Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
这道题属于“学校或老师应该如何”的类型,这类题目在84道issue题里占了12道,所以很重要。另外,写作要求包括 be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position,这类题目的写法也要注意。
I strongly disagree that students should be encouraged to choose their study areas for future lucrative careers for two reasons. First, no studies in any given fields can guarantee the so-called lucrative careers in the future; moreover, students who choose the fields with the hope of lucrative careers may not enjoy their studies and their future works. While the educational institutions may be interested in cultivating future successful alumni, this policy may lead to dissatisfaction among the graduates.
To begin with, there are no such majors that can ensure that the graduates will necessarily enjoy a lucrative career later in their lives. To get a well-paid job and a successful career requires a combination of many things including a good degree with solid knowledge, a booming industry in which the graduate works, good interpersonal skills and a large amount of luck. Maybe pursuing a major in certain fields such as computer science and finance can increase the chance of getting into a field where more people can have lucrative careers. But the graduates also need many other things mentioned above to become successful. In other words, the notion that certain fields of study can “prepare” students for lucrative careers is nothing but wishful thinking.
1. 主题句就是回应主旨句的第一部分。这是1+3模型的精华所在,保证全文是一个相互呼应的整体。这是对我们同意转换能力的考验,注意我前面用的词和这里用的词略有不同,句型也有变化。同意转换的重要性是无法被过分强调的。
2. 接下来是解释这个观点背后的理由,指出成功多金的事业是可遇不可求。这里其实也是用到了argument中的批判策略,提出其他的因素。当然要想到这一点也是需要一些阅历的,年轻人总觉得自己什么都可以做到,在现实中遇到挫折才会懂得有很多事并不是自己能控制的。
3. Maybe这一句是一个让步,这种让步其实是为了后面的but做铺垫。某些科目可以增加X的机会,但是...
4. But 这一句其实是复述第二句的内容。不要以为这是废话,其实这是增强文章的衔接和连贯的很重要的策略,就是把前说过的话再说一遍,而有了maybe的让步,这句话的意义就不一样了,起到强化观点的作用。
5. 最后in other words 其实也没有新的内容而是再强调主题句里的观点-题目中的假设是不靠谱的。
注意这段话的展开不是先提出例子然后解释例子,但是还是由提到一些具体的例子。
Another reason why this policy is not desirable is that students may end up studying something they are not interested in. Without genuine interests in the field but driven by the extrinsic motivation from the promise of future “lucrative” careers, the students may find it difficult to understand the materials or commit themselves to the studies. Their academic performance may not meet the standards expected by the future employers and, as a result, they may not get good jobs in the fields. Even they do manage to start their careers in the fields, they may not enjoy their work and the lack of job satisfaction would render the “lucrative" careers less meaningful for the graduates. Their chance for long-term success will also be very small.
1. 这里的another reason是呼应上一段的第一个reason,这样两段之间的过渡就比较自然。段落之间的过渡是非常重要的。
2. 这句话是对上句观点的展开解释 这里without X, something bad will happen的句型套路是值得学习的 可以用来强调X的重要性,又不用老用important这类词
3. 接下来是一个连锁反应,没有兴趣就学不好,学不好就找不到好工作,而好工作就回到了lucrative career这个关键词上了。这里要特别强调中间段要反复回应关键词,否则很容易偏题。
4. Even这句是讨论另一种情况,即使找到工作也未必有满足感,没有满足感就很难长久的成功 这里的论述策略还是通过推理指出从题干出发会得出大家都同意不好的结论 从而说明题干提出的应该如何是不好的
Some people may argue that by encouraging the students to choose majors that lead to lucrative careers the universities may cultivate future alumni with higher income, who will then donate more money to the institutions. With stronger financial support from the alumni, the schools will have more resources to improve their education and attract better faculty members and students. What is overloooked in the reasoning is the possibility that students who cannot find lucrative careers after studying majors they were encouraged to choose or do not enjoy their careers due to the lack of interests may not be willing to donate any money to the schools.
1. 这里提出某个可能的挑战 注意这里涉及到一个常识 就是大学都希望校友能捐钱 欧美大学都这样 校友捐款被纳入计算排名的公式里 这属于干货 你想不出来也没关系 可以用我的 只要别照抄我的句子就行了
2.With stronger这一句是进一步指出校友捐赠的好处 算是对对方挑战的解释
3. What is overloooked in the reasoning is the possibility that 这个句型其实可以学一下 这里基本上就是用前面的观点来反驳
In conclusion, while it is understandable that educational institutions may want to encourage students to prepare for lucrative careers by choosing certain majors, this policy is not helpful for students as there are no majors that can guarantee lucrative careers in the future and students may end up with careers they do not enjoy if they follow the advice of the institutions rather than their hearts.
第一段:1主题句呼应主旨句的第一部分,并注意同意转换和句型变化。2接下来解释理由,提出其他可能性因素。3Maybe让步,4然后but把第二句的理由重复,强化观点。5最后in other words, 再次强调主题句观点。
第二段:1 another reason呼应上一段的第一个reason,使段落过渡自然。2without X,...may find it difficult to do sth. 可以用来强调X的重要性,代替important。3 在有连锁反应的情况下,最后要回到关键词上,否则容易偏题。4 Even...
第三段:提出挑战性的观点,并对其加以解释。3. what is overlooked in the reasoning is the possibility that …对前面的观点加以反驳。
总阶段:in conclusion, while it is understandable that…, this policy is not helpful for students as…同意转换
1. 认真学习这篇范文,思考一下有哪些地方值得学习,哪些地方你觉得有疑问或者质疑。请在回帖讨论。文章的思路很值得学习。While 引导出反对观点这个很有用。因为自己在以前的作文中都是写“some people may argue”
另外有一个疑问。题目的要求是 "address the most compelling reasons and/or examples" 如果在文中只是在中间第三段中说了一个,会不会导致不符合要求?