进军美利坚10.6 health care and environment issues, which needs more attention?

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Government should pay more attention on health care issues than on environmental issues
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Nowadays, social problems become more and more complex. Accordingly, it requires government to be more careful about dealing with those problems. Recently, health care and environment has become the controversial issues in society. Which issue should government pay more attention to? Some people advocate that heath care problems should be given more efforts to solve, while other people contend that environmental issues need more concerned. Though, in my opinion, both issues are important, I support the former view.

Admittedly, environment issues worth more concerns from the perspective of long-term interest. As we know, environment and people are inter-related to each other. on one hand, we can not live without environment. In other words, we are actually living in it; we are part of it. On the other hand, what we do influences/shapes what the environment is right now. On top of that, our children, grandchildren and their decedents will also be dependent on the environment. Paying environment issues more attentions is a good investment of the world that is shared by our children and us.

However, under current circumstances, health care problems are more urgent to be taken care of by government, because these issues have instant significant effects on people's daily life. Health care policy directly determines each family's budget plan. Sometimes it is even associated with people's lives. If not properly solved, health care may cause serious social wide fear. On the contrary, we don't have urgent environment problems to deal with right now. Actually, our environment circumstances are not as bad as the situations of health care plan.

What's more, the natures of these two different problems determine that, to solve these issues, different ways are needed. Government should take preventative approach to take care of environment problems while active methods are needed to deal with health care problems. Even if government pays more attention to environment issues, the results are unpredictable because environment is affected by so many factors that government has no way to fully cover them. By contrast, health care issues are easier to predict. Through thorough debates and discussions, the influences of health care plan on society and different groups of citizens would become clear. It is just worth the effort to pay attention to health care issues to a further extent than it does to environment issues.

Considering all the reasons mentioned above, it is my point of view that the health care problems are worth more attentions than environment issues.

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Nowadays, social problems become more and more complex. Accordingly, it requires government to be more careful about dealing with those problems. Recently, health care and environment has become the controversial issues in society. Which issue should government pay more attention to? Some people advocate that heath care problems should be given more efforts to solve, while other people contend that environmental issues need more concerned. Though, in my opinion, both issues are important, I support the former view.

Admittedly, environment issues worth more concerns from the perspective of long-term interest. As we know, environment and people are inter-related to each other. on one hand, we can not live without environment. In other words, we are actually living in it; we are part of it. On the other hand, what we do influences/shapes what the environment is right now. On top of that, our children, grandchildren and their decedents will also be dependent on the environment. Paying environment issues more attentions is a good investment of the world that is shared by our children and us. （长久之计）

However, under current circumstances, health care problems are more urgent to be taken care of by government, because these issues have instant significant effects on people's daily life. Health care policy directly determines each family's budget plan. Sometimes it is even associated with people's lives. If not properly solved, health care may cause serious social wide fear. On the contrary, we don't have urgent environment problems to deal with right now. Actually, our environment circumstances are not as bad as the situations of health care plan. （当务之急）

What's more, the natures of these two different problems determine that, to solve these issues, different methods are needed. Government should take preventative approach to take care of environment problems while active methods are needed to deal with health care problems. Even if government pays more attention to environment issues, the results are unpredictable because environment is affected by so many factors that government has no way to fully cover them. By contrast, health care issues are easier to predict. Through thorough debates and discussions, the influences of health care plan on society and different groups of citizens would become clear. It is just worth the effort to pay attention to health care issues to a further extent than it does to environment issues.

Considering all the reasons mentioned above, it is my point of view that the health care problems are worth more attentions than environment issues.

（举例可以丰富些 :D）

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谢谢 2009toefl10 你的建设性意见都很好 我发现了自己举例的问题 在10.7作业里已经改良了

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Nowadays, social problems become more and more complex. Accordingly, it requires government to be more careful about dealing with those problems. (如果这个地方写成一个被动句然后和前面那句连起来的话，我觉得会比较顺)Recently, health care and environment has become the controversial issues in society.（前面三句话的联系不太紧密） Which issue should government pay more attention to? Some people advocate that heath care problems should be given more efforts to solve, while other people contend that environmental issues need more concerned. Though, in my opinion, both issues are important, I support the former view.

Admittedly, environment issues worth more concerns from the perspective of long-term interest. As we know, environment and people are inter-related to each other. on one hand, we can not live without environment. In other words, we are actually living in it; we are part of it.（这个地方感觉有点中国） On the other hand, what we do influences/shapes what the environment is right now（这句不太明白）. On top of that, our children, grandchildren and their decedents will also be dependent on the environment. Paying environment issues more attentions is a good investment （to？）of the world that is shared by our children and us.

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However, under current circumstances, health care problems are more urgent to be taken care of by government, because these issues have instant significant effects on people's daily life.（这句话很切中要害呢） Health care policy directly determines each family's budget plan. Sometimes it is even associated with people's lives. If not properly solved, health care may cause serious social wide fear. On the contrary, we don't have urgent environment problems to deal with right now. Actually, our environment circumstances are not as bad as the situations of health care plan.

What's more, the natures of these two different problems determine that, to solve these issues, different ways are needed. Government should take preventative approach to take care of environment problems while active methods are needed to deal with health care problems. Even if government pays more attention to environment issues, the results are unpredictable because environment is affected by so many factors that government has no way to fully cover them. By contrast, health care issues are easier to predict. Through thorough debates and discussions, the influences of health care plan on society and different groups of citizens would become clear. It is just worth the effort to pay attention to health care issues to a further extent than it does to environment issues.

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Considering all the reasons mentioned above, it is my point of view that the health care problems are worth more attentions than environment issues.
论证方法比较新颖阿！ 个人感觉有些地方太注重了长难句的使用 读起来反而不是很顺畅。

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Nowadays, social problems become more and more complex. Accordingly, it requires government to be more careful about dealing with those problems. Recently, health care and environment has become the controversial issues in society. Which issue(s) should government pay more attention to? Some people advocate that heath care problems should be given more efforts to solve, while other people contend that environmental issues need more concerned(concern). Though, in my opinion, both issues are important, I support the former view.

Admittedly, environment issues worth more concerns from the perspective of long-term interest. As we know, environment and people are inter-related to each other. on one hand, we can not live without environment. In other words, we are actually living in it; we are part of it. On the other hand, what we do influences/shapes what the environment is right now. On top of that, our children, grandchildren and their decedents will also be dependent on the environment（直接用depend on）. Paying environment issues more attentions is a good investment of（to） the world that is shared by our children and us.

However, under current circumstances, health care problems are more urgent to be taken care of by government, because these issues have instant significant effects on people's daily life. Health care policy directly determines each family's budget plan. Sometimes it is even associated with people's lives. If not properly solved, health care may cause serious social wide fear. On the contrary, we don't have urgent environment problems to deal with right now.（这句比较没有根据） Actually, our environment circumstances are not as bad as the situations of health care plan.

What's more, the natures of these two different problems determine that, to solve these issues, different ways are needed. Government should take preventative approach to take care of environment problems while active methods are needed to deal with health care problems. Even if government pays more attention to environment issues, the results are unpredictable because environment is affected by so many factors that government has no way to fully cover them. By contrast, health care issues are easier to predict. Through thorough debates and discussions, the influences of health care plan on society and different groups of citizens would become clear. It is just worth the effort to pay attention to health care issues to a further extent than it does to environment issues.

Considering all the reasons mentioned above, it is my point of view that the health care problems are worth more attentions than environment issues.

逻辑比较清晰，句型也比较丰富

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确实那句比较没有根据。。。