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发表于 2012-5-5 22:42:29 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

A recent letter based on a study of 18rhesus monkeys recommended that the birth order can influence individual’slevels of stimulation(ILS).In supporting this view,the author wrote that firstbornmonkeys had a higher level of cortisol as well as firstborn humans.But in myopinion,this conclusion is not enough persuasive.
First of all,the author conclusion wasbased of a study with a sample consisting of just 18 individuals.As we allknow,to draw a justified conclusion,we need to examine on a big sample.18 is areally small number,frankly speaking.What’s more,the author didn’t provide anyfurther information about the study,like the methods of measurement,theconditions of stimulation and so on,so it’s reasonable for us to hold adoubtful point of view about the data of the study.
Corsitol can’t be the only indicator ofindividual’s levels of stimulation.Even though the hormone cortisol primes thebody for increase activity level,it can’t directly represent the individual’slevels of stimulation which include a large aspects of activities,forexemple,psychology activity,physical activity,etc.unless the author providemore exact and direct data,we can’t believe in this conclusion.
Additionally,the author also provided thatfirstborn human had a alike effect as the monkey.From common sense we learnedthat humans are very similar with monkeys,but even in that situation, theregulation of the cortisol level between these two species is impossibly thesame!Providing that these two species have the same regulation system and thebirth order can both affect the ILS,this observation can not apply to all thespecies on the earth as we do not receive any further information about theother species.
In conclusion,to illustrate that the birthorder can definitely have a role in ILS,the author needed to provided morereliable and representative data,but not just the information of corsitollevel,or the similar study from firstborn human.

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发表于 2012-5-5 22:44:58 |只看该作者

哇哦~又看到纠结的恒河猴子了...偶不记得题目了，拍不了...

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发表于 2012-5-6 14:46:54 |只看该作者

其实从一个学生物的人的角度看 18只真心不少了人家nature science的paper也就做3-5只老鼠。。。。另外确实要把题目发上来。。。像我这种老人真心不记得题目了

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发表于 2012-5-7 15:59:01 |只看该作者

其实从一个学生物的人的角度看 18只真心不少了人家nature science的paper也就做3-5只老鼠。。。。另外确实要把题目发上来。。。像我这种老人真心不记得题目了
lian_zhuxi 发表于 2012-5-6 14:46

我记得一开始是XDF老师针对某几道题目说试验样本可以质疑一下，结果现在大家都是看到试验样本就质疑，认为样本少于千千万万必然会不具备代表性。不过也没办法，咱不学生物的，隔行如隔山。

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发表于 2012-5-8 22:29:13 |只看该作者

T_T
好的，下次求批斗的时候我会记得发题目的了！
BTW，我也是生物的。。。。
呃呃。。。
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发表于 2012-5-11 08:59:08 |只看该作者

Additionally,the author also provided thatfirstborn human had a alike effect as the monkey.From common sense we learnedthat humans are very similar with monkeys,but even in that situation, theregulation of the cortisol level between these two species is impossibly the same! 只有这段有可取之处，而且很好。其余的跑偏了，好好读读task instruction

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