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Nowadays, more and more people hold the point that old buildings should give the place to the modern ones when the ground is needed. However, I still insist that we should do all our best to preserve the old architecture for several reasons following.
To begin with, the history architectures have played crucial roles in both providing material for researching and historic textbook for learning. (看下面能否focus在这两个点上面) For one thing, many old buildings have witnessed the big history event that happened centuries ago. Take Bastille for example. Whenever we talk about it, the exiting French Revolution will strike our memory. It is one of the aspects of value that old buildings show. For another, from the old buildings, we may better know one city's culture and history, which is unique and valuable. Just as the Mayor of the New York city says (and I paraphrase) "Beijing would be another 'NY' 100 years later, however, NY will never be a 'Beijing' " A building of one city can greatly help to characterize itself. In one word, historic building provides the idea and spirit in the past, from which we may absorb extensive knowledge about the city. (问题1,没有具体指出value在何.知道了解那些历史的好处在什么地方呢?问题2,也是更严重的问题,这些好处我们确实无法否认,但是本题需要我们讨论的是在古代建筑vs现代建筑,没有在考虑现代的urgent的需求压迫来讨论历史建筑的价值,这些论证对于题目的response是有点偏)
In addition, old building could also be a city's emblem, and it can bring a lot of money by appealing tremendous amount of tourists. (如果联系到了现代建筑带来的好处对比一下效果会更好) Let us see the example of Great Wall. (毫无说服力的例子.长城要和什么建筑抢地盘了么?) There is a famous saying in China ,"You can never be a hero unless you climb on the Great Wall." Because of this, the Great Wall attracts millions of travelers not only from China, but also from each part of the globe. As a result the tour in Great Wall brings the government large amount of money. Also pyramids (同上) in Egypt help the government in revenue so much that the income provided by the travel for pyramid accounts for one fifth of the total revenue of the local government. Since so much profit that the old architecture could make, no simple excuse could we have to destroyed the buildings.
Admittedly, we might be in dilemma when old building take up the place where modern ones could be built and make more benefits. The best solution is to keep balance between preservation and development. (唐突的无论证的balance...前面根本连morden都没提到) On the one hand, some old buildings of little value should be tore down. Otherwise it will only be a waste of both land and money to preserve them. On the other hand, some valuable old building could be removed to other place, and be rebuilt. Or we may take other method, for example to incorporate modern function and style into the modern old buildings just as what Rome has done. That is an idea which could result in both well preserving the old one and making it better serve us. All in all, both past and future are our wealth, and neither of them should we cast away without well considering. (只有这段才算是真正回应了题目.而且还和上面段落的论证基本联系不起来,提到了很多很多的小论点,乱)
To sum up, historic architectures are legacies that our progenitors left us. They are so priceless that once they are destroyed no method could we have to recover them as what they used to be. In one word, we human need develop, however, we should think it more about what we could get and what we might lose when the old building and new ones come into conflict.
4分很危险
这种类型的题目切忌忘了讨论某种事物的价值的时候是有着很重要的前提的,对于这个题目而言就是现代建筑的需求.
这个忽略导致你前两个body在我看来基本等于没说 |
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