even in the same state 疑惑之state 和states难道意思不一样么我鄙陋了) almost had no common points in the United States. What they said and what they wore are dissimilar because it's difficult for them to communicate with each other for the geographical reasons. However, once car was invented, people can easily go to other states or other places in the same state by the car. Therefore, the communication between them became more and more frequent, which is an indispensible(indispensable) factor to accelerate(enhance) the common grounds between the civilian.
Although, the car is of great importance to us, it(its range of application may be just within the same city) may be just in the same city or in the same province. However, airplane is an international transportation tool which makes it is convenient for people in different provinces or countries to travel around the world. We all know that it is impossible for people to go to another country, like from China to America, by car, while airplane is most suitable to this condition. What's more, almost all countries have the own special airplane that is used by the president to visit other countries. For example, we all know the special airplane of American presidents --- the Air Force One is used to visit to other countries. In 2009, Obama, the present American president, visit China by Air Force One. Therefore, it can be seen that the airplane has a greater effect on the international transportation.
On the other hand, airplane is much faster than car. Therefore it's time-saving for people, especially for a businessman who sees time as money. And it's hard to imagine how terrible it is to go to a faraway place by car, while what the first choice should be the airplane. For example, a survey indicates that almost all people go to other provinces or countries by airplane or train instead of car, unless the devout ones. (原来只有虔诚的人开车,有意思)
Summarily, the car may be the most important within the same city, while the airplane is more important in the international or among different provinces. Consequently, it's superficial to just think one has greater influence on the society than the other has.
语言流畅!
似乎是在用平衡观点写。这样的话一定要在第一段明确的指出在写平衡,第一段中I strongly disagree with the statement that the car has a greater impact on our society than the airplane has. 差点让我误以为是觉得airplane更好,接下来第二段the car do has a great influence on our daily life又让我觉得突然变了。明确表明自己立场,第一段应该指出他俩of equal importance 或者说没法比较,或者说比较没有价值。第二段中心句强调在一定的circumstance下car才更有影响,以免歧义。
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