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10# 逼我用马甲
好像还木有发附件的权限,只好直接贴了,互相加油哦.....
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently.
These days people seem to come to the agreements that when their children are challenged by a hard work, all the parents should do is to stand aside and be a cheerleader. Indisputable这里用副词吧应该, it does have benefits, such as culturing their courage when facing difficulties, their 这里主语是谁?指代不明。capability of settle puzzlers. However, in some cases, just to encourage children is not enough, parents should help their children to do their works when the youngsters are not ready enough.
First of all, to encourage children on problems they are not able to settle is just going to frustrated (frustrate) them. As we all know, self-confidence is one of the most important characters in a person’s lifetime. If one is keep trying over and over again but the result just comes out the opposite way he/she wishes, he/she will probably feel awful and lose interest on the certain thing. Take me as an example, when I was 10 years old, as a four-grade elementary school student, my P.E. teacher taught us horse vaulting and asked us to practice. I was too nervous to finish that jumping and my teacher encouraged me of that. Finally, I screwed my courage and rush to the vault, and guess what? I just banged into the vault with a bump on my head. From then on, I have never tried to vaulting again, even I’ve got quite good resilience. In this case, the best thing of the parents or elders is to wait until the children are ready to handle.
Encourage 与help不是一个概念,至少你应当解释下关系吧,我承认鼓励是帮助的一个方面,但是你这里直接上来就说encourage 不好,又偏题之嫌哦。
Second, children learn from their parents through watching their movements, increasing feeling 这里用feel ,有点中式英语哦their confidence. How parents carrying out the work will always be a model to their children. Showing ways of solution would be a fantastic education method. We may find that children often copy their parents’ ways of talking, walking or eating, since learning from elders is an effective way of acquiring living skills. We may also find that a doctor’s child often grow up being a doctor, a teacher’s child being a teacher, a lawyer’s child being a jurist. So, when children are not able to come through a puzzle, just show it, displays the right way of settling the problem. Later, the child himself/herself will be able to do as good as you did before.
和上一段一样,你这里没有体现出帮助或者不帮助的理由,我能理解你的意思,如果父母不帮助,孩子就可以自己看着父母的行为成长,可是你需要解释说明一下,否则意外国人的直脑子无法理解啊。。。。
In sum, always to encourage a child to do his/her work on their own may sometimes be harmful in culture his/her self-confidence; on the contrary, to show the work can be done down correctly may sometimes set a good example to them and hence helping them do it much better. 额这句怎么有点别扭亚,像是中式英语哦。。。。
其实总体结构不错的,但是语言上中式思维较多,而且句子好像都是从中文直接翻译到英文的,建议多看看地道的英文表达,楼主加油哦!!!互相学习~~~ |
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