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8月2日，独立作文：
Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than help determine children's future.
正文：
Of course, parents’ instruction and advice have a huge effect on children’s direction in career, marriage and personality. As the closest people for their children, parents’ experience and knowledge about the puzzle meet by their children are the best resource of making decision. However, this fact does not mean parents should determine children’s future instead of giving them freedom to choose by themselves.

Actually, children are more likely to make better decision by themselves. Parents always tend to expect their children’s interests, career or even habits similar to their own. Their child, however, may born to be artist while his parents just neglect his talent and force him to be a doctor. Also, different people have different preference, which means some prefer better living condition and others may just want to have more achievement. That’s why an ambitious teenage will finally run away from his parents’ “ideal life”, and choose cruel and competetive life stile. Moreover, borning more than twenty or thirty years before their children, parents can not truly understand children’s online chatting community, rock music full of betray and painful, and even wild camping that seems dangerous.

Even when parents decision is wiser than their children, sometimes, it is better for children to make mistake instead of just do what their parents said. No matter how powerful or intelligent parents are, they can not help their children make decision in their whole life time. Children had to grow up to be independent even it is brutal in the family of children are already spoiled. All the parents also used to make lots of mistake to be mature at last. Also, children always rely on their parents tend to lose reputation or even be tease by their peers.

Addmitedly, children are naïve sometimes, and need to ask parents’ advice. Especially for teenagers, their impulse can destory their future by getting involved the trouble they can not handle. However, that is not give up the chance to independently make decision by themselves.

In conclusion, children should make teir own choice as they can make better decision and can grow up in deciding their own path. At the same time, when they can assimilate experience and knowledge from their parents, teachers and friends at the same time, their choice can not only lead them to right decision, but also to bright personality and future.

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9月10日独立

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money in improving internet access than public transportation.

Internet make
people's communication easier and relationship less closer. Although improving internet access can facilitate people to chat with friends, read news and watch video more easily, internet cannot replace the feeling of meeting friends face to face and travel to the place to see the beauty in own eyes. Moreover, although online working is possible now, public transportation is still important for the society function well.

First and foremost, internet elongate inter-person distance while public transportation shorten it（与introduction的观点有点相左）. As study show, internet is causing more than 1million computer addiction in China annually. With the convenient（ce） of using Skype to chat with friends and relatives, YouTube to enjoy video and website to read news, a large amount of citizens chose to stick to computer instead to make friends and exercise outside. However, internet’s chatting(chatting on the internet) make some of them feel shy and embarrassed in(when) having conversation in front of real people. Moreover, computer’s radiation harmed a lot of children’s eyes and lack of exercise decreased(用decrease不恰当) their health(用一般现在时就好，这个观点与这段主题句无关). Additionally(应该是however，转折关系), when people wants to meet their friends and do exercise closer to a nature（al） environment, public transportation is needed. So, switching the money from improving internet to improve（ing对仗） public transportation is to encourage（ing对仗） people to go outside to enjoy the fun of making friends and exercising.
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Secondly, public transportation is more important in residence(是t)s’ life and companies'business. Think about what is happening in New York subway at the end of business hour（after work） every day. Those crowding employees and rushing officers just want to catch the train on time. If they missed the train, they need to wait another half hour after their tired several hours'work. If the government can invest more money to add more train, they do not need to be so nervous about if they can catch the train. Moreover, consider about this condition, if you are a boss, how would you feel if you cannot deliver your commodity on time and need to pay more money for the delay. Even though citizens can order goods and do business online, those goods are still needed to by deliver(be delivered) with transportation in real world. So, better public transportation can make society function more efficiently.0 ], l6 ]' x/ Q" m4 f4 a1 D

Admittedly, internet is also important as a crucial way to commute(transfer) information. Nevertheless, information cannot compare(be compared with) to real people and real goods(他们本来就不能比较，应该是网上交流跟见面比较). Therefore, improving public transportation is more crucial(前面用过，换成significant) than improving internet（+access）.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money in improving internet access than public transportation.

Internet make
peoples communication easier and relationship less closer. Although improving internet access can facilitate people to chat with friends, read news and watch video more easily, internet cannot replace the feeling of meeting friends face to face and travel to the place to see the beauty in own eyes. Moreover, although online working is possible now, public transportation is still important for the society function well.

First and foremost, internet elongate inter-person distance while public transportation shorten it. As study show, internet is causing more than 1million computer addiction in China annually. With the convenient of using Skype to chat with friends and relatives, YouTube to enjoy video and website to read news, a large amount of citizens chose to stick to computer instead to make friends and exercise outside. However, internet’s chatting make some of them feel shy and embarrass in having conversation in front of real people. Moreover, computer’s radiation harmed a lot of children’s eyes and lack of exercise decreased their health. Additionally, when people wants to meet their friends and do exercise closer to a nature environment, public transportation is needed. So, switching the money from improving internet to improve public transportation is to encourage people to go outside to enjoy the fun of making friends and exercising.

Secondly, public transportation is more important in residences’ life and companies business. Think about what is happening in New York subway at the end of business hour every day. Those crowding employees and rushing officers just want to catch the train on time. If they missed the train, they need to wait another half hour after their tired several hours work. If the government can invest more money to add more train, they do not need to be so nervous about if they can catch the train. Moreover, consider about this condition, if you are a boss, how would you feel if you cannot deliver your commodity on time and need to pay more money for the delay. Even though citizens can order goods and do business online, those goods are still needed to by deliver with transportation in real world. So, better public transportation can make society function more efficiently.

Admittedly, internet is also important as a crucial way to commute information. Nevertheless, information cannot compare to real people and real goods. Therefore, improving public transportation is more crucial than improving internet.

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8月25日，独立

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8.24独立

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8月23独立

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哥们为什么你23号的文章实质内容是24号的，小弟我这怎么改啊。。。

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8月23，综合独立

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8.19

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帮你改了，还是不错

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8.19
Extraordinary means lonely. Genius’ different before they succeed is why people would think them special. As successful person would think and live different, in order to succeed, people should keep their own specialty instead of imitate others to be normal.

First of all, succeed require its hunters to think forward and act first. Successful people would found out the potential risk and opportunity before those happened to avoid or grasp those. For supporting example, there is no better than Mayun’s legendary.  As just a high English teacher in high school, he found the prosperous future of internet business when internet is not widespread in China. Although all his relatives and friends against him to quite his stable position for chasing his “no future dream” called Alibaba, he insisted his choice and started his online business empire. Even when most of his employees quitted and no one want to borrow him money, he finally get through those troubles and become one of the most successful businessman in China. As one of his fans, I learned a lesson that chasing dream means hunt for object and opportunity use your own eyes even you are the only one can see it.

Secondly, we should follow the right principle instead of just do what everyone does. Most of the time, the reason why only small part of people can win at last is only they do the right thing. In my experience, As I choose to study when most of my peers waste their time on playing computer game and watching television, I got the highest score; as I followed professors’ lecture carefully when others miss the class or did not pay much attention, I can study more efficiently after class; as I tried my best to find internship in the summer when others just use that time to travel or date with their girlfriends, I got the best job in my class. Do the right thing when all others are confused is how people run faster in their career. Choose the right living style now is to choose successful life in the future.

Admittedly, some people may doubt my point as they think be different means less friends. As we all know, find common topic is a good way to make friends and networking is crucial for succeed. Although this argument seems reasonable, we can find its flaws after examine the characteristic of real friends. Real friend is the person reliable and trustworthy instead of just someone to play with, acting like others can just bring normal friends instead of real friends. So act like others cannot benefit in finding useful friend.

All in all, be different is the right way to chase for succeed. Even though it may be tough at first, in order to succeed, it is worth to do it.