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请老师帮忙改一下,非常感谢!
刚写了剑5 test 2的大作文和小作文,麻烦老师帮我修改一下,非常感谢!
小作文:
The two charts give information about main reasons for study at different ages and the bosses’ support.
80 per cent of students under 26 think they study for a good job, while only 10% of people study with their interests. Less and less people learn knowledge in order to have a satisfying job earning enough money, however, there are more and more people who go to study for interests when the people become older. This is evidenced by the fact that the percentage of people studying for career, aged over 49, is just under 20%, which is highly less than almost 70% for interest. Between the age of 40 and 49, the proportion of people studying for career is equal to that of those for interests.
Unlike the reasons, before age of 40, the employers give more support to younger people than older people, being over 60% for students under 26, and approximately 32% for those aged between 30 and 39. After 40, older people receive more support than younger people.
Clearly, the change percentage of reasons for study is different from that of support from employers.
大作文:
题目要求:
In somecountries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
It very popular in some countries that students who have completed high school work or travel for a year before they enter to universities. As the coin has two sides, there are positive and negative influences on the young people who do this.
The advantages of working or traveling before university studies are clear and obvious. Firstly, it is an important experience for young because they are lack of real-life knowledge, and only get some theories from books which are very different from the applications in life. Secondly, some young can find what kind of job they want to through working one year, so they could learn more knowledge which are benefit to their future career. For instance, James who finished high school study 2 years ago went to a auto factory as a worker before university study, and he was very interested in it. Now he is studying in University of Alberta major in auto engineer, and learns better than others who never touched it before. Lastly, the students maybe easily get along well with other students after working or traveling since they can get something useful during working.
In contrast, the disadvantages are also unignored. On the one hand, after a period of traveling, the students may just like to travel and hate to study in the classroom, because they think the life out of school is so funny, while the study is so boring that they don’t want to continually study forever. On the other hand, it is just waste time for many excellent students who have been clear what they are interested in and what they want to learn.
In a word, there are advantages and disadvantages to work or travel before university studies. |
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