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Do you agree that telephones are playing a more effective role than television in people’s life?

  Nowadays, you may usually hear of a sentence, that is, “telephone is more effective that TV”. The advocates view that with the improvement of communication technology telephones are playing a more effective role in people’s life.  Opponents, however, insist that television is more effective than telephone because as an the old saying goes “a picture is worth a thousand words’. When it comes to me, I definitely fall into the second category.
  Few people can deny the fact that telephones are really more effective than some other communication methods, especially compared with letters and telegraphs. It is hard to imagine that a hundred years ago people can communicate with each other only through the letters which will consume a lot of time and at an extreme low rate of efficiency. This can be illustrated by a simple example: in 1923, it would take 3 weeks to send a letter from Tianjin to Taiyuan, on the other hand, with the proper using of telephones, it only needs 1 minute to get in touch with some people who is living on the earth. So it seems that the telephone is more effective than any other tools.
  Nevertheless, every coin has two sides, so does the telephone. Telephone also has merits and its own limits, we are not supposed to ignore the disadvantages of telephones. As we all known, telephone communication is only an audio communication which can only convey very small amount of information compared with television. However, television is able to provide voices and pictures through its screen to its audiences, for instance, we can watch live football games and Daily News to obtain a huge amount of information though televisions, and we are not able to using telephones to accomplish that. Researchers from Nankai University have done a survey which revealed that about 70 percent of people thought television is much effective than telephone in many ways.
  Not only can televisions provide media informations to its audiences, but they can also offer many interesting and very useful programs which telephone can not provide. Just a few days ago, I watched a TV program called Yang Lan One On One, hosted by Yang Lan who is a woman that I admired most because of her knowledge reserves and elegant temperament. On that day , Yang Lan interviewed the distinguished scientist Yang Zhen Ning, a well known physical scientist who has won the Nobel prize in 1957. I understand how Yang Zhen Ning could be so successful though this interview: as a newcomer, he grasped every opportunity to learn independent thinking, how to solve the physical problem himself. And his words “life is an adventure”is also engraved on my heart. I can learn this only from television, so I think televisions are playing a more effective role than telephones in people’s life.

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本帖最后由 peterhan91 于 2013-5-2 14:28 编辑

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The environment issue is too complex to be handled by individuals, agree or disagree?

  Nowadays, you may always hear of a sentence, that is, The problem of environment is so complex that our individuals can do nothing about it. Advocates view that in order to solve environmental problems, we should invest a large amount of money and energy which individuals cannot afford. Opponents, however, insist that it is our duty to protect the environment, and only with the help of every individual, can we solve the tricky problem. When it comes to me, I definitely fall into the first category.
  Few people can deny the fact that when we try to solve a big environmental problem, such as dust storms in Beijing and oil spills in the Gulf of Mexico, it is very hard to confine it to one single region or county. In view of the problem covers so large amount of area, only with the help of countries and international organizations can we solve this kind of issues. From this point, it is too difficult and too complex for any individual to solve such kind of problems.
  Besides, a tremendous amount of money which used to solve environmental problems are too heavy for any individuals. For instance, in 1998, the Government of the People’s Republic of China spent over 10 billion dollars to stop the deforestation which is the main factor contribute to the form of dust storms in Jilin province and inner Mongolia. It is not hard for us to understand that 10 billion dollars is an enormous figure for our ordinary people, and it is a big number for our country as well. More importantly, one single person does not have enough money to polish up their living environment, which is precisely why more and more environmental organizations such as Friends of Earth in Hongkong and WWF are founded by people in recent years. Thus, I believe environmental problems are too complex to solve by individuals due to the money they needed.
  Nevertheless, we should bear in mind that individuals are also playing very crucial roles in coping with environmental issues. Ordinary individuals, on the one hand, can protect the environment simply by saving water, planting more trees, recycling paper and so on and so forth, on the other hand, can take part in many kinds of environmental organizations to protect the environment.
  In conclusion, I would argue that even though environmental issues are too complex for individuals, however, without individuals environmental problems may never be solved.

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