【Daily Writing作文特训小组】陶太郎的作业帖

陶太郎UID：3066263

一个人自顾自地写作文总归不知道自己差在哪里，还很容易出现消极怠工的情况，希望能和大家一起互相激励，共同进步。

以后在写作中的心得体会也一并记在这里吧。

2月8日
yxy319(三叶草)修改：
用survival替换build their home
survival: the state of continuing to live or exist, often despite difficulty or danger
生存，存货，幸存
It is a fact that ...
however直接连接两个句子
We began to play tennis. However, it started to rain, so we went home.
表示“与……保持联系”：keep in touch with / get in touch with;
xiesisiminerval(小狮子)修改：
moving also brings more chances for life 与 People move for various reasons可以作为两个分论点分别深入展开。

2月9日
idealibt(想乖)修改：
content：adj. 满意的，满足的，甘愿的，一般作表语，比如appear/be/seem/feel conten with。
contented：adj. 满意的，满足的，可以修饰名词，表示很满意的工作可以用a contented job来表示。
satisfactory：adj. 令人满意的，可喜的，恰当的，够好的，一份满意的工作可以说a satisfactory job。
satisfied：adj. 感到满意的，满足的，一般作表语形容词，且强调主观感受。
表示“越来越多的”：an increasing number of，替换more and more。
seem：vi. 看来好像，似乎，论点里面用seem会显得犹豫不决，不够坚定。
orient: v. 以……为目的（或目标），career-oriented preparation。

2月11日
idealibt(想乖)修改：
进行更加深入的学习，接受更加高等的教育：further their education
sodapent修改：
科研成果，科学成就：scientific achievement
表示让步：admittedly, undoubtedly

2月13日
idealibt(想乖)修改：capable的用法：
having the ability or qualities necessary for doing something
有能力，有才能
I'm perfectly capable of doing it myself, thank you.

2月22日
小裙裙（群）修改：
metropolis: a large important city (often the capital city of a country or region)
大都会；大城市；首府；首都
gtldds(瓜田)修改：
to raise/heighten/increase public awarness of something
disable/disability/disabled辨析：
disable: to injure or affect somebody permanently so that, for example, they cannot walk or cannot use a part of their body
使丧失能力；使伤残
disability: a physical or mental condition that means you cannot use a part of your body completely or easily, or that you cannot learn easily
（某种）缺陷，障碍
disabled: unable to use a part of your body completely or easily because of  a physical condition, illness, injury, etc.; unable to learn easily
丧失能力的；有残疾的；无能力的
the disabled: people who are disabled
残疾人；伤残者

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月8日
101031NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing for people to move to a new town or a new country because they will lose their friends.

Moving to a new place is a common event to human beings. Our ancestors moved from place to place depending on the natural environment and they had to adapt to the nature in order to build their home. Nowadays, most people don’t have to move for the reason of the nature, but they move for better jobs, higher salary, more opportunities, etc. With the achievement moving brings, people have to accept disadvantages at the same time like losing their friends. When consider this dilemma, in my opinion, although people may lose their friends by moving to a new town or a new country, if they know exactly what they really want, moving is not a bad thing.


It is the fact that moving to a new town or a new country may cause some negative effects, among which losing friends seems to be the biggest challenge. Although moving to a new place does not mean that people will farewell the former environment completely, at least it is not as convenient as before to keep contact with their friends. People can never maintain the friendship by playing sports, shopping during the discount season or chat face to face with their friends. Things seem to be worse for those whose friendship is a critical part of their jobs. Take a businessman as an example, moving to another city may influences the connection between he and his cooperators and maybe he has to suffer a lot from a moving.


On the contrary, moving also brings more chances for life at the same time. People move for various reasons, however, they all have the same purpose that some of their wants need to be satisfied. In many countries all around the word, children leave their homes and move to another city for better education and students may even come to other countries just for the same reason. What they have to leave is not only their friends, but also their families. What is more, because of the highly developing transportation technology, it is more convenient for people to move from where they live to other places. Choosing freely where they want to live depends on what they want to achieve. If people want to earn money, they can choose big cities. If people want to enjoy a quiet and relaxed time, they can choose the seaside towns or countryside.


On the other hand, many people do not have to worry about losing their former friends since the advanced scientific technologies help people get in touched with others wherever and whenever they want. With updating technologies based on either computers or mobile phones, scientists offer people more and more opportunities to keep touch in with other people, which beyond their imagination. Despite the fact that people live far away from each other, they can hear other’s voices and even talk with each other face to face, which makes them forget the distance between them. It is said that the future technology may even transport the smell and taste. Thus people do not have to think that losing friends will be the barrier for them to move.


Based on the above reasons, although losing friends may be a big challenge for people when they consider moving to a new town or a new country, there are chances and benefits at the same time. In order to pursue the aim of their life, people have to give up some things. After all, the developing technologies help a lot for people to keep their friendship. In a word, I don’t agree that moving to a new place is a bad thing.

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月9日
100924NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? College or University should offer students more preparation before they start working.

After years of studying, most students hope to find content jobs which both offer high salaries and make them feel comfortable. However, the society is not like the campus which is relatively simple. There are more and more students find that it is hard for them to adjust to the employment market soon after the graduation. It seems essential for college or university to offer students more preparation before they start working.


First of all, it is the responsibility that colleges or universities offer students, especially seniors, appropriate preparation. As an institution for education, colleges and universities share the burden to bring as much as knowledge to students related and beyond to their majors. At the same time, colleges and universities also need to teach students how to apply what they have learned to their life including the professional career and daily life. In other words, helping students with their careers by setting related courses and founding some organizations is also a part of the education.


What is more, it is beneficial for colleges and universities to help their students to achieve better jobs because the school may build its fame and appeal to more talented students. There is no doubt that every college and university concerns about its employment rate. The more students get their satisfied jobs, the higher rate of the employment is. The better evaluation alumni get, the greater the school will be in the society. As a result, there will be more students apply to the school in order to get better jobs. On the other hand, the condition of the alumni will also affect the building of the school. If the alumni are rich, they may contribute much money to help the college or university with its equipment. Consequently, offering students more preparation will motivate the development of the college or the university.


However, while offering students more preparation for their careers, college or university should also leave some time for students to consider their own problems. After all, the career of every student is based on their current condition and neither teachers nor parents can replace the thinking of the student himself. The college or the university can just offer some complementary suggestion or guidance, they cannot force the student. Besides, thinking about one’s career is an unavoidable experience because none of our careers can be totally same. Only by asking what he really wants, can a person step out to pursue his success. That is why the preparation from the college and university is critical but not the only.


All in all, offering students more preparation before they start working is beneficial to both the school and the student. However, the college and the university should never take place of the process of the critical thinking of students. Only by the hard working from both students and schools, can they reach their goals.

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3# yxy319

非常感谢三叶草！
帮我找到了好多自己注意不到的错误，有些如果没有指出来我可能就会一直错下去。
还有段落顺序的调整建议也特别好，调整以后感觉更符合逻辑，也更有说服力了！

陶太郎UID：3066263

4# xiesisiminerva

非常感谢小狮子！
并不是你过于死板，而是我的确存在逻辑不够清楚的问题，而且很多时候会写得很罗嗦却没有写到重点上，所以说你还是一针见血地点出了我的严重问题。
对于第三段，我本身是想表达搬家可以带来更多机会，不过写出来好像主要是在说搬家是为了满足人们的各种要求，另外也是例证不够充分。你的作文运用例子就用得很好！
不要说请教啦，大家互相帮助，共同进步嘛。

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月11日
110115NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of the university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

An increasing number of students go to college or university to accept higher education after high school. They should be aware of that the method of both learning and teaching at college is completely different from that of high schools. One of the most obvious distinctions is the main role of the university professor which has been a controversial issue. I don’t agree with the statement that the main role of the university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

First of all, one of the most essential capacities students in colleges should have is to learn by themselves. While students in middle schools or high schools have to learn the knowledge that usually has been arranged by the teacher, students in colleges mostly discover what they need by themselves for their own majors. They spend more time in the school library instead of the classroom. Thus, what is the most important thing for a college student is to build his own system of learning and then put it into practice, but not take everything from the professor. In other words, the education from professors is not the first thing students need.

Besides, researching is the best complementary of education for both the professor and the student. Students in the university can learn the theory and the principle all by themselves, but sometimes they cannot get the latest research information and results by reading books. However, if the professor is just working with his researches or has just completed one, he may share his experience with his students. It is the research that both keeps the professor with the latest trend and teaches students what they cannot get from books, so that the professor cannot improve his knowledge without researching.

However, educating students is also the responsibility of a professor. Compared to those researchers, what makes a professor distinguished is his role as a teacher in the university. He has his responsibility. It is said that some professors often spare a little time on their students. For a professor, he needs to balance his time appropriately for arranging the class, revising the assignments, answering the question, etc. After all, he has to fulfill his social obligation because he has chosen to be a college teacher.

Above all, when discussing the main role of the university professor, I tend to emphasize the importance of doing researches rather than to educate students based upon those reasons. And it is possible for a professor is to combine both his roles properly.

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月13日
110815NA
One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help. Include reasons and details to in your response.

Most of the people will not hesitate to give a hand if there is somebody asking for help. However, sometimes finding the best solution is more meaningful than showing the warmness. When one of my classmates needs help with some schoolwork, I prefer to ask him to find a professional tutor rather than helping him by myself.

A professional tutor is always there waiting for students to ask questions and offering their help without any reservation. Usually professional tutors have been trained for a long time and they know how to help students in the best way. When the student is in trouble, he may feel frustrated and depressed. The tutor will firstly help the student with his mental disorders and the student is encouraged to believe in himself again. A great tutor understands that the attitude of students when they face a problem is more important than the problem itself.

Professional tutors are also full of experience in their own realm and they can offer the best solution according to students’ questions. Having been educated at college for years, tutors are fully acknowledged in their fields and the level of their knowledge is far beyond the student’s. The solution offered by the tutor must be practical and easy to understand. What’s more, some good tutors would like to guide the student to think by themselves. They do not just tell the student the answer and explain; they are patient enough to inspire the student and develop their intelligence gradually.

Admittedly, helping my classmate myself also share its advantages. When asking me for help, the student will not feel nervous or anxious to be blamed. And the atmosphere of solving the problem will be easier and more relaxed just like in a discussion. From the process of solving the problem, both of us can review the knowledge that have been mentioned in the class and develop our capacity to think independently. At the same time, with helping each other, we can build our relationship as well.

Based upon the above reasons, compared to asking me for help, finding a professional tutor is a better choice, which will do a great help to the student.

陶太郎UID：3066263

16# caisdhappy

哪里哪里，我的问题还多着呢，大家互相帮助。

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月15日
100213NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who cannot accept criticism will not succeed in a team.

Teamwork has been considered necessary and crucial in nowadays society. Whether or not a person has the spirit of teamwork is also a measurement added to the evaluation system. However, surviving, even succeeding in a team is not supposed to be an easy deal. From one aspect, people who cannot accept criticism are not likely to succeed.

Firstly, accepting criticism from others is a method for people to improve themselves. In a team, there are people with various opinions and perspectives. Sometimes, it is difficult to tell the right and the wrong, but every individual can find out the aspect that he ignores of his ideas while other people focus on. After all, there will be shortages and disadvantages of everyone’s thoughts more or less. Thus, when other people make criticisms, it is a significant opportunity for people to find out what they need in order to be more perfect. Those who can accept the criticism properly and correct the mistakes they made just stepped out on the road heads to success.

In addition, although it is hard for people to accept criticism from others at the beginning, one cannot deny that trying to accept criticism in an appropriate way contributes to building the relationship and making the whole team full of harmony. When there is a debate or even a quarrel in a team, the person that compromises firstly needn’t be the loser. The wiser person understands that communication is the best way and his appreciation of the criticism just is another gentle way to show his respect. Accepting the criticism, claiming his shortages and then persuading other people by communicating reasonably is the most beneficial choice for a future team leader.

Admittedly, there are some other ways for a person to be successful in a team. Learning to accept criticism from other people is not the only element of a person’s success. Broad horizons, wide knowledge, the sense of cooperation, the bravery of insisting on his believes etc. also benefits to a future success. Accepting criticism is just one of the aspects.

As far as I am concerned, accepting criticism is a necessary lesson for every body. After all, admitting one’s mistakes and problems is one of the hardest things in the world. At the same time, accepting criticism is not the only way to success, but a critical one.

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月22日
101030NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.

It is a fact that the number of people who enroll at the school is increasing continually year by year. Students are not satisfied with graduating from senior schools any more. They hope to further their education so they go to universities and colleges, some of whom even get master’s or doctor’s degrees. With the development of the whole world, there is no doubt that it is easier now for people to become educated than in the past.

Trace back through the history, education has not been as important and essential as it is now. In the past, when it was the agricultural era, what people cared most was whether their wheat and corn would harvest or not, especially for farmers. Education was not paid enough attention to since it seemed not related to the fortune directly. As a consequence, people in the past did not build the awareness of the importance of education. What’s more, because of the high cost of attending schools, it was not common for all children to get education especially those whose family was poor.

Things have changed significantly. With the rise or the awareness, people have realized that education plays an important role in the development of a society. Governments are eager to allocate large amount of money to school buildings. Schools in metropolitans become highly progressed and there are an increasing number of schools in rural areas. As the most direct financial aid to the development of education, governments play a role that cannot be replaced. At the same time, most parents are favorable to send their children to schools to be educated. People believe that only by further their education, can graduates get better jobs and higher salary, which makes a considerable influence on the whole society.

In addition, the highly development of scientific technology has made education qualified and convenient. Firstly, schools are now equipped with latest scientific achievements. Students have the great opportunity to benefit from technologies firstly. Automatic methods are adapting to laboratories and libraries, and there are both scientific and healthy trains for sports. Thanks to the internet, those who cannot go to school like normal people such as disables can get educated at home just using a computer. He can search on the internet for everything he wants to know, or listen to the open courses offered by top universities all over the world, which are all unimaginable in the past time.

Except for the facts and examples mentioned above, there are still much more advantages that make education easier compared to the past. It is reasonable to consider that education will not become a problem to all the people sooner or later.

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2月22日 综合写作 TPO-13

The lecture and the reading passage talk about the topic of commercial fossil businesses. However, the speaker in the lecture claims the disapproval to the reading passage and she thinks that what considered in the reading passage are exaggerated.

First of all, the lecture denies the idea that selling and buying fossils for private benefits will decrease the chance for public to see those rare fossils and make them lose interests consequently. As the speaker in the lecture claims, universities and museums can buy fossils that they want to display. It is not unfortunate as the reading passage says; on the contrary, it is the commercial fossil business that makes universities and museums share the chance to buy those rare fossils. As a result, the public also has the access to see those heritages.

What is more, the speaker in the lecture does not believe that scientists will lose access to crucial discoveries. In fact, scientists will always be the only people to check those fossils because of their professional knowledge. Private collectors bring the fossil to the scientist to identify if it is true, by which the scientist can make researches and create new discoveries.

Besides, the speaker also holds the distinguished opinion against the reading passage about the damage private collectors will make to fossils. As the speaker concerned, it is more terrible to leave those fossils undiscovered compared to the damage. In fact, some work during the discovery of the fossil can be conducted under the cooperation with universities, and the risk will decline.

Based upon the above evidence, the speaker in the lecture thinks that the reading passage overweighs the negative consequences of commercial fossil businesses.

陶太郎UID：3066263

2月9日
100924NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? College or University should offer students more preparation before they start working.

（修改版）

After years of studying, most students hope to find satisfactory jobs which not only offer high salaries but also let them practice what they have learned at school. However, there is an increasing number of students find that it is hard to adapt themselves to the employment market soon after the graduation. Thus, it is essential for colleges or universities to offer students more preparation before they start working.

First of all, it is the responsibility of colleges or universities to offer students, especially seniors, appropriate career-oriented preparation. As an institution for education, colleges and universities share the burden to bring as much as knowledge to students related and beyond to their majors. At the same time, colleges and universities also need to teach students how to apply what they have learned to their life, the professional career significantly. In other words, helping students with their careers by setting related courses and founding some organizations is also a part of the education.

What is more, it is beneficial for colleges and universities to help their students to achieve better jobs through offering preparation, since the school may build its fame and appeal to more talented students. There is no doubt that every college and university concerns about its employment rates. The more students get their contented jobs, the higher rate of the employment is. The better evaluation alumni get, the greater the school will be in the society. As a result, there will be more students apply to the school in order to get better jobs. On the other hand, the condition of the alumni’s donation will also affect the development of the school. If the alumni are rich, they may contribute much more money to help the college or university with its facilities. Consequently, offering students more preparation will motivate the development of the college or the university.

However, while offering students more preparation for their careers, college or university should also leave some time for students to consider their own problems. After all, the career of every student is based on their current condition and neither teachers nor parents can decide the future career of students instead of them. The college or the university just needs to offer some complementary suggestion or guidance to students’ careers. Besides, thinking about one’s career is an unavoidable experience. Only by asking what he really wants, can a person step out to pursue his success. Therefore the preparation offered by the college and university is critical but not the only.

All in all, offering students more preparation before they start working is beneficial to both the school and the student. After all, appropriate guidance and plans could be the supplementary for students to consider their future career.

陶太郎UID：3066263

TPO-18

The reading passage talks about an endangered species of tree called Torreya which was once very common in the state of Florida. There has not been any exact explanation to the cause of the decline, but experts claim that there are three ways to save Torreya. However, the speaker in the lecture confirms that none of the three ways to preserve Torreya is satisfactory.

First of all, the method to reestablish the species in the same location is unlikely to be successful. Although the specific microclimate in the northern part of Florida is pretty favorable to Torreya’s growth as it is said in the reading passage, the speaker in the lecture considers that it is the microclimate that has become a problem. Because of many factors that will affect the climate including global warming, the habitat in the place where Torreya used to live has changed a lot. And some of the regions even become drier. Even though the reading passage says that scientists have been working to plant Torreya seeds in the coolest and dampest areas of the microclimate, the speaker in the lecture thinks that anywhere in the original area of Torreya will help to save the endangered species.

Second, moving Torreya into an entirely different location will not work as well. The speaker in the lecture uses another tree as an example. The tree was moved by people to a completely different place and grew increasingly fast at the beginning. However, after a period of time, the species spread so quickly that it killed many other species around it and made other plants endangered. The way to relocate Torreya in forests further north seems to be a effective technique to help Torreya in the reading passage, while the speaker in the lecture talks more about the disadvantages and shortcomings of the migration.

What is more, preserving Torreya in research centers is not a good choice because of the population which contributes to the growth of a species. Moving seeds and samplings of Torreya from wild to the closely monitored environment as the reading passage mentions will not ensure the continued survival of Torreya. The population of a kind of plant should be genetically diverse in order to build the whole group of the plant, but the research center simply does not have enough capacity. As a result, Torreya may survive at the beginning, but it will not survive in the long term.

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3月6日
101009NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People can take care of their family members better when they live in big cities than in the countryside.

It is always said that the process of urbanization determines the development of a certain area. An increasing number of people are eager to settle their home in the downtown and those who are born and grow in the countryside spend all their effort to move to big cities. The fact is that people believe that they can live a better life and take care of their family members better when they live in big cities than in the countryside. There must be some explanations toward this phenomenon.

First and the most important, the public facility in big cities are mature and highly developed compared to that in the countryside. What come to be very important elements in people’s daily life must be children’s education, elders’ healthy insurance and the opportunity to get better jobs. From kindergarten to university, the education in big cities is absolutely insured. Schools have more financial aid and share the trendiest scientific achievements. For old people, they are promised by the government to enjoy the best equipped hospitals and activity centers. Adults do not need to be so worried about their parents’ healthy problems and they can work to realize their career since they are offered more chances. Famous companies prefer to set their offices in big cities rather than in the countryside. In a word, big cities are well prepared for people no matter how old they are.

In addition, the transportation system in big cites is convenient and carefully designed which keeps the whole city work well. People in big cities have various choices to the traffic. There are subways, buses, taxies, bicycles, etc. In fact, what kind of traffic tools people choose depends on what they need. If people have to commute everyday from the suburb to the city centre, they may prefer the subway since it is faster and more convenient. For those who want to have a personal space, they may choose taxies although they are more expensive relatively. And if people consider more about an environmental-friendly way, there is bicycle renting. The advantage of living in big cities is that people have more choices to satisfy their needs and take a good care of their families.

Just take a look at the condition in the countryside. Things seem to be not such easier. Although the population living in the countryside is not such much compared with the big city and the environment is better, neither the public facility nor transportation is highly developed. If people have some emergencies like a heart attack, it will take a long time for the ambulance to get people’s home. The hospital maybe not equipped enough to make an urgent heal towards the patients. Young people would not like to work in the countryside because there are not so many jobs, maybe just some farm work, not to mention those that can bring high salaries to them. Without a good condition, how can people take full care of their families?

All in all, no matter the public facility, the public transportation, or job chances are not well prepared for people living in the countryside. People in big cities can get better service and enjoy a highly developed life style, by which can people take of their family members better.