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polymathUID: 179557

ISSUE137这个题目有点难,欢迎大家拍砖!并提出宝贵意见!
先谢谢了!:):)

137"What we call progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another." 我们所谓的进步不过是新问题代替老问题吧了.
I fundamentally agree with the speaker’s broad assertion that progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another to some extent.,because we are facing boundless problems which seem never  go to the end, when a latent progress from current problem has solved, a new situation and fresh problem may emerge at once. However, there is no need to be pessimistic about progress. People should work hard in order to put our society forward and face new problems bravely.

To begin with, nothing is perfect and flawless in our world including the progress. As the progress solving the old problems and giving benefits to people it also brings about many new ones. People only have the ability to find out the problems around them, no one can know the future completely though people may foresee some problem by logical analysis. So progress without any new problems is unwarranted. Consider,for example,Industrialization is a great progress is human history as it making our society more productive, but it also has brought about many serious environmental problems,such as the greenhouse effect caused by the exhaust gas gaving off by the industries and motor cars , the disertation resulting from the deforestation of many forests . Our ecosystem is very weak by the harm of industrial pollution. It is easy to see the disadvantages of the progress.

Another reason why I generally agree with the stetement is that , in the realism exchanging one problem has no correct direction and no best solution, so it is often possible that a progress achieved during the resolution of a current problem ,invent a new one, maybe even worse at the same time.One oblivious instance is the atomic power that shows a promising future while yields the potential danger of nucleic leakage, moreover, it seems that the anxiety of its danger looms larger around the world; the depression overshadowed the merits of progress and made some pessimist underplay it as merely a matter of exchanging one problem for anther.

Admittedly,it is essential to recognize the limits of our knowledge and understanding for acquiring new facts and making progress. First, those unknown or beyond our understanding always turn into the subject we studying, thus we can find new problems and acquire new facts. And when people find some problems cannot be resolved in the field of positive figures, negative figures come about. When Fleming was puzzled by the death of the germs, penicillin, a biotic medicine, was invented. Second, this awareness always plays the role as a stimulation, from which the curiosity and interests arouse. When people find some phenomeons hard to understand, they will establish hypothesis and test them or they will draw common rules from more similar things. All these actions are propelled by the curiosity and enthusiasm. For example, not knowing which material is suitable for making the bulb, Edison, the famous inventor, tried hundreds of stuff and experienced failure after failure. What encouraged him to go on is the believe that though his knowledge is limitless,unlimitness experiments can kill off uncertain problems .Third, taking the problem with an objective attitude, It is disproportional that we tend to resolve all the questions perfectly. Instead, what we should do really is to keep the placid mentality to face to the whole process to resolve the problem step by step instead of the eager for the quick success and instant benefit. After all, people are making the progress, and meanwhile the problems which are originated by human beings as well are changing to complicate.

In sum, though progress also brings some new problems to us as the old ones are solved, there is no need to be pessimistic about progress. Also we should not be stunned by so many difficulties we are facing by knowing that these problems, although currently insurmountable, will be conquered some time in the future. More over, people should have firm determination to overcome one obstacle after another , the hope of resolving a problem at just one time is the indolence of a coward .

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polymathUID: 179557

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fishjoyUID: 2116013

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polymathUID: 179557

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[ Last edited by polymath on 2005-7-30 at 17:10 ]

ahqiuUID: 207682

我先看，问题多就具体改，不多就只给建议了哈
今天忙，呵呵
待会儿在回话

ahqiuUID: 207682

ISSUE137这个题目有点难,欢迎大家拍砖!并提出宝贵意见!
先谢谢了!

137"What we call progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another." 我们所谓的进步不过是新问题代替老问题吧了.
（又是一个抽象的题目，我晕哦，昨天写一个，今天写一个，还再改一个，疯了）I fundamentally agree with the speaker’s broad assertion that progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another to some extent.,because we are facing boundless problems which seem never  go to the end, when a latent progress from current problem has solved, a new situation and fresh problem may emerge at once. However, （你是要强调后面这个吗，不是的话就不要用however那么强烈的转折）there is no need to be pessimistic about progress. People should work hard in order to put our society forward and face new problems bravely.首先这个题目英文里面不带有任何感情色彩，不要受到中文翻译的影响，你可以仔细体会一下，这就是在陈述一个事实
To begin with, nothing is perfect and flawless in our world including the progress. As the progress solving the old problems and giving benefits to people（这中间有逗号吧） it also brings about many new ones. People only have the ability to find out the problems around them, no one can know the future completely though people may foresee some problem by logical analysis.（因为可以找出问题，不能预见未来，所以进步是存在问题的，好好体会一下这个逻辑，兜圈子）So progress without any new problems is unwarranted. Consider,for example,Industrialization is a great progress is human history as it making our society more productive, but it also has brought about many serious environmental problems,such as the greenhouse effect caused by the exhaust gas gaving（giving） off by the industries and motor cars , the disertation resulting from the deforestation of many forests . Our ecosystem is very weak by the harm of industrial pollution. It is easy to see the disadvantages of the progress.（例子是不错，但前面只说不完美，写到后面开始批评缺点了，可能引申的远了一些，个人感觉，你想表达的感情色彩是？）
Another reason why I generally agree with the stetement is that , in the realism exchanging one problem has no correct direction and no best solution, so it is often possible that a progress achieved during the resolution of a current problem ,invent a new one, maybe even worse at the same time.（老大，这句话是你这篇文章的一半了，太长，我没读懂，中心句还是不要太长的好）One oblivious instance is the atomic power that shows a promising future while yields the potential danger of nucleic leakage, moreover, it seems that the anxiety of its danger looms larger around the world; the depression overshadowed the merits of progress and made some pessimist underplay it as merely a matter of exchanging one problem for anther.这段话基本没懂，你的句子太长。

Admittedly,it is essential to recognize the limits of our knowledge and understanding for acquiring new facts and making progress. First, those unknown or beyond our understanding always turn into the subject we studying, thus we can find new problems and acquire new facts. And when people find some problems cannot be resolved in the field of positive figures, negative figures（figure是什么？） come about. When Fleming was puzzled by the death of the germs, penicillin, a biotic medicine, was invented. （说完例子就完了？新问题在哪儿？）Second, this awareness（是不是写错了，我怎么感觉是unawareness） always plays the role as a stimulation, from which the curiosity and interests arouse. When people find some phenomeons hard to understand, they will establish hypothesis and test them or they will draw common rules from more similar things. All these actions are propelled by the curiosity and enthusiasm. For example, not knowing which material is suitable for making the bulb, Edison, the famous inventor, tried hundreds of stuff and experienced failure after failure. What encouraged him to go on is the believe that though his knowledge is limitless,unlimitness experiments can kill off uncertain problems.Third, taking the problem with an objective attitude, It is disproportional that we tend to resolve all the questions perfectly. (语法是不是有问题噢)Instead, what we should do really is to keep the placid mentality to face to the whole process to resolve the problem step by step instead of the eager for the quick success and instant benefit. After all, people are making the progress, and meanwhile the problems which are originated by human beings as well are changing to complicate.

In sum, though progress also brings some new problems to us as the old ones are solved, there is no need to be pessimistic about progress. Also we should not be stunned by so many difficulties we are facing by knowing that these problems, although currently insurmountable, will be conquered some time in the future. More over, people should have firm determination to overcome one obstacle after another , the hope of resolving a problem at just one time is the indolence of a coward .
提个建议吧，你的文章里经常用一些不太地道的表达，然我很费解哦，很多词不是那么用的，不需要用那么生僻的词，用一些常用的写起来，读起来都比较轻松。
那么抽象的题目写成这样已经很不错了，呵呵
不过你的重点是什么呢？看了还是不懂，把你的admittedly这一段再写写就是一篇文章了，呵呵，我没看出来你是同意还是反对，这点很重要，好像是完全同意，那么最后一段位什么用admittedly?保留什么？
好好理个思路，这种抽象的题目先好好理个思路（昨天别人教我的，呵呵）
先改到这儿吧

polymathUID: 179557

137"What we call progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another." 我们所谓的进步不过是新问题代替老问题吧了.
（又是一个抽象的题目，我晕哦，昨天写一个，今天写一个，还再改一个，疯了）呵呵!真难为你了!那就多谢谢几声!:):)I fundamentally agree with the speaker’s broad assertion that progress is a matter of exchanging one problem for another to some extent,because we are facing boundless problems which seem never  go to the end, when a latent progress from current problem has solved, a new situation and fresh problem may emerge at once. However, （你是要强调后面这个吗，不是的话就不要用however那么强烈的转折）呵呵!真聪明!在赞同基础上的递进!there is no need to be pessimistic about progress. People should work hard in order to put our society forward and face new problems bravely.首先这个题目英文里面不带有任何感情色彩，不要受到中文翻译的影响，你可以仔细体会一下，这就是在陈述一个事实
我赞同你的意见,但是我这么写是为了升华主题!
To begin with, nothing is perfect and flawless in our world including the progress. As the progress solving the old problems and giving benefits to people（这中间有逗号吧）, it also brings about many new ones. People only have the ability to find out the problems around them, no one can know the future completely though people may foresee some problems by logical analysis.（因为可以找出问题，不能预见未来，所以进步是存在问题的，好好体会一下这个逻辑，兜圈子）那里有兜圈子啊?两个句子只是为了说明进步也不是十全十美的.因此进步(解决旧问题)中产生出一些新问题是不可避免的!So progress without any new problems is unwarranted. Consider,for example,Industrialization is a great progress is human history as it making our society more productive, but it also has brought about many serious environmental problems,such as the greenhouse effect caused by the exhaust gas gaving（giving）笔误! off by the industries and motor cars , the disertation resulting from the deforestation of many forests . Our ecosystem is very weak by the harm of industrial pollution. It is easy to see the disadvantages of the progress.（例子是不错，但前面只说不完美，写到后面开始批评缺点了，可能引申的远了一些，个人感觉，你想表达的感情色彩是？）客观公正的看待我们的进步,不能忽视它的隐忧!
Another reason why I generally agree with the stetement is that , in the realism exchanging one problem has no correct direction and no best solution, so it is often possible that a progress achieved during the resolution of a current problem ,invent a new one, maybe even worse in the long-term.（老大，这句话是你这篇文章的一半了，太长，我没读懂，中心句还是不要太长的好）恩!多谢!就是太想用长句了!都忘记已经这么长了!:$One oblivious instance is the atomic power that shows a promising future while yields the potential danger of nucleic leakage.moreover, it seems that the anxiety of its danger looms larger around the world; the depression overshadowed the merits of progress and made some pessimist underplay it as merely a matter of exchanging one problem for another.这段话基本没懂，你的句子太长。我的意思是:原子能在一面展示美好应用前景,一面又给我们带来了潜在核泄漏的危险.而且,全世界对这种危险的担忧已经越来越大,一些沮丧甚至掩盖住了这种进步技术的优点导致一部分悲观主义者认为这仅仅是新问题代替了旧问题吧了!!真的不懂!不信也!;)

Admittedly,it is essential to recognize the limits of our knowledge and understanding for acquiring new facts and making progress. First, those unknown or beyond our understanding always turn into the subject we studying, thus we can find new problems and acquire new facts. And when people find some problems cannot be resolved in the field of positive figures, negative figures（figure是什么？） come about. When Fleming was puzzled by the death of the germs, penicillin, a biotic medicine, was invented. （说完例子就完了？新问题在哪儿？）没有问题啊!你没读懂我这段的意思!这个自立是证明" those unknown or beyond our understanding always turn into the subject we studying, thus we can find new problems and acquire new facts"不过你提醒的是,把后面那句话去掉哦!Second, this awareness（是不是写错了，我怎么感觉是unawareness）没写错!就是意识到知识的局限性,才能凭着好奇和兴趣推动新创新的诞生! always plays the role as a stimulation, from which the curiosity and interests arouse. When people find some phenomeons hard to understand, they will establish hypothesis and test them or they will draw common rules from more similar things. All these actions are propelled by the curiosity and enthusiasm. For example, not knowing which material is suitable for making the bulb, Edison, the famous inventor, tried hundreds of stuff and experienced failure after failure. What encouraged him to go on is the believe that though his knowledge is limitless,unlimitness experiments can kill off uncertain problems.Third, taking the problem with an objective attitude.It is disproportional这个是以前的,偶已经修改为unreasonabl that we tend to resolve all the questions perfectly. (语法是不是有问题噢)理解了没?Instead, what we should do really is to keep the placid mentality to face to the whole process to resolve the problem step by step instead of the eager for the quick success and instant benefit. After all, people are making the progress, and meanwhile the problems which are originated by human beings as well are changing to complicate.

In sum, though progress also brings some new problems to us as the old ones are solved, there is no need to be pessimistic about progress. Also we should not be stunned by so many difficulties we are facing by knowing that these problems, although currently insurmountable, will be conquered some time in the future. More over, people should have firm determination to overcome one obstacle after another , the hope of resolving a problem at just one time is the indolence of a coward .
提个建议吧，你的文章里经常用一些不太地道的表达，然我很费解哦，很多词不是那么用的，不需要用那么生僻的词，用一些常用的写起来，读起来都比较轻松。
那么抽象的题目写成这样已经很不错了，呵呵
不过你的重点是什么呢？看了还是不懂，把你的admittedly这一段再写写就是一篇文章了，呵呵，我没看出来你是同意还是反对，这点很重要，好像是完全同意，那么最后一段位什么用admittedly?保留什么？你说的有道理!其实我是基本同意,那个admittedly可能让你误会全文的意思了!改成Additionally就好了!:)
好好理个思路，这种抽象的题目先好好理个思路（昨天别人教我的，呵呵）
先改到这儿吧

fishjoyUID: 2116013

Our ecosystem is very weak by the harm of industrial pollution.
专业的写法：Our ecosystem is seriously disturbed by the harm of industrial pollution.
Another reason why I generally agree with the stetement is that
如果你是要表示基本上同意，把generally（一般地）改为fundamentally
Instead, what we should do reallyactually is to
最后一段的admittedly还是改成additionally比较好
你的很多英文表达不地道。多读读范文吧。
观点还不错。其他部分的错楼上的MM已经挑得差不多了，我就不再罗嗦了。

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[ Last edited by fishjoy on 2005-7-30 at 22:21 ]

polymathUID: 179557

太感谢了！!fishjoy这么久的文章你都搜出来了！thank you !你的意见我也采纳！:):handshake

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