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晚了一天,真是不好意思.^_^

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know events happening around the world, though sometimes they are unlikely to affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 第二十次作业

It is a consulting problem that whether we should get a knowledge of events, which happen around the global circumstance, or just neglect them since they have no affiliations with our routine affairs. Generally speaking, I would prefer the former opinion. In this essay, the reasons are introduced as below.

To start with, there is nothing having absolute no connections with you, especially in the rapidly improving era. For example, a butterfly's wings in the other side of the earth might create tiny changes in the atmosphere that ultimately cause a tornado to appear near your domicile. Or the great harvest of wheat in the Russia could reduce the price of cereal in your downtown market. Those what might have nothing to do with your daily life apparently can make a significant impact on you without your awareness. As a result, we had better pay much attention to the events occurring around so that we can take action in advance.

Additionally, things which are improbable to affect our daily life do not mean that they would have rare effect on the next generations. For instance, the news depicting the international trade and resource dispute might not attract your interest now but several decades passed it could be upgraded to a district conflict, or even a national war. Had we made some efforts to prevent the dispute, things might change to a better situation for our children and the future world.

Moreover, comprehending the world’s affairs contributes to the development of our ideology and moral level. Take the earthquake and tsunami happened in Indonesia for example, we can acquire the sensation of nature’s uncontrolled power upon human, as well as the collaboration and assistance among diverse countries. We learn from the information of today’s news, take considerations and improve our philosophy from the process.

Generally speaking, knowing the events happening all over the world is of vast importance. Whatever the events have affiliation with our living hood, we need to keep track with these news that may influence some part of our life.

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发表于 2009-4-14 22:42:35 |只看该作者

It is a consulting(confusing) problem that whether we should get a knowledge of events, which happen around the global circumstance, or just neglect them since they have no affiliations with our routine affairs. Generally speaking, I would prefer the former opinion. In this essay, the reasons are introduced as below.

To start with, there is nothing having absolute no connections with you, especially in the rapidly improving era. For example, a butterfly's wings in the other side of the earth might create tiny changes in the atmosphere that ultimately cause a tornado to appear near your domicile. Or the great harvest of wheat in the(去掉) Russia could reduce the price of cereal in your downtown market. Those what might have nothing to do with your daily life apparently can make a significant impact on you without your awareness. As a result, we had better pay much attention to the events occurring around so that we can take action in advance. - D/ ^( j6 O2 O7 W
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Additionally, things which are improbable to affect our daily life do not mean that they would have rare effect on the next generations. For instance, the news depicting the international trade and resource dispute might not attract your interest now but (after) several decades passed it could(would) be upgraded to a district conflict, or even a national war. Had we made some efforts to prevent the dispute, things might change to a better situation for our children and the future world.

Moreover, comprehending the world’s affairs contributes to the development of our ideology and moral level. Take the earthquake and tsunami happened in Indonesia for example, we can acquire the sensation of nature’s uncontrolled power upon human, as well as the collaboration and assistance among diverse countries. We learn from the information of today’s news, take considerations and improve our philosophy from the process.(这段例子感觉不是很详细，随便加点什么给灾民捐款捐物，帮他们盖房子建家园什么的吧)

Generally speaking, knowing the events happening all over the world is of vast importance. Whatever the events have affiliation with our living hood, we need to keep track with these news that may influence some parts of our life.

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发表于 2009-4-15 13:03:13 |只看该作者

今晚11点前一定拍好。。。最近太忙了

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发表于 2009-4-15 22:57:28 |只看该作者

It is a consulting problem that whether we should get a knowledge of events, which happen around the global circumstance, or just neglect them since they have no affiliations with our routine affairs. Generally speaking, I would（可以不要的） prefer the former opinion. In this essay, the reasons are introduced as below.（感觉这个模版是不是太老了，曾经问过美国人，他说In this essay, the reasons are introduced as below.不符合作文思路，是多余的。。。没必要这么强调的）
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To start with, there is nothing having absolute no connections with you(感觉这句话有点变扭), especially in the rapidly improving era. For example, a butterfly's wings in the other side of the earth might create tiny changes in the atmosphere that ultimately cause a tornado to appear near your domicile. Or the great harvest of wheat in the Russia could reduce the price of cereal in your downtown market. Those what might have nothing to do with your daily life apparently can make a significant impact on you without your awareness. As a result，we had better pay much attention to the events occurring around so that we can take action（take an action） in advance.

Additionally, things which are improbable to affect our daily life do not mean that they would have rare effect on the next generations. For instance, the news depicting the international trade and resource dispute might not attract your interest now(断一句比较好) ,but several decades passed it could be upgraded to a district conflict（感觉这句语法有问题，however,after several decades,it would be….）, or even a national war.(感觉这个例子还很抽象哟，最好说具体的事件，编的也行) Had（if） we made some efforts to prevent the dispute, things might change to a better situation for our children and the future world.(童鞋注意。。人称要一致，要么都we…要么都you…)6 g$ s& Z6 _) R6 ^9 f

Moreover, comprehending the world’s affairs contributes to the development of our ideology and moral level. Take the earthquake and tsunami happened in Indonesia for example, we can acquire the sensation of nature’s uncontrolled power upon human, as well as the collaboration and assistance among diverse（different就可以的，有时词很简单。。但真的是很常用的。。如果刻意用一些词。。老外很觉得很artificial） countries. We learn from the information of today’s news, take considerations and improve our philosophy from the process（take…..这句话语法好像有误。。难道这个能作主语）." l( l, W$ g3 L4 V+ x, L
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Generally speaking, knowing the events happening all over the world is of vast importance. Whatever（whether） the events have affiliation with our living hood, we need to keep track with these news that may influence some part of our life.(去掉。。。我感觉童鞋原来最后一句话，我读不懂的)

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