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182. Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Pets are always kept for companionship and enjoyment. As time goes by, they take a step forward, not only as animals raised at home, but as parts of the family members. The current prevailing phenomenon—people developing a close relationship with pets and further taking them as family members—arouse controversies among people. However, why not do so? The visible benefits outweighs the potential drawbacks in my point of view.
To begin with, the play of the pets gives happiness to the whole family. The owner of a dog appreciates its loyalty, and one who has a bird is satisfied to enjoy its beautiful songs; the playful characteristic of a cat amuses the kids, and the speaking of a parrot, although awkward, surprises people around it. To a degree, human and pet contribute toward the happiness of each other in a pet relationship. “Having a pet promotes a longer and happier life.” A pet owner once said.
Furthermore, pets can provides their owners with many health benefits. The keeping of pets has been shown to help remove stress. Walking a dog can also provide its owner with fresh air, proper exercise and the opportunity for social interaction. Severe psychological problems are relieved by the companion and comfort from the pets, while heart attacks are avoided through the pleasant lives with pets.
However, there is still some objections to pets. Some people insisted that the concentration on pets lessened the time of communications so that owners become isolated and segregated from society. Other animal protectors argue that keep an animal as a pet is against its nature. Other sociologists worry that raising a pet may challenge the behavior pattern in a region: people raise pets instead of pets, children play with pets instead of their peers… Yet, these worries appear too radical and unrealistic. Raising a pet is still a favorable deed when one needs companion or comfort.
To sum up, retaining a close relationship with pets has more pons than cons. People are able to gain happiness, keep healthy, and become more respectful for the nature and the creature around us through the relationship with pets. (356)
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Pets are always kept for companionship and enjoyment. As time goes by, they take a step forward, not only as animals raised at home, but as parts of the family members. The current prevailing phenomenon—people developing a close relationship with pets and further taking them as family members—arouse controversies among people. However, why not do so? The visible benefits outweighs 取出s the potential drawbacks in my point of view.

To begin with, the play of 这个of不好,with怎样?the pets gives happiness to the whole family. The owner of a dog appreciates its loyalty, and one who has a bird is satisfied to enjoy its beautiful songs; the playful characteristic of a cat amuses the kids, and the speaking of a parrot, although awkward, surprises people around it. To a degree, human and pet contribute toward the happiness of each other in a pet relationship. “Having a pet promotes a longer and happier life.” A pet owner once said.

Furthermore, pets can provides 去s their owners with many health benefits. The keeping of pets has been shown to help remove stress. Walking a dog 好像真有这样写的,不错:D can also provide its owner with fresh air, proper exercise and the opportunity for social interaction. Severe psychological problems are relieved by the companion and comfort from the pets, while heart attacks are avoided through the pleasant lives with pets.

However 这里不是重点,however太强烈了,不如admittedly , there is are still some objections to pets. Some people insisted 时态不必过去时吧,insist即可 that the concentration on pets lessened the time of communications so that owners become isolated and segregated from society. Other animal protectors argue that keep an animal as a pet is against its nature. Other sociologists worry that raising a pet may challenge the behavior pattern in a region: people raise pets instead of pets confused ??, children play with pets instead of their peers… Yet, these worries appear too radical and unrealistic. Raising a pet is still a favorable deed when one needs companion or comfort.

To sum up, retaining a close relationship with pets has more pons than cons. People are able to gain happiness, keep healthy, and become more respectful for the nature and the creature around us through the relationship with pets.

全文结构不错,思路很开阔,
只是一些单复数需要注意

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发表于 2006-8-6 12:06:36 |只看该作者

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谢谢cellophane05 的悉心修改,刚来,还请多多批评。:)已回拍。

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发表于 2006-8-6 16:13:38 |只看该作者
同主题几天练一次的啊?

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