【口语小组】cherylljyan的作业贴（11.2）

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所有作业均会在当天上传，百度网盘里的内容按日期命名，可能会出现未按时间先后顺序排列的情况，请批改的小伙伴往下面找一下，谢谢～

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说下自己的一点小期许哈~希望互评的同学多指出我的不足以及改进的办法，少说点夸楼主的话哈，多批评多批评~~


8.24题目
Task 1 Nowadays robots are widely used in the society. What are the benefits and risks of this?
Task 2 Should employees be required to wear suits in the workplace, or should they wear casual clothes?
谢谢啦~

8.23题目
Task 1 A high school plans to add an extracurricular activity for students. What kind of activity would you recommend?
Task 2 Can part-time jobs help people prepare for their future career? Please give your opinion with specific reasons and details.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1i3zKj8D
谢谢啦~

8 22
Task 1 What advice would you give to a friend who just got a job. Explain what the suggestion is and its importance. Please include specific details.
Task 2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: children should have their own cellphones. Give specific reasons and details to support your response.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1sjlqHIl

8.21题目
Task 1 If you are a volunteer in a hospital, what kind of work would you choose? 1. take care of patient's family 2. talk to patients 3. read to patient Please give specific reasons and details.
Task 2 Do you like jobs with opportunities to interact with people, or do you prefer to work without contact with real people? Please explain your preference with specific details.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1i39nANr
谢谢啦~

8.20题目
Task 1 Do you like to take outdoor activities in summer or in winter? Please give specific reasons and details in your response.
Task 2 The school has required students to read the same book and during vacations give a report on it. Do you think it's a good idea or not? What are the advantages and disadvantages?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1i3xcnWh
谢谢啦~

8.19题目
Task 1 What time of a year do you like most? Please give specific reasons and details in your response.
Task 2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Having a relaxed or unhurried lifestyle is the most important for a person.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1nt1DNs9
谢谢啦~

8.18题目
Task 1 What are the benefits of chatting with older family members? Give specific details in your answer.
Task 2 When things at home such as furniture are broken, do you prefer to have them repaired in a shop or fix them by yourself?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1eQ49Q5G
谢谢啦~

8.17题目
Task 1 Describe a day that you enjoyed the most or was the most special for you. Give specific reasons and details to support your response.
Task 2 Some people prefer to have classes during the day and do part-time jobs in the evening, while others prefer to have classes in the evening and do part-time jobs during the day. Which would you prefer and why?
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1dDirp2T
谢谢啦~

8.16题目
Task 1 One of your friends wants to increase his income. What suggestions suggestions can you give to him? Please give specific details.
Task 2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Instead of always being busy, people should have a relaxed lifestyle.
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1ntyVTiT
谢谢啦~

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dafen5434 发表于 2014-8-17 11:59
8.16
task1：
前面开场白占用了8秒，有点长了，可以精简一下，直入主题，毕竟45S很短，尽量不要浪费在没意 ...

没有啦，谢谢~你的意见很中肯，我确实内容上不太行，每次都是想到什么就说什么没怎么细琢磨过~很感谢你的建议，我会努力滴~~

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yl499235070 发表于 2014-8-18 00:37
楼主语音语调太赞了。
T1
24s express过去式expressed

谢谢你的意见，你的语音也很好哇~
我平时说话是没什么逻辑~⊙﹏⊙b汗~我会多努力的~

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workhard/ 发表于 2014-8-19 20:21
8.18
T1
I think it's happy to chat with older members of the family.(4s) I personally love chattin ...

嘿嘿，没有那么厉害，其实我录了两三遍吧，还有很大差距。。
改得好认真啊。。其实我是说得didn‘t，可能不太清楚吧，谢谢帮我指出~

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workhard/ 发表于 2014-8-19 20:21
8.18
T1
I think it's happy to chat with older members of the family.(4s) I personally love chattin ...

弱弱问下什么是“ben的口语建议“哇？谢谢~

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无名大侠 发表于 2014-8-20 12:16
8.19
T1感觉没什么需要指出的……

我觉得现在是练习，毕竟不是真的考试，没必要一开始练就卡时间，像咱们又不是口语大牛，思路都还没整理好怎么能说的顺畅呢，我觉得练习的时候多花点时间积累没关系。
当然这只是我的拙见~

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看话剧是什么意思？

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克里奥的守门人 发表于 2014-8-22 17:02
0820，T1:语调让我觉得我在看话剧。。。没问题
T2：很好啊。

看话剧是什么意思？

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CharlesZhuoChen 发表于 2014-08-27 11:00
8.24互评
首先跟楼主说声抱歉，由于昨天家里断网了，评的有些迟
下面进入正题：
楼主发音挺好的，语速稍快，给我的整体感觉是挺流利的。可能语调稍微再注意一下：我的托福老师说，老外习惯在一句话没说完但有停顿的时候语调上扬，语调下降则表示该句已讲完。如T1 27秒时楼主举例说明on mars and on moon to do some work这里，moon那里楼主有停顿，所以语调上扬可能会更好的让老外理解你这句话还没说完后面还要说to do some work。
然后T1 18s environments    T2 24s company 的发音
其实楼主很棒啦，楼主的结构比我自然很多（没有模版会死星人在此。。），给人感觉真的就是在滔滔不绝流畅自然的叙述，感觉很不错～ 一起加油啦！

太感谢了，非常有用的建议，谢谢亲这么用心的评论。现在用手机上寄托，回去用电脑给小伙伴加声望哈～
再次感谢～

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乐百氏开开心心 发表于 2014-8-30 10:53
lz我看你在小组里说822还没评呢，乐百氏我呢，多事呢，嘻嘻，就悄悄过来听了一下，虽然好像不是我的，但是看 ...

哈哈谢谢你乐百氏同学～谢谢你提的建议，t2 36秒是想说if we的，但不小心吞音了，所以后面又重新说了一遍，可能听起来刚好比较像中文里的 因为～～囧。
因为平时语速比较快，刚开始练的时候就保持了平时正常语速，遇到熟悉的题时间就不够说，所以后面说得更快了，有时就造成了听不清楚的情况。我最近也在改进这方面的问题，削剪一些无关紧要的话来保证内容。
8 22催评是几天前的事情了，谢谢乐百氏这么仔细看到还来帮我评，十分感谢～

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CharlesZhuoChen 发表于 2014-08-31 11:04
T2（继续鸡蛋里面挑骨头～楼主不要打我。。）
Well, I agree with the statement that the(复数前无冠词？) students should always study in a quieting(quiet) enviornment. Becuase if you study in a noisy environment, your mind is easily get（谓词重复，二留一） distracted. You may find it(没听清，猜的) hard to fully focus your attention or concentrate your mind to sth you are studying or looking at. So in that way, your working efficiency can be greatly decreased. On the contrary(发音), if you choosed a quieting environment(这个是固定用法吗？有看到楼主两次都说quieting environment) , your mind is easily concentrated and you can fully devote yourself on(to devote...to...) sth you are studying and fully absorb the knowledge you are looking at. So in that way you can remember things(发音) more precisely and clearly.

嗯，语音语调依然很棒我就不多说了，有几个小问题，个人见解，说的不对楼主别打我。。。：
1. quieting environment 是固定用法吗？我在网上查quieting是“镇静”的意思，然后quiet是adj 安静的
2. 楼主的内容稍微有点空泛了，论点很有力，不过感觉如果再有specific的eg来支撑可能会更好一点，比如noisy的环境怎么distract学生学习了，然后quiet的环境为什么可以更好的concentrate。当然45s时间很短，我个人现在努力追求的是尽量在45s内把第一个论点论述，然后给详细例子，然后抛出第二个论点。不过这些是个人习惯了哈～楼主已经很棒了～

首先谢谢小伙伴这么细致的点评哈～
关于提出的几个问题
1我说的是quiet envirinment，我自己也把昨天的音频扒出来重新听了几遍，觉得可能是我把这两个词的音连发，小伙伴把后面单词的in这个音跟前面单词连在一起啦，以后我会注意把单词发清楚滴～
2论点这次其实就一个，因为我实在想不出除了能集中精神提高效率之外还有什么其他的了，所以第二个论点就是从反面说了一遍，谢谢伙伴指出，逻辑方面我会积累的～
3论据的结构我也支持小伙伴的看法，不过我就是一举例子容易跑偏。。。
总之谢谢小伙伴，每次都这么认真帮我批改。昨天晚上我查了下分组没有粗来，今天刚好有点事情，小伙伴的作业我稍微晚些帮你改哈，不好意思啦～

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101TT 发表于 2014-9-2 10:45
不好意思，第一次参加，作业交晚了，麻烦重批哈~http://pan.baidu.com/disk/home#path=%252F%25E6%2588%259 ...

同学你得分享你的作业，这样不行，需要密码，我进不去你的网盘

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101TT 发表于 2014-09-02 19:22
不好意思，以前没用过，我再弄一下，会尽快发上来哈~

好哒～不过同学能不能麻烦你先把我的互评给做了呢？3q

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Hitchock7 发表于 2014-09-05 10:47
0904 哈哈我是互评的小伙伴
楼主的发音很好呀，好羡慕。词汇用的也很丰富。但是还是有一些小小小小的问题。
Task1第26s的时候应该是classes,28s的时候你说的是evry single student gonna get enough attention,所以get应该是gets.
Task2楼主用了一次effective一次effectively,不知道楼主是想表达有效率的话不是应该用efficient的么？？哈哈也不知道我说的对不对。。。。。。。

小伙伴你好，谢谢你帮我改的这么认真，我也看到了自己的问题。但是有些地方我跟小伙伴有不同的见解，task 1  gonna 是口语中be going to 的缩写，后面该接动词原型的，另外effective是有效的意思，第一个eff我的意思是如果可以有效安排自己时间的话同时做许多件事也是可以的。第二个的确是该用efficient～～