issue196 一标准反面教材

lovebrianUID：157127

196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。

Position disagree with concession
科技给人类解决的问题大于产生的问题，因为科技大大改善了人们的生活，尽管科技的确带来了很多问题

b1科技解决了很多问题，使人们的生活大大改善

b2科技是人类社会发展的手段，人们不能放弃科技

b3科技的确带来了一些负面问题，给人们的生活带来了不变甚至威胁，人们应该发展科技而尽量减少其负面作用




As the development of technology, more problems are solved but new problems appear.  Thus, some people as the speaker claim that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life.  In my point of view, technology solves more problems than it brings for our daily lives are turning better and better owing to technology though it creates some new problems.

First, technology solves a host of problems which makes people's lives change much better than before.  Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may  be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as diseases curing, traveling and transportation, education, and so on.  Nowadays, people can not live without technology at all, so to speak, technology is always everywhere around like the air.  People watch TV, travel among webs, make dialogues by phones or cellphones, and cook with a micro-wave oven and so on.  By such various sorts of instruments of technology, it is getting more convenient and comfortable for human's life.  For example, the new kind of industry, E-business has made its great success to come to us.  One can select things which they want to buy on the web and input the VISA number to pay for the goods whatever are wanted whether books or a Hummer.  And it will be soon to receive things you bought which should be sent to your home with perfect service.  Accordingly, technology has done a great deal for human's lives.

Second, in modern times, technology is the main method for people to improve our societies that should not be abandoned.  As the further leader, great politician of China, Den Xiaoping once said that technology is the first productivity.  It means that technology has become the engine power of the improving of modern societies and that more and more competitions at many levels-from companies to countries-are based on a technological level at which technology itself is the only key to judge who win and who lose.  The technology goes, and then human race goes after it though technology is like a little kid of human.  Since it is so weighty, people would never abandon it in that people would never desire slowing our development.

Admittedly, as a coin has two sides, technology can not avoid being such a two-edged sword which also may bring in negative problems.  Such as environmental pollutions, cyber crimes, and even bigger problem, for example, people are changing lonelier but few words.  These problems are born after their positive sides which do put lots of people in mires sometimes.  But we should not deny technology for such reasons, if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides.  We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.

To sum up, technology, only an instrument, should be used more properly and sufficiently with right purposes with an eye to decreasing its negative points and doing more and more contributions to our world.



写的狂郁闷~~~宿舍有两个在搞语音聊天~~~faint!!!

sniper613UID：147372

196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。

Position disagree with concession
科技给人类解决的问题大于产生的问题，因为科技大大改善了人们的生活，尽管科技的确带来了很多问题

b1科技解决了很多问题，使人们的生活大大改善

b2科技是人类社会发展的手段，人们不能放弃科技

b3科技的确带来了一些负面问题，给人们的生活带来了不变甚至威胁，人们应该发展科技而尽量减少其负面作用




As the development of technology, more problems are solved but new problems appear. Thus, some people as the speaker claim that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life. In my point of view, technology solves more problems than it brings for our daily lives are turning better and better owing to technology though it creates some new problems.

First, technology solves a host of problems, which makes people's lives change(become) much better than before. Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as diseases curing, traveling and transportation, education, and so on. Nowadays, people cannot live without technology at all, so to speak, technology (like the air) is always everywhere around (like the air). People watch TV, travel among webs, make dialogues by phones or cellphones(mobile phone or cell phone), and cook with a micro-wave oven and so on. By such various sorts of instruments of technology, it is getting more convenient and comfortable for human's life. For example, the new kind of industry, E-business has made its great success to come to(benefit) us. One can select things which they want to buy on the web and input the VISA number to pay for the goods whatever are wanted whether books or a Hummer. And it will be soon to receive things you bought which should be sent to your home with perfect service. Accordingly, technology has done a great deal for human's lives.(论述清晰，例子也很恰当)

Second, in modern times, technology is the main method for people to improve our societies that should not be abandoned. As the further leader, great politician of China, Den Xiaoping once said that technology is（主语时态？） the first productivity.（power of producing） It means that technology has become the engine power of the improving of modern societies and that more and more competitions at many levels-from companies to countries-are based on a technological level at which technology itself is the only key to judge who win and who lose. The technology goes, and then human race goes after it though technology is like a little kid of human. Since it is so weighty, people would never abandon it in that people would never desire slowing our development.

Admittedly, as a coin has two sides, technology cannot avoid being such a two-edged sword, which also may bring in negative problems. Such as environmental pollutions, cyber crimes, and even bigger problem, for example, people are changing lonelier but few words.(Why? You know and I know, but it is also necessary to expatiate it.) These problems are born after their positive sides, which do put lots of people in mires sometimes. But we should not deny technology for such reasons, if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides. We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.(911的例子我觉得更好)

To sum up, technology, only an instrument, should be used more properly and sufficiently with right purposes with an eye to decreasing its negative points（I cannot find the evidences to support this statement in your essay） and doing more and more contributions to our world.

写的很好，只是一些minor mistakes,  最后一段不要过于发展，把前面的话重述一下就是了

lovebrianUID：157127

哈哈 谢谢sniper兄弟！写得很郁闷地说~~~鼓励好及时阿~~~~~问题指得很对~~~~呵呵~~高兴！再次感谢拉    btw我觉得我不太会举例子~~~汗！！

lovebrianUID：157127

还有个问题~~~~名人说的话里面 内容如果属于公认的事实~~`是不是可以用现在时态呢？我印象中好像是这样的！

xqmelissaUID：140370

是的
用现在时

lovebrianUID：157127

你个小天使~~~~就没点对文章的看法阿`~~~~

imongUID：140258

她不来我来好了

Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as ...
自己没拿word检查吧？

b1写得没条理。
b3更是纯属beg the question，admit一大堆之后瞧瞧你怎么解释的：But we should not deny technology for such reasons, if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides. We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.这算什么解释？既然你认为solve more than create就干脆一比一对着数，或者指出来create是solve得什么什么关系，等等。这一段算什么？

实在算不上一篇好文章。一般般而已，没体现出什么思辨来。这个题目按理说挺critical的啊，自己再想想去。

xqmelissaUID：140370

呵呵
有牛人给你评了，我就不班门弄斧了

今天写I实在写的头大啊，再加上改了几篇文章，挨了几回训，实在是没心情了，下篇吧

一会发我写的BT文章上来，看看你们什么反映吧
最近写BT题目写的我快BT了！

lovebrianUID：157127

最初由 imong 发布
[B]Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as ...
自己没拿word检查吧？

b1写得没条理。
b3更是纯属beg the question，admit一大堆之后瞧瞧你怎么解释的：But we should not deny technology for such reasons, u]if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides. We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.这算什么解释？既然你认为solve more than create就干脆一比一对着数，或者指出来create是solve得什么什么关系，等等。这一段算什么？

实在算不上一篇好文章。一般般而已，没体现出什么思辨来。这个题目按理说挺critical的啊，自己再想想去。
[/B]

啊。。。太深刻了！！！！
这篇文章觉得好~~~写   因为是常识~~~写起来就发现问题了
如何证明solve比造成的多是个很大的工程！faint~~~
b3  beg question 了阿~~~~我想想该怎么写~~~

呵呵~~~imong出手就是不一般啊！！！！
bow bow  呵呵~~~~改好了明天再贴来！

juliozhaoUID：144326

196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低人们的生活质量。

Position disagree with concession
科技给人类解决的问题大于产生的问题，因为科技大大改善了人们的生活，尽管科技的确带来了很多问题

b1科技解决了很多问题，使人们的生活大大改善

b2科技是人类社会发展的手段，人们不能放弃科技

b3科技的确带来了一些负面问题，给人们的生活带来了不变甚至威胁，人们应该发展科技而尽量减少其负面作用




As the development of technology, more problems are solved but new problems appear. Thus, some people as the speaker claim that technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life. In my point of view, technology solves more problems than it brings for our daily lives are turning better and better owing to technology though it creates some new problems.

First, technology solves a host of problems which makes people's lives change much better than before. Technology, which affects even in every fields of our society and it also plays a more important role that may be a necessary kind of tool used more frequently, solves a considerable of problems such as diseases curing, traveling and transportation, education, and so on. Nowadays, people can not live without technology at all, so to speak, technology is always everywhere around like the air. People watch TV, travel among webs, make dialogues by phones or cellphones, and cook with a micro-wave oven and so on. By such various sorts of instruments of technology, it is getting more convenient and comfortable for human's life. For example, the new kind of industry, E-business has made its great success to come to us. One can select things which they want to buy on the web and input the VISA number to pay for the goods whatever are wanted whether books or a Hummer. And it will be soon to receive things you bought which should be sent to your home with perfect service. Accordingly, technology has done a great deal for human's lives.   （感觉用新旧对比的说是不是好一点）

Second, in modern times, technology is the main method for people to improve our societies that should not be abandoned. As the further leader, great politician of China, Den Xiaoping     （是不是应该按照英语的写法啊？？？）  once said that technology is the first productivity. It means that technology has become the engine power of the improving of modern societies and that more and more competitions at many levels-from companies to countries-are based on a technological level at which technology itself is the only key to judge who win and who lose. The technology goes, and then human race goes after it though technology is like a little kid of human. Since it is so weighty, people would never abandon it in that people would never desire slowing our development.

Admittedly, as a coin has two sides, technology can not avoid being such a two-edged sword which also may bring in negative problems. Such as environmental pollutions, cyber crimes, and even bigger problem, for example, people are changing lonelier but few words. These problems are born after their positive sides which do put lots of people in mires sometimes. But we should not deny technology for such reasons, if we do so, we would deny everything at the same reason that there are negative sides.   （We people, the lord of the world with high intelligence, should make it a better world with the help of technology and, of course, solve these problems as possible as we can.）怎么写到那去了，一定是看了THE LORD OF THE RING：THE RETURN  OF THE KING :D

To sum up, technology, only an instrument, should be used more properly and sufficiently with right purposes with an eye to decreasing its negative points and doing more and more contributions to our world.

刚看提纲时感觉分论点可以，但论述的过程不太好，建议你在写的时候，不时的回头看一下分论点。也许效果会好一些！！
一点建议，仅供参考！！！

sniper613UID：147372

时态：
客观真理及事实从句的事态不受主句的影响
如： People in the 18th century said the Earth moves around the Sun.

lovebrianUID：157127

最初由 juliozhao 发布
[B][QUOTE]196 "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."
196． 科技产生的问题多于所解决的，可能威胁或降低..

以下省略...... [/B]

哈哈 lord是写过了 的确是看那个看得~~哈哈

写的时候精力不集中~~~郁闷啊！我好好改改~~明天贴来~~嘿嘿~
感谢你啊~~你的id 我很熟悉了

lovebrianUID：157127

最初由 sniper613 发布
[B]时态：
客观真理及事实从句的事态不受主句的影响
如： People in the 18th century said the Earth moves around the Sun. [/B]

那我那句邓小平的话时态就没问题咯~~呵呵~~
谢谢你啦

lovebrianUID：157127

最初由 xqmelissa 发布
[B]呵呵
有牛人给你评了，我就不班门弄斧了

今天写I实在写的头大啊，再加上改了几篇文章，挨了几回训，实在是没心情了，下篇吧

一会发我写的BT文章上来，看看你们什么?.

以下省略...... [/B]

天使mm怎么老写bt题目阿~~~~~还不得总郁闷啊！呵呵~~期待着你得了~~呵呵

imongUID：140258

一会儿melissa的文章出来大家往死了掐就是 :cool: