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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the development of technology, people start to doubt whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Different people have different opinion. As far as I am concerned, I tend to disagree with this statement that children today are less creative than they were in the past in due to technology. There are some reasons stated as follows will support my view.

First of all, compared with the children in the past, the intelligence of today children is higher than that of the past so that they endow a better creative. because the level of people’s life is higher than the people in the past with the advanced development of techonology, most people have a well-to-do life today, thus today parents will support more nutrient foods for their childern to make them develop a better intelligence and became more clever. However, in the past, many family had not enough food to satisfied kids, they always were in trouble of hungry, even starvation, therefore, they can’t pay more attention to creation than children today. So today’s children have more creations than they were in the past.

Secondly, today children are more creative than they were in the past in due to have a broader horizon and more profound knowledge. Generally speaking, creation is based on the rich knowladge. Today advanced technology can bring more ways for children to study, which make students study more convenient and get more knowledge. There are many examples appeared very often in daily life, such as internet, TV, and cellphone, they can find out every kinds of knowledge what they want to know by google, and they can know new information about the whole earth by watching TV, they also can abtain information from communicating with many people by cellphone. all of them have significant effects on enriching their knowledge and broadening their horizon. but in the past, some children hardly have no opportunity to go to school, relatively, they have no better education background than children today. Thus, it is easier for children today to creative than they were in the past.

To sum up, as what has been provide above, I disapprove of that statement that technolgy has made children less creative than they were in the past since today children not only have a higher intelligence but also have more profound knowledge and broader horizon compared with children in the past.

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大家帮我看看我有没有偏题。。。这篇不会写。。大家给点建议吧谢谢大家！

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发表于 2012-4-27 21:10:02 |只看该作者

With the development of technology, people start to doubt whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.（如果不打算换句话说就不要抄下来） Different people have different opinion. （具体说有什么意见，不说就不要写。。）As far as I am concerned, I tend to disagree with this statement that children today are less creative than they were in the past in due to technology. （又把题目抄一遍。。）There are some reasons stated as follows will support my view（句子不通，有are和will support两个谓语）

First of all, compared with the children in the past, the intelligence of today children is higher than that of the past so that they endow a better creative. because the level of people’s life is higher than the people in the past with the advanced development of techonology, （with放到前面去，否则会产生混淆）most people have a well-to-do life today, （以下可以换句）thus today parents will support（动词用错。。） more nutrient foods for their childern to make them develop a better intelligence and became more clever. However（转折连词不合适，on the contrary 或者by contrast神马的）, in the past, many family（数） had not enough food to satisfied（词） kids,（此处须加一个连接词） they always were in trouble of hungry, even starvation, （可换句）therefore, they can’t （时态）pay more attention to creation than children today（此句不通）. So today’s children have more creations （词用错，creativity）than they were in the past.

Secondly, today children are more creative than they （可不是同一批人）were in the past in（多词）due to have（词形用错） a broader horizon and more profound knowledge. Generally speaking, creation is based on the rich knowladge. （须证明）Today advanced technology can bring more ways for children to study, which make students study more convenient（副词） and get more knowledge. There are many examples appeared very often in daily life, such as internet, TV, and cellphone, （要么换句要么加连词）they can find out every kinds of knowledge what （that）they want to know by google, and they can know new information about the whole earth by watching TV, （换句）they also can abtain（错字） information from communicating with many people by cellphone. all of them have significant effects on enriching their（又是them又是their，指的却不是一个。。） knowledge and broadening their horizon. but in the past, some children hardly have （词）no opportunity to go to school, relatively,（连词或者换句） they have no better education background than children today. Thus, it is easier for children today to creative （词）than they were in the past.

To sum up, as what has been provide（词） above, I disapprove of that statement that technolgy has made children less creative than they were in the past（逗号） since today children not only have a higher intelligence but also have more profound knowledge and broader horizon compared with children in the past.

建议楼主：
1、写完最好用word检查一下先，有些错误是自己可以发现的。。
2、举例子。。

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