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In the contemporary society, the increasing criminal rate has disturbed(感觉用is disturbing比较好,毕竟不是一个完成了的动作) the whole society(换个词吧比如humanity,第一句话当中结尾2个一样的词不太好). Meanwhile, a host of news media (tend to)report all the (the whole)process of the crime(cases or crimes).Some individuals' opinion is that it is unsensible(insensible,不过不知道你要表达什么意思) to expose every specific(最好用detail, 而且specific不能做名词) in crimes, but speaking for myself, their opinion is far away from the reality.
Convincing argument can be made that, the media has responsibility and obligation(单数的话加 the) to let citizens know every important event happened in their daily life .Therefore, there's no doubt that reporting the details of crimes is part of their work, and people have the right to know the crime's specific details. Moreover, it is evident that covering(如果要用cultivate的话,这里就用revealing) the details of crime(crimes),to some extent, cultivates people's sense of crisis. Precisely(不确定, 不过貌似一般用specifically比较多吧), dwellers can become more experienced to know how to protect themselves. A third point I want to mention to support my idea is that reporting the details of crimes can effectively decreasing the rate of committee(committing,不过不用更好) crimes, that is to say, the media can make a contribute(contribution) to public security by doing that.(third point的时候尽量别用I啊什么的,用research shows or statistic shows 比较客观)
By contrast that(拜托少用点that吧), many individuals claim that(又来) too much details of crimes in the coverage will lead to some severe problems in society. In the first place, too much(many) images of crimes, for instance, violence, mudurer, just name a few, may cause public's(直接public) panic, especially among youngsters. Then, those who support this point think that the media's work is not to expose the nagetive(negative) things .But by which I mean, the media can(should) not only(uncover) cover the positive envents(events) in society, but make the other dark side revealed in public, rather than polish it.
In summary, I would admit that reporting too much details of crimes may arouse individuals' worry. Despite that, more crucial is that (连着2个that,自己读着都觉得好累赘吧,而且这里最好写成 what more crucial is) media's report will give public a real (impression of the)world we are living in. Overall, I believe this discussion would gian(gain) much more bright advise(advices 动词和名字不要搞混了,老词了) in the future. |
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