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淡青印象UID: 2639751

Take a look at our newspapers, books, TVs and Internet, the mainsources we get useful information from, nearly every one of them aretalking about past events as well as knowledges. We live in thisminute, but every minute on, now is becoming past. It's reallyridiculous to say that learning about the past has no value for presentliving. As long as we eager to understand ourselves and also thesocieties well, we should learn from the past. Because that's where wehumans and the societies came from.' p0 h# {7 P2 Q+ m. M2 @

7 x& [9 {5 k, j* B* d) tThroughlearning about the past, we come to be what we are at present. Allknowledges that we acquire as we growing up are from the past: ourlanguages, mores, academic subjects and so on. Actually, the definitionof learning itself includes the idea of an accumulation of experiencesfrom the past. At the very beginning, I learned how to communicate withothers first as my mother taught me what she used to say under eachcondition. Whenever I made my mother angry, I would be aware not to makethe same mistake again. Then when I was able to make friends, I foundout from my own experiences what kind of people are easy for me to dealwith. So next time in a new environment, I would prefer to make newfriends right of my recognized type. There's a time I cried when I gotfrustrated because things didn't work out, but soon I realized that cryprovides no help. So next time, I would not cry any more but to searchfor a possible solution. All through my life, I'm learning from eithermy past  or other's experiences, thus to shape the person right nowstanding here. If anyone wants to understand my behaviors or thoughts,there's certainly no better way to do it through examining my history.9 A& q- c; K  }- Y- V! }

  w( p8 \; V" O3 cThe societieshave been influenced even more by its past. History, that's what wecall it, which provides us nearly every details of each aspect of oursocieties, makes it relatively easy to trace how our societies shapedand what they will be like in the future. That's why all schoolsrequired to include history in their curriculum. In fact, othersubjects, either sciences or arts or literatures, are all studiesinherited from the past. "It is by standing on the shoulders of thegiants", we can see further and make more progresses in both arts andsciences. Learning about the history of World War I and II, we know towhat degree the world will be destroyed by wars. And that potentiallythreatening disaster in turn prevent any chance of World War III fromcoming up. Learning about our nations' struggling to be stand on theinternational arena, we sense a deep pride of our motherlands and thusrespect them more wholeheartedly than ever. In a word, only throughgetting familiar with the past, we understand the societies better, andcan predict where they are heading for.
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All in all, the past is the very thing nobody can escape from. So whynot just absorb it and make a break through it at present and take abold step into the future?

由于isu因为客观原因不能上网，所以我代他评了。不好意思啊，我语法不好，没发现什么问题。
文章结构很好哈，其实toefl作文的话也可以在主体段之后来一个让步，最后再结尾会更好。。。（搞定电脑！）

larcwingUID: 2528204

10.3
The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by the individual. Do you agree or disagree?


Thesis: Environment issue cannot be handled by one individual, yet individuals should try their best to help.
1. The environment issue is a complex and international one so it demands the world as a whole to solve it.
2. As individuals, we also have our own part to do to prevent the issue from becoming even worse.


Some people contend the environment problems should be solved through worldwide cooperation, while others believe that individuals also need to share the responsibility of protecting our mother planet. In my point of view, they both make sense and they do not contradict to each other. In other words, environment issue is such a comlex and internatioanal one that no individual but only the world as a whole could possibly handle, yet individuals have to try their best to assist, or else they might have made it worse.

The severity and complexity of the issue demands all nations to be organized and all energies to be accumulated. Such problems as Global warming caused by Ozone depletion, land desertification because of over-deforestation and resource shortage due to human abusing, cannot blame each one country exclusively. Those problems are caused by all human beings and only all nations together with global organizations could have enough ability as well as authority to get them solved. International regulations should be established and implemented by both the international organizations and each nation. And moreover, intense supervision should be performed under international control, maybe by the UN with conferred rights. Only if the world as a whole set out to handle the problems and only when they could actually be as a whole, there will be a chance to turn the situation round.

On the other hand, our mother planet requests all its offsprings to prevent her from suffering dying pain of the lethal environmental diseases. People may claim that they don't acquire enough ability or power to solve the environment problems. That's true perhaps in many circumstances, but that may also be only an excuse for escaping form one's own responsibility of protecting the environment. The fact is that, everyone could possibly do something to stop hurting our environment if he/she wishes to. Don't waste water or electricity or any other energy resources at your home, at schools, at offices, or even in public places. Don't use plastic bags or any other non-recycable containers. Don't pollute the air or water or land with your personal garbages or even loud noises. And don't....The list can be endless. Just stop doing such foolish things and our environment can get a chance to breathe. What's more, you can even go much further by performing good deeds, such as planting more trees or flowers, volunteering in some environmental protecting activities, using public transportation in stead of driving....This could be another endless list.

All in all, the environment is all human beings' living condition. We together, both organized and self-devoted, can make it better if only you wish.

Jodie_310UID: 2439321

Some people contend the environment(al) problems should be solved through worldwide cooperation, while others believe that individuals also need to share the responsibility of protecting our mother planet. In my point of view, they both make sense and they do not contradict to each other. In other words, environment issue is such a comlex(complex) and international one that no individual but only the world as a whole could possibly handle, yet individuals have to try their best to assist, or else they might have made it worse.


The severity and complexity of the issue demands all nations to be organized and all energies to be accumulated. Such problems as Global warming caused by Ozone depletion, land desertification because of over-deforestation and resource shortage due to human abusing, cannot blame each one country exclusively. Those problems are caused by all human beings and only all nations together with global organizations could have enough ability as well as authority to get them solved. International regulations should be established and implemented by both the international organizations and each nation. And moreover(直接用moreover就够了吧), intense supervision should be performed under international control, maybe by the UN with conferred rights. Only if the world as a whole set out to handle the problems and only when they could actually be as a whole, there will be a chance to turn the situation round（前面用的only开头，后面句子要倒装）.


On the other hand, our mother planet requests all its（既然是mother，就应该用her） offsprings to prevent her from suffering dying pain of the lethal environmental diseases. People may claim that they don't acquire enough ability or power to solve the environment problems. That's true perhaps in many circumstances, but that may also be only an excuse for escaping form（from） one's own responsibility of protecting the environment. The fact is that, everyone could possibly do something to stop hurting our environment if he/she wishes to. Don't waste water or electricity or any other energy resources at your home, at schools, at offices, or even in public places. Don't use plastic bags or any other non-recyclable containers. Don't pollute the air or water or land with your personal garbages or even loud noises. And don't....The list can be endless. Just stop doing such foolish things and our environment can get a chance to breathe. What's more, you can even go much further by performing good deeds, such as planting more trees or flowers, volunteering in some environmental protecting activities, using public transportation in stead of driving....This could be another endless list.

All in all, the environment is all human beings' living condition. We together, both organized and self-devoted, can make it better if only you wish.

总评：太强大了。词汇量~句式~思想都很好。膜拜ing。水平有限。只能改成这样了。

如是_ivyUID: 2704554

The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by the individual. Do you agree or disagree?


Thesis: Environment issue cannot be handled by one individual, yet individuals should try their best to help.
1. The environment issue is a complex and international one so it demands the world as a whole to solve it.#
2. As individuals, we also have our own part to do to prevent the issue from becoming even worse.


Some people contend the environment problems should be solved through worldwide cooperation, while others believe that individuals also need to share the responsibility （学到了，很贴切的用法呢~~）of protecting our mother planet. In my point of view, they both make sense and they do not contradict to each other. In other words, environment issue is such a comlex and internatioanal （complex  international）one that no individual but only the world as a whole could possibly handle, yet individuals have to try their best to assist, or else they might have made it worse.4 l' }3 f- ~5 y( S* |0 e

The severity and complexity of the issue demands all nations to be organized and all energies to be accumulated. Such problems as Global warming caused by Ozone depletion, land desertification because of over-deforestation and resource shortage due to human abusing, cannot blame each one country exclusively. Those problems are caused by all human beings and only all nations together with global organizations could have enough ability as well as authority to get them solved. International regulations should be established and implemented by both the international organizations and each nation. And moreover, intense supervision should be performed under international control, maybe by the UN with conferred rights. Only if the world as a whole set out to handle the problems and only when they could actually be as a whole, there will be a chance to turn the situation round.（倒装吧）

On the other hand, our mother planet requests all its offsprings to prevent her from suffering dying pain of the lethal environmental diseases. People may claim that they don't acquire enough ability or power to solve the environment problems. That's true perhaps in many circumstances, but that may also be only an excuse for escaping form（from） one's own responsibility of protecting the environment. The fact is that, everyone could possibly do something to stop hurting our environment if he/she wishes to. （我觉得possibly do好怪啊。可以简单一点can do 或者。。。is not impossible会不会正常一点呢？）Don't waste water or electricity or any other energy resources at your home, at schools, at offices, or even in public places. Don't use plastic bags or any other non-recycable（recyclable） containers. Don't pollute the air or water or land with your personal garbages or even loud noises. And don't....The list can be endless. Just stop doing such foolish things and our environment can get a chance to breathe. （个人觉得用please give our environment a second to breathe会不会好点？主语比较一致，可以继续祈使句啊。觉得你这一排祈使句用的很牛呢）What's more, you can even go much further by performing good deeds（觉得deeds用的有点怪啊，可能不是很习惯吧） such as planting more trees or flowers, volunteering in some environmental protecting activities, using public transportation instead of driving....This could be another endless list.

All in all, the environment is all human beings' living condition. We together, both organized and self-devoted, can make it better if only you wish.

很强大的一篇文章，就是觉得可能拼词有点粗心哦~~还有就是个别句子觉得有点怪。
词汇太强大了~~~崇拜！！

larcwingUID: 2528204

10.7 Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.

oppose:
1. Technology provides children better database to form creative thinking.
2. Technology provides children wider stage to perform their creativeness.
3. Even some children show less creativeness, there's no reason to blame technology.


Throughout history, the progress of technology always brings up certain controversies over the problem whether it provides more benefits or drawbacks. However, in nearly all the cases, including the issue we will be talking about, actually technology is just an assistant to accelerate human actions or to creat possibilies for them. And don't forget that it is always human who is in charge. Technology has provided better conditions as well as most equitable arena for children to develop their creativity. So if they just cannot use it well, for what reasons can we ever blame on technology?

First of all, technology provides children conditions better than ever to develop creative thinking. The ability of creative thinking, in which imagination means a lot yet not everything, needs a solid foundation of information and knowledge. And all that, can be easily obtained on a computer with internet service. Maybe an imagine of a person laying down in a mass of hundreds of books scattered on the floor could hinder a teenager's willing to do any research. But what if the sources he should acquire can be searched out within a minute and all he needs to do is to move his fingers and type some words on the computer?There's far more chance for him to at least learn something new while accomplish some thinking.

Furthermore, technology also offers a most disinterested atmosphere for children to state their creativity. In last century, it was still difficult enough for anyone to raise creative thoughts, if without the support from the authorities or pundits. However, thanks to the newly development of technology, especially the internet, things are much different nowadays. Supposed that John, 14 year-old boy, cannot get credit from his teachers for his outstandingly creative ideas, he can just put them on the internet highway. And then his ideas will travel across the whole globe, and finally will reach someone who shows interest in them. Eventually, these ideas maybe performed in practical use and proved to be really excellent.

Of course, there are many claims that the dependence on the new technology has turned their children to lazy followers. There are that kind of little boys or girls just rely on computers or other electronic learning equipment to tell them answers. They're least likely to improve their own thinking abilities self-consicously. But, what we should bear in mind before we unjusticely judge it's technology which should be blame on, Please take a deep think first. After all, should we make use of the technology to improve ourselves, or should we be made fool of by technology?

hydrusUID: 171899

10.7 Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.
oppose:
Technology provides children better database to form creative thinking.
2. Technology provides children wider stage to perform their creativeness.
Even some children show less creativeness, there's no reason to blame technology.

Throughout history, the progress of technology always brings up certain controversies over the problem whether it provides more benefits or drawbacks. However, in nearly all the cases, including the issue we will be talking about, actually technology is just an assistant to accelerate human actions or to creat possibilies(possibilities) for them. And don't forget that it is always human who is in charge. Technology has provided better conditions as well as most equitable arena for children to develop their creativity. So if they just cannot use it well, for what reasons can we ever blame on technology?(这句倒装我很喜欢）

First of all, technology provides children conditions better than ever to develop creative thinking. The ability of creative thinking, in which imagination means a lot yet not everything, needs a solid foundation of information and knowledge. And all that, can be easily obtained on a computer with internet service. Maybe an imagine of a person laying down in （a mass of）mess of hundreds of books scattered on the floor could hinder a teenager's willing to do any research（感觉小孩做research有点不合适）. But what if the sources he should acquire can be searched out within a minute and all he needs to do is to move his fingers and type some words on the computer?（这个疑问句插得不错，不过句式结构是不是有点问题？）There's far more chance for him to at least learn something new while（before？） accomplish some thinking.

Furthermore, technology also offers a most disinterested atmosphere for children to state their creativity. In last century, it was still difficult enough for anyone to raise creative thoughts, if without the support from the authorities or pundits. However, thanks to the newly （newly 是副词 可以用developing technology)development of technology, especially the internet, things are much different nowadays. Supposed that John, 14 year-old boy, cannot get credit from his teachers for his outstandingly creative ideas（感觉得到某人的欣赏还是appreciate 比较好，或者是recommend）, he can just put them on the internet highway. And then his ideas will travel across the whole globe, and finally will reach someone who shows interest in them. Eventually, these ideas maybe performed in practical use and proved to be really excellent.

Of course, there are many claims that the dependence on the new technology has turned their children to lazy followers. There are that kind of little boys or girls just rely on computers or other electronic learning equipment to tell them answers. （这两个句子再精炼些，整合到一起就好了，能更好的表达排比效果）They're least likely to improve their own thinking abilities self-consicously. But, what we should bear in mind before we unjustly judge it's technology which should be blame on, Please take a deep think（深思是deep think么，我不是很确定的说） first. After all, should we make use of the technology to improve ourselves, or should we be made fool of by technology?（是不是想表达 shall we make ourselves fool by using technology created by us.感觉后面的那句有点别扭）
总体感觉句式还是挺多的，有插入，疑问，倒装，例子也有，但是有些句式和词用得不够地道。

如是_ivyUID: 2704554

Throughout history, the progress of technology always brings up certain controversies over the problem whether it provides more benefits or drawbacks. However, in nearly all the cases, including the issue we will be talking about, actually technology is just an assistant to accelerate human actions or to creat possibilies for them. And don't forget that it is always human who is in charge. 这句我太爱了。我有句跟你表达的意思是一样，但是你这句太强大了。Technology has provided better conditions不可数吧 as well as most equitable arena for children to develop their creativity. So if they just cannot use it well, for what reasons can we ever blame on technology?

First of all, technology provides children conditions better than ever to develop creative thinking. The ability of creative thinking, in which imagination means a lot yet not everything, needs a solid foundation of information and knowledge.这句好有道理啊。我当时想论证more creative就是想不出理由。 And all that, can be easily obtained on a computer with internet service. Maybe an imagine of a person laying down in a mass of hundreds of books scattered on the floor could hinder a teenager's willing to do any research. But what if the sources he should acquire can be searched out within a minute and all he needs to do is to move his fingers and type some words on the computer?这个例子很生动There's far more chance for him to at least learn something new while accomplish some thinking.

Furthermore, technology also offers a most disinterested atmosphere for children to state their creativity. In last century, it was still difficult enough for anyone to raise creative thoughts, if without the support from the authorities or pundits. However, thanks to the newly development of technology, especially the internet, things are much different nowadays. Supposed that John, 14 year-old boy, cannot get credit from his teachers for his outstandingly creative ideas, he can just put them on the internet highway. And then his ideas will travel across the whole globe, and finally will reach someone who shows interest in them. Eventually, these ideas maybe performed in practical use and proved to be really excellent.这段观点太强大了，自己都没有想到。学习学习~~;

Of course, there are many claims that the dependence on the new technology has turned their children to lazy followers. There are that kind of little boys or girls just rely on computers or other electronic learning equipment to tell them answers. They're least likely to improve their own thinking abilities self-consicously. But, what we should bear in mind before we unjusticely judge it's technology which should be blame on, Please take a deep think first. After all, should we make use of the technology to improve ourselves, or should we be made fool of by technology?

牛人~~我的观点跟你很像的，但是你论证的比我牛太多了~~~一定要多来看看你的作文

如是_ivyUID: 2704554

Dad used to tell me, "Sometimes you must do things that you do not enjoy doing before you can do things(其实觉得这里换成do what you want to貌似好点。好多do things 看起来怪怪的 you want to. That's what the life is like, and that's what we pay to grow up." Through all these years with my study, profession我也不确定可以用什么比较地道，只是觉得profession看起来在这里有点怪 and daily life, I definitely get to understand the meaning in between 是不是打错了。in between?these words more thoroughly and stick to it paying to enjoy my life.这个开头很好呢，很新颖，而且让人很亲切，比一般生硬的表观点的好很多。学习啊学习

During school years, teenagers have to study, no matter whether they like it or not. It seems that few teenagers like studying but they've all been forced to do it. Ironically, I found that most of my schoolmates who were constantly complaining about study eventually had to spend more time on it, in most case unwillingly of course,额。我米看懂这个。我猜是大多数情况是把更多时间在不喜欢的课程上的意思。真的不确定可不可以这么说 because of the press came from both their parents and teachers. On the other hand, I am lucky to be among the other students who understand the statement givinggiven吧 above at the first stage of lives. We got to know we should do well on our study first even if we didn't sincerely enjoy studying, and only then we could 倒装吧be offered more free time to do things we really enjoy doing.觉得你这篇写法真的好特别。这段在描述普遍现象来说明问题。蛮好~~~

And further, just take a look at our professional tasks. No one likes to be stuck with dull, repetitive work, but the truth is that nearly every type of work have more or less some boring assignments. Given that I enjoy my teaching job, I still have to put up with the routine things, such as taking part in the somewhat tiring school meetings, contacting with some annoying parents, in the first place. It's our responsibility not only doing things that we are fond of, but also complete all we should do as in our positions.这段还是亲身经历哦。把前一段细节化了。觉得你这篇写的真的跟我看过的其他的结构很不一样呢。呵呵~~很自然的感觉。O(∩_∩)O~

It is also true when applied to personal daily life. No one likes to take medicines or go to see the doctor, but if we were ill, we had no other choices but to either take pills or go to the doctor. Also, some people hate cooking; some don't like washing; others disgust cleaning stuffs. 这句很强大，排比而没有重词Yet we all have to do those things daily because if we don't do, we can't enjoy our favorite meals; or we don't have clean clothes to wear to our fantastic parties; or just simply lack of a tidy environment to live.

Life is just like this. I do things 还是觉得用what好。do things 实在看起来怪啊I should do, then in return I 加个will好点吧get chances to do things I like to.跟开头有点重了，建议可以打个类比。比如吃饱了饭才能干啥啊之类的。我随便说的这个类比，比较诡异。 Sometimes, if I turn it over, there are usually some things that I originally thought I wouldn't like, actually lead to enjoyment.觉得最后一段就没有前面三段精彩了

呵呵~~应该不是典型的托的那种作文，怎么说呢。喜欢这种风格。那中文文章类比的话，之前的那种是条理分明的议论文，这种就想是自然的说理性散文。嘿嘿~~~

学习咯~~我要多来看你的作文哦~~O(∩_∩)O~

如是_ivyUID: 2704554

有时间帮我看看吧。我那组那天就俩人。less friendly的。比上篇less creative的少了很多空道理。

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larcwingUID: 2528204

10.11
原本心里还想着这篇好像比较好写，结果写着写着就严重超时了。。。。中间被迫打断一次停了好久，回来都差点不知道怎么写下去。。。。写得巨累。。。。愁死我了~~超时啊超时啊超时啊！！！！
Topic31 Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.


My parents live in this city for their whole lifetime. And so do my aunts and uncles. It seems most people are satisfied living in one place. They got their real estate here, their acquainces nearby, and they are familiar with all aspects of life in this area. But to me, the situation is quite different. I just long for more broader world, with new adventures, new acquaintances, even new life styles ahead.

Sometimes move to a new place seems like a fantastic adventure to me. I love traveling to places I never been to. I'm always fond of rambling in the unfamiliar streets with a map in hands and covering the areas on foot; I indulged in tasting new favor of food whenever I encount a fancy restaurant or even a snack stand; I'm always captivated by unexpected sceneries on the way. Once when I was working in Korea, I went out for an exploration in this exotic semi-island on a weekend. I didn't know the place well so I just walked along the street. On my way, I randomly stepped into a small lunch room with particular appearance. Surprisingly, the waitresses there were all wearing their colorful tradional clothes- hanboks. It was really amazing to taste some delicious 'kimchi' and 'Dduk Bok Ki' in this atmosphere. After a contented meal, a kind waitress told me a way leading to a picturesque creek. I enjoyed this kind of experiences so much that I'd rather do it again and again in different places.

Moving to another place also means to enlarge your acquaintances. Although it's nice to be with your old friends, it's equally cheerful to make new ones. Different friends bring to you diversified experiences in life. Knowing new people just like opening and reading a new book. And it always turns out to be very enjoyable. Moveover, more friends presents us more opportunities both on work and in life. Last month one of my friends moved to a city I'd once been in, and she needed a job right away. Since it's not the right season for job hunting, she was quite worried and asked for my help. Fortunately I've made lots of friends since I lived there, so we soon accumulated many position information and finally got her a job. Without the assistant offered by my friends in that city, there would not be an immediate solution.

With all the experiences I acquired through moving, I've been lucky enough to try out several different life styles. "When you in Rome, do as Romers do." I found it is not only true as the saying goes, but rather pleasant to put it in parctice. When I was in a countryside for a couple of months, I enjoyed the slow life pace very much. My friends and I would spent two or even three hours to prepare for a dinner and the whole night to regale on it while singing and dancing. When I was in a big city, I turned to a busy girl, who was both hard-working in an office and active at night parties. Shifting between different life styles often make me more energetic in life.

Moving from one place to another, I bet, is the best way to enjoy my colorfully enriched life.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

首先表达下,嗯..长

Some people spend their entire lives in one place.(while连接2句子) Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which (one ) do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your??不是你需要陈述你的观点么,怎么成了..?头段可以表达下你的立场 opinion.

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My parents live in this city for their whole lifetime. And so do my aunts and uncles. It seems most people are satisfied living in one place. They got their real estate here, their acquainces nearby, and they are familiar with all aspects of life in this area. But to me, the situation is quite different. I just long for more broader world, with new adventures, new acquaintances, even new life styles ahead.这里倒不如放在首段,观点明确.

Sometimes move to a new place seems like a fantastic adventure to me. I love traveling to places I never been to. I'm always fond of rambling in the unfamiliar streets with a map in hands and covering the areas on foot; I indulged in tasting new favor of food whenever I encount a fancy restaurant or even a snack stand; I'm always captivated by unexpected sceneries on the way. Once when I was working in Korea, I went out for an exploration in this exotic semi-island on a weekend. I didn't know the place well so I just walked along the street. On my way, I randomly stepped into a small lunch room with particular appearance. Surprisingly, the waitresses there were all wearing their colorful tradional clothes- hanboks. It was really amazing to taste some delicious 'kimchi' and 'Dduk Bok Ki' in this atmosphere. After a contented meal, a kind(a warm-hearted) waitress told me a way leading to a picturesque creek. I enjoyed this kind of experiences so much that I'd rather do it again and again in different places.

Moving to another place also means to enlarge your acquaintances. Although it's nice to be with your old friends, it's equally cheerful to make new ones. Different friends bring to you diversified experiences in life. Knowing new people just like opening and reading a new book. And it,(which) always turns out to be very enjoyable. Moveover, more friends presents us more opportunities both on work and in life. Last month one of my friends moved to a city I'd once been in, and she needed a job right away. Since it's was not the right season for job hunting, she was quite worried and asked for my help. Fortunately I've made lots of friends since I lived there, so we soon accumulated many (working) position information--(the friends I made when i was there accumulated information about working position) and finally got her a job. Without the assistant offered by my friends in that city, there would not be an immediate solution.
个人觉得前2段写的是在其他城市的经历, 尤其是2段. 跟move to city 有相违背.

With all the experiences I acquired through moving, I've been lucky enough to try out several different life styles. "When you in Rome, do as Romers do." I found it is not only true as the saying goes, but rather pleasant to put it in parctice. When I was in a countryside for a couple of months, I enjoyed the slow life pace very much. My friends and I would spent two or even three hours to prepare for a dinner and the whole night to regale on it while singing and dancing. When I was in a big city, I turned to a busy girl (woman or lady, sound mature), who was both hard-working in an office and active at night parties. Shifting between different life styles often make me more energetic in life

Moving from one place to another, I bet, is the best way to enjoy my colorfully enriched life. 嗯..这是结尾么..??支持不够强大,貌似有点小跑题. 说了很多的旅行经历.没有用复杂句.说的不对见谅

larcwingUID: 2528204

10.12
topic：do you agree or disagree getting university education is the most important factor for success.


Success means quite diversiformly in different people's perspectives. Money, power, happiness, accomplishments and etc, all of these can be on one's list of success. Thus, the most important factor for success may be varied for each individual. However, nowadays for most ordinary human, attending university is an important factor in approaching their goal.

First of all, entering university is just like setting out a step into a world of opportunites. University is the right place for you to accumulate knowledge and information that will be proved essential in your future pursuing. One is not only reading the textbooks or listening to lectures, but rather learning the methods from prominent professors of getting information and further analyzing it thus one can practically make use of it by oneself afterwards. Moreover, it is most likely in universities we meet a large number of talents who may share the same life target with you. More communicating with such people, courage and helpfulness as well as opportunities there will be. Attending university is indeed a best preparation for the future success.

Furthermore, with a college degree, you have better chances in job market and later on in promotion. At present, nearly every corporation which can provide you a decent platform for development with a higher start request you to obtain a degree at least. There were some classmates in my high school went directly to job hunting. All of them suffered a tough time before they found a job and also after they were working. One of them talked to me a couple of months ago, complaining about being looked down upon by his colleagues and the boss always reluctant to give him a chance in promotion only because he hadn't a diploma. "It's really unfair! I can do just well as those undergraduates do. I just lack of the chance to show myself." Maybe he was right. It seems injustice to the non-university students. But the world today requires us of a higher education, and you certainly will be on the downside if you don't follow the rules.

Of course, there might be someone oppose to my claim by presenting the oudstanding examples such as Bill Gates, who had definitely dropped out from his university for his own success. But permit me to pose a question here: in hell how many people can actually be a Bill Gates?

As we are just ordinary people, we'd better respond to the intellectual world with at least a higher education in order to get a more possible access to our success.

spyUID: 2295035

Success means quite diversiformly(google不到这个单词) in different people's perspectives. Money, power, happiness, accomplishments and etc, all of these can be on one's list of success. Thus, the most important factor for success may be varied for each individual. However, nowadays for most ordinary human, attending university is an important factor in approaching their goal.（最好点明是most important）

First of all, entering university is just like setting out a step into a world of opportunites. University is the right place for you to accumulate knowledge and information that will be proved essential in your future pursuing. One is not only reading the textbooks or listening to lectures, but rather（应该是but also吧） learning the methods from prominent professors of getting information and further analyzing it thus one can practically make use of it by oneself afterwards. Moreover, it is most likely in universities（单数好点） we meet a large number of talents who may share the same life target with you（us）. More communicating with such people, courage and helpfulness as well as opportunities there will be. Attending university is indeed a best preparation for the future success.

Furthermore, with a college degree, you have better chances in job market and later on in promotion. At present, nearly every corporation which can provide you a decent platform for development with a higher start request you to obtain a degree at least. There were some classmates in my high school went directly to job hunting. All of them suffered a tough time before they found a job and also after they were working. One of them talked to me a couple of months ago, complaining about being looked down upon by his colleagues and the boss always reluctant to give him a chance in promotion only because he hadn't a diploma. "It's really unfair! I can do just well as those undergraduates do. I just lack of the chance to show myself." Maybe he was right. It seems injustice to the non-university students. But the world today requires us of a higher education, and you certainly will be on the downside if you don't follow the rules.

Of course, there might be someone oppose to my claim by presenting the oudstanding examples such as Bill Gates, who had definitely dropped out from his university for his own success. But permit me to pose a question here: in hell how many people can actually be a Bill Gates（正式的文章用in hell感觉不太好）?

As we are just ordinary people, we'd better respond to the intellectual world with at least a higher education in order to get a more possible access to our success.

逻辑比较清晰，结构也很好，就是ts没有完全符合题目，第二个论点扣题不太紧，基本没有提到success

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

Success means quite diversiformly--多样化的意思不 in different people's perspectives. Money, power, happiness, accomplishments and etc, all of these can be on one's list of success. Thus, the most important factor for success may be varied for each individual. However, nowadays for most ordinary human, attending university is an important factor in approaching their goal.开头明确

First of all, entering university is just like setting out a step into a world of opportunites绝对了吧...明显是歧视高中毕业的;P . University is the right place for you to accumulate knowledge and information that will be proved essential in your future pursuing. One is not only reading the textbooks or listening to lectures, but rather learning the methods from prominent professors of getting information and further analyzing it thus one can practically make use of it by oneself afterwards. Moreover, it is most likely in universities we meet a large number of talents who may share the same life target with you. More communicating with such people, courage and helpfulness as well as opportunities there will be. Attending university is indeed a best preparation for the future success

Furthermore, with a college degree, you have better chances in job market and later on in promotion. At present, nearly every corporation which can provide you a decent platform for development with a higher start request you to obtain a degree at least. There were some classmates in my high school went directly to job hunting. All of them suffered a tough time before they found a (good paid) job and also after they were working这个不说也行. One of them talked个人认为直接抱怨就好不用再talk下 to me a couple of months ago, complaining about being looked down upon by his colleagues and the boss always reluctant to give him a chance in promotion only because he hadn't a diploma--degree. "It's really unfair! I can do just well as those undergraduates do. I just lack of the chance to show myself." Maybe he was right. It seems injustice to the non-university students. But the world today requires us of a higher education, and you certainly will be on the downside if you don't follow the rules.这里貌似说的说学历工作的影响

Of course, there might be someone oppose to my claim by presenting the oudstanding examples such as Bill Gates, who had definitely dropped out from his university for his own success. But permit me to pose a question here: in hell管他啥意思的这个最好不用 how many people can actually be a Bill Gates?

As we are just ordinary people, we'd better respond to the intellectual world with at least a higher education in order to get a more possible access to our success. 说学历工作的多.成功不代表工作怎么怎么样.多少跑题了

larcwingUID: 2528204

唉，考完好久不写作文了~~还挺怀念了。。。。可是申请好麻烦啊！！！！苦恼。。。