0910G【Try Best】第一小组argument242 by cooljcq

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."

The arguer asserts that the use of Groveton's honor code can reduce the number of students who cheat in their academic endeavors. He gives three reasons to support his argument, which is supervising and impeaching among students, the honor code has got achievements, and a survey from students shows it well. To scrutinize these reasons, none of them can guarantee the effectiveness of honor code.
At the beginning, the arguer fails to provide enough testimony materials to make sure the pragmatic function of honor code. No evidence shows whether agreement of not cheating by students is in the form of writings or orals. If the orals are chosen, unfortunately, no institution or people can keep it in the earnest way. Whether the students notify their faculty without considering when they find cheaters is doubtful to every student. On the one hand, they are suspicious of the real function to do that; on the other hand, most of students would choose not to inform faculty after they consider the relationship between them. Besides, without confirming the real cheaters, the student tell the suspect one to the faculty, which is in doubt in a democracy and completely legal system nation.
In the second place, the arguer puts out the seemingly persuasive data which is 21 cases at their first year compared to 30 cases in the old system, 14 cases after 5 years. But after carefully analyze the causes about that, neither can it be the attestation of honor code' effective. After the honor code council takes over the old system, there is no sign to show it is honor code’s influence to get that good performance. It is sound ground to believe that students enrolled when the honor code took over the old system’s place are more talent and sagacious than before. In addition, it is persuasive that the college and university bring about a lot of new teachers who are more erudite and pundit; last but not least, based on their bad reputation on cheating, the school has already improved the teaching method which can greatly enhance interest and enthusiasm. All the three reasons can make the number of cheating students decrease.
Finally, the survey report that Groveton honor council supported arises many suspicion. The Groveton honor council himself went to investigate and get the conclusion. The reality and reliability of the report from them can't make people believe. Besides, whether the method they investigated is objective, whether the number of students they asked is convinced, and whether students told the truth or not are all unknown. Therefore, there is no reason to trust the survey report.
All in all, all the three reasons that the arguer gives are unable to reveal the honor code is a good way to keep students from cheating. Either the arguer shows other persuasive evidences to support his idea, or he should think over other ways to restrain cheating.

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The arguer asserts that the use of Groveton's honor code can reduce the number of students who cheat in their academic endeavors. He gives three reasons to support his argument, which is supervising and impeaching among students, the honor code has got achievements, and a survey from students shows it well. To scrutinize these reasons, none of them can guarantee the effectiveness of honor code.
At the beginning, the arguer fails to provide enough testimony materials to make sure the pragmatic function of honor code. No evidence shows whether agreement of not cheating by students is in the form of writings or orals. （感觉这句有点多余吧，就算是书面的又能怎样？学生不想告诉老师的话，就算是书面的保证又有用吗?）If the orals are chosen, unfortunately, no institution or people can keep it in the earnest way. Whether the students notify their faculty without considering when they find cheaters is doubtful to every student. On the one hand, they are suspicious of the real function to do that; on the other hand, most of students would（太绝对了，用may吧） choose not to inform faculty after they consider the relationship between them. Besides, without confirming the real cheaters, the student tell the suspect one to the faculty（有点中式英语了，建议换个短语或者用从句）, which is in doubt in a democracy and completely legal system nation.
In the second place, the arguer puts out the seemingly persuasive data which is 21 cases at their first year compared to 30 cases in the old system, 14 cases after 5 years. But after carefully analyze the causes about that, neither can it be the attestation of honor code' effective. After the honor code council takes over the old system, there is no sign to show(shows或者showing吧？) it is honor code’s influence to get that good performance. It is sound ground to believe that students enrolled when the honor code took over the old system’s place are more talent and sagacious than before. In addition, it is persuasive that the college and university bring about a lot of new teachers who are more erudite and pundit; last but not least, based on their bad reputation on cheating, the school has already improved the teaching method which can greatly enhance interest and enthusiasm. All the three reasons can make the number of cheating students decrease.（是否应该加一句：所以honor codes并不一定那么有用。回到honor codes的话题上）
Finally, the survey report that Groveton honor council supported arises many suspicion. The Groveton honor council himself went to investigate and get the conclusion. The reality and reliability of the report from them can't make people believe. Besides, （这句话是在解释在哪些方面、为什么不能让人信服，所以用besides不太合适）whether the method they investigated is objective, whether the number of students they asked is convinced, and whether students told the truth or not are all unknown. Therefore, there is no reason to trust the survey report.
All in all, all the three reasons that the arguer gives are unable to reveal the honor code is a good way to keep students from cheating. Either the arguer shows other persuasive evidences to support his idea, or he should think over other ways to restrain cheating.

总评：这篇文章一直在说honor codes不是那么有效，但是你忽略了一个很重要的方面，就是：就算他有效，也不一定适用于所有学校。所以我感觉你的逻辑链好像断了一层，仅仅反驳了一个方面。另外，我觉得你的ARGUMENT没有ISSUE写的好，建议在A上多下功夫哦

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