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标题: 【独立写作】周医森的作业贴 [打印本页]

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-12 11:53:14 标题: 【独立写作】周医森的作业贴

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11月10日考试，今天开始正式练作文。
军令如山倒，不写不睡觉，剪刀手^ ^y
1楼永远等待着RO大牛驾到！！！

[attach]192137[/attach]【RO大湿，这篇请你修改哒:$ 】

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns. (Environment)

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which of the following three factors contributes to an enjoyable vacation most? A good food. B.good location. C good friends with you. (Life)

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10.20: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should make their social or political views known to students

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10.24 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important characteristic for politics is to accept responsibility for mistake. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (Politics)

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10.25 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make and learn from their own mistakes. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (Education)

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-12 12:03:17

本帖最后由 B因子大片段于 2012-11-1 20:30 编辑

【2L 个人练习】不参与小组修改的哈~

10.12个人练习 [attach]191945[/attach]

10.14 TPO13综合写作 [attach]192038[/attach]

10.16 TPO14综合写作[attach]192139[/attach]

10.24 TPO16综合写作[attach]192536[/attach]

10.24 TOP16独立写作[attach]192537[/attach]

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作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-12 12:06:08

本帖最后由 B因子大片段于 2012-10-25 20:58 编辑

【3L 学习计划】

10.13
上午影像学预习、下午外科感染、晚上TOP13 阅读听力
作文休息一天，坐等同组战友该文章
总结：R25+L27=52 弱爆了
阅读是弱项，今天错了2道词汇题、1道summary
还有一个是没看到题干中出现“this passage”而定位到局部的某一段

10.14
上午精读TPO13 R1&2，手术学复习
下午诊断腹部+查体视频
晚上口语+作文+手术学视频

10.15
一天的课。。。晚上做TPO14 R&L，R29+L27=56 阅读这次还好，听力我表示非常害怕天文学和考古学，完全没有像心理和生物类话题的掌控力，嗷呜┗<(=｀O′=)>┛
看两篇无老师巨讲堂，关电脑预习明天早上水盐电解质平衡的见习

10.16
中午精听TOP14听力，下午精读TPO14阅读。吃晚饭练口语，晚上回来两篇作文儿。搞完作文复习影像学。

10.20
这几天心脏听诊见习和看书，深刻地觉得自己跟个白痴一样<(=˚　˚)
白天一直在看心脏体格检查的书，中午看张红岩的《10天搞定TOEFL作文》，晚上练了1.5小时的口语，写了篇作文。
晚上剩下的时间：看手术学视频，预习明天上午影像学见习。明天下午看诊断学黄疸workshop。压力so特么大。

10.24
今日TPO16 R28+L29=57 我表示听力笔记完全没必要写那么多……
作文开始掐时间，综合写作最后一秒写完，独立写作超了10多分钟而且各种辞藻平淡orz...
对策：尽量每天一篇独立+综合，咳咳，我尽量（今天晚上已经逃课了）
阅读要抓逻辑抓框架，听力理解＞笔记。

10.25
逃课的时间格外珍惜。刚写完小组作文，准备搞定今天手术记录。晚上人多的时候出去练口语，其余的时间，TPO17。

作者: SYNCIA 时间: 2012-10-12 19:41:33

积分上了五十就可以贴附件了。还是欢迎你还互改小组啦~

作者: 秋雨荆州 时间: 2012-10-12 21:49:56

加油！

作者: Sinbo_Chan 时间: 2012-10-13 11:05:49

10,12 改好了，文字很漂亮

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-13 12:01:38

Sinbo_Chan 发表于 2012-10-13 11:05
10,12 改好了，文字很漂亮

多谢Sinbo>3<
“扩大概念”的意见好受用~论点三我自己也感觉写得有点收不住了，可能再加一句patent方面的会好一些。。。

Seldom开头的那句是倒装句，那句话我想表达的意思是，如果没有sharing，我们无法想象出一个dynamic的学术世界。

作者: TinaWang1 时间: 2012-10-13 23:05:16

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作者: SYNCIA 时间: 2012-10-14 23:47:42

B因子大片段发表于 2012-10-12 12:03
【2L 个人练习】不参与小组修改的哈~

10.12个人练习

综合写作有个约改的帖子，可以过来看看哈~

作者: 喵呜~ 时间: 2012-10-15 14:44:52

周同学你是不是上传错了文档啊我打开后发现时很奇怪的东西

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-15 18:46:54

252132618 发表于 2012-10-15 14:44
周同学你是不是上传错了文档啊我打开后发现时很奇怪的东西

嗷呜非常抱歉现在好了

作者: 喵呜~ 时间: 2012-10-15 20:48:50

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作者: 欣荷 时间: 2012-10-15 23:38:52

改晚了，不好意思啊。都是个人意见啦。如有不合适的忽略掉就行。哈哈。

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-16 00:11:49

欣荷发表于 2012-10-15 23:38
改晚了，不好意思啊。都是个人意见啦。如有不合适的忽略掉就行。哈哈。

亲>3< 多谢修改
想问一下，第二段你说“主要还是逻辑啦”是指逻辑不清晰..?
直说无妨的，我喜欢被虐，啊哈哈。

作者: 欣荷 时间: 2012-10-16 00:14:27

B因子大片段发表于 2012-10-16 00:11
亲>3< 多谢修改
想问一下，第二段你说“主要还是逻辑啦”是指逻辑不清晰..?
直说无妨的，我喜欢被虐， ...

就是旁边备注的那个意思:p

作者: mxy0911 时间: 2012-10-16 21:58:06

楼主expression 不错，学习了！

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-16 23:52:28

mxy0911 发表于 2012-10-16 21:58
楼主expression 不错，学习了！

同学，木有看到你的修改痕迹。是word传错了？麻烦检查一下，嘿嘿

作者: mxy0911 时间: 2012-10-17 09:40:05

B因子大片段发表于 2012-10-16 23:52
同学，木有看到你的修改痕迹。是word传错了？麻烦检查一下，嘿嘿

你好我查了一下~是可以看见的我用了word审阅-修订工具。在我这边显示是正常的。如果不可以的话我截图发给你吧~

作者: Darren_Van 时间: 2012-10-17 15:14:45

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作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-17 17:36:51

mxy0911 发表于 2012-10-17 09:40
你好我查了一下~是可以看见的我用了word审阅-修订工具。在我这边显示是正常的。如果不可以的话我截图发给 ...

1. 多谢mxy，neglect那个好有杀伤力，哈哈我喜欢！我自己写完怎么一点都没察觉到这个硬伤呢= =还有the destination is the desire that drives us to travel，经你那么一改，三秒钟变简洁！
2. 第三段我解释一下哈。题干是ABC观点选择题，第三段后半段我想论证的是good firends在这个论点下的劣势。
3. 期待下次合作，嗷呜~

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-17 17:37:07

mxy0911 发表于 2012-10-17 09:40
你好我查了一下~是可以看见的我用了word审阅-修订工具。在我这边显示是正常的。如果不可以的话我截图发给 ...

作者: mxy0911 时间: 2012-10-17 18:00:21

B因子大片段发表于 2012-10-17 17:37
1. 多谢mxy，neglect那个好有杀伤力，哈哈我喜欢！我自己写完怎么一点都没察觉到这个硬伤呢= =还有the de ...

不谢~我的作文也求改啊~ 虽然题目选的有问题。。

作者: mpromanus 时间: 2012-10-19 18:59:26

Some people think that government and companies should keep their patents forever, while others think that governments and companies should share their discoveries with all the scientists in the world. What is your opinion and why? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Although there has been a strain of compliments that a patent brightens our intellectual world, I am, on the contrary, pretty much concerned about whether this policy benefits us in the long run. Instead, it is reasonable for government and companies to share discoveries with scientists in the world, which shortens problem-solving process (As a noun phrase this has to either have an article or be plural. I can't decide which because I don't know if you meant there's a universal process on problem-solving, or there is a particular problem-solving process that can benefit, or something else.), enhances academic communication, and ultimately pushes scientific development into a new era.

First and foremost, spreading new discoveries to the rest of the scientific world provides expediency to problem-solving. A concrete example of the famous database Medline fits perfectly into this idea. Medline provides scientists with the latest information mostly for free, or at least with relatively easy access. Accordingly, it becomes perhaps the most reliable database in the scientific world. Groups of doctors, researchers and technicians log on to Medline every day, sniffing around for even the slightest hints of new discoveries that can possibly settle their remaining problems. Some companies or governments, on the other hand, stick to their principle of patents, offering mostly charging papers. I have personally suffered a lot from writing e-mails to corresponding authors for their papers, with explicit explanations of my intention, which is time consuming and always results in vain.(This is good. But, as I love to challenge people, think about this: you seem to assume that this information should be provided free and promptly when you or some other people need it – why? In other words, what makes your personal desire to solve your problems using someone else's discoveries more valid and proper than an author's personal desire to protect his financial/academic interests, should he have any?)

Furthermore, sharing new discoveries enhances communications between academic groups or individuals. Whether it be a scientific conference, or a report tour, of simply e-mails between scientists, sharing makes smooth communication. This effect can be of two sorts. First, for those who want to learn from the discoverers, communication means self-improvement. Second, after listening to critical ideas from other scientists, the original researchers may pay attention to details or even flaws that might seem unnoticeable in the first place. Seldom can we imagine a dynamic academic world where patents are kept forever, sharing new discoveries blocked, and spreading knowledge oppressed.

On a larger scale, whenever a new discovery was spread to the public, there was a landmark era. Darwin’s On the Origins of Species by Means of Natural Selection, Bruno’s claim that earth is not the center of universe, and Elbert Einstein’s quantum theory-none of these great minds or their upper class (? Do you mean 'boss'?) have kept their intellectual treasure forever.

To be sure, keeping their patents for the consideration of copyright was not so far off the mark, yet those governments and companies neglect to take into account the most important forces that drive our society forward-solving problems, communications, and scientific development. Only by sharing new ideas can we truly make a difference.

总结：

Very well executed. Excellent job.

作者: 海上的月亮 时间: 2012-10-19 20:21:02

mpromanus 发表于 2012-10-19 18:59
Some people think that government and companies should keep their patents forever, while others thin ...

给力！

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-19 21:50:11

mpromanus 发表于 2012-10-19 18:59
Some people think that government and companies should keep their patents forever, while others thin ...

非常感谢，有种被抠到思维死角的感觉。果然是exact的大湿呀，:$

作者: 吸收阳光 时间: 2012-10-21 10:29:42

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LZ逻辑清晰，表达流畅用词到位，学习了！

作者: 娜加 时间: 2012-10-21 12:30:31

写的很棒啊~~~这么难的题说的挺清楚的。

作者: Darren_Van 时间: 2012-10-21 20:49:39

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作者: snowpearsherry 时间: 2012-10-25 00:10:54

无意中路过~给lz鼓了个掌！

作者: err0716 时间: 2012-10-25 23:25:41

膜拜LZ~~

作者: elisawuliang 时间: 2012-10-26 18:19:38

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作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-29 21:58:30

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时间不够用，只好单独练习了。
战友们，感谢你们~共勉！:$

10.29 Agree or disagree, in order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else. (Success)

作者: SYNCIA 时间: 2012-10-30 08:14:33

B因子大片段发表于 2012-10-29 21:58
时间不够用，只好单独练习了。
战友们，感谢你们~共勉！

你这算是脱队练习咩？：）

作者: B因子大片段 时间: 2012-10-30 12:38:50

SYNCIA 发表于 2012-10-30 08:14
你这算是脱队练习咩？：）

脱队联系啥概念？按字面理解的话，是的咯。

作者: honghongwa 时间: 2012-10-30 21:25:34

29的文章看过了。。楼主很强啊，不过还是有一些单词拼写错误，楼主优点单词运用能力强，句式很出彩，不过逻辑整理上稍显凌乱。。呵呵最后一段奥巴马也～

作者: honghongwa 时间: 2012-10-30 21:57:52

恩，对不起楼主，改好了，不会传文档。。

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