2009雪候鸟作文贴

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综合 test 3

The reading passage raises the issue that the giant-impact theory contributed to the moon formation is unconvincable. However, this statement is strongly quesitoned by the lecture which provides drastically different evidences in three ways.

The professor begins by pointing that  so far there indeed is no trace found on the surface of the earth. The fact is that this collsion has taken place more than four million years ago that any trace would be erased by the force of the nature which disagrees with the viewpoint of the reading.

Then the professor goes on to maintian that the moon formed from the space rock that the high temperature caused by the movement would actually results the water evaporating.Thus there is no water on moon is not surprising. This point contradicts with the reading which claims that the moon should contian water because if the moon came from parts of the earth, there must be some similar material compostion.

Finally, the professor states that  the density of the moon is consistent with the surface of the earth for the reason that it is the surface part of the earth constitutes the moon not the core, which quite excellence proves the giant-impact is true. This viewpoint also casts doubt on the reading.

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我也是看了你的综合才发现自己看反了，reading criticizes the theory and lecture questions this citicizes,类似于双重否定取反.看了你的写作three points and evidences非常到位,肯定是good级别。但其中use of English that is occasionally ungrammatical and unclear.
Then the professor goes on to maintian that if the moon formed from the space rock that (that删掉)the high temperature on the moon caused by the movement would actually results in the water evaporating(改为evaporation of water).Thus there is no water on moon is not surprising. This point contradicts with the reading which claims that the moon should contian water because if the moon came from parts of the earth, there must be some similar material compostion.

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11.4 College or university, 是否要开更难更有挑战性的课，同意还是不同意（2008.1.13 ）
我看到最近的独立题目不是 机经所以就没写， 我打算从08年的机井开始 写。有意愿的一起加入？

How to fully use education resources for college students is a vogue question that has been discussed for decades. And now there are some controversial issues on whether college curriculum should contain difficult and challenging subjects. As for me I firmly contend that college should choose some special tough classes for students and the reasons go as follows.

To begin with, there are some intelligent students in class that only special subjects can meet their needs. For difficult or complex subjects are suitable for quite excellent students to advance their studies and if they indulge into those areas may bring surprising outcome. However, if those sorts of students compelled to study on the criterion of common students, they will feel boring and even lose themselves in the end. A case in point is that one of my college friends is highly interested in space physics, and during his high school he participated in a national model design competition and finally got the first place. However, our courses are so fundamental that he had little interest on them. Gradually he became inspirited and behaved even worse than other companions. What a pity losing such a genius! In this sense, it is wise to provide some challenging classes to inspire exceptional students' potential.


Another equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that challenging subjects can develop students' creativity which will benefit their future development. Because challenging classes require students being familiar with lots of other fields' and then unify them together to undertake tasks. Taking my personal experience for instance, last summer I took part in a research group to find out the natural possible reasons that attribute to the air pollution of our city. It is such a intractable problem considering the knowledge one is supposed to acquainted with and the detail plan of this study to make. We discussed entirely one week and selected one plan from the hundred choices. After the whole month of study I benefited a lot like how to handle an emergency, how to consider a problem from a wide view as well as how to solve practical troubles. In short, challenging subject can make students more ingenious and Comprehensive.


In the final analysis, considering what has been discussed above. we can safely come to the conclusion that challenging classes in college can meet the needs of different students and can also enhance the  creativity of common students to better prepare for future. So I absolutely agree the suggestion that college curriculum should include challenging courses.

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综合 test 4

The lecture discusses the Tunguska explosion was due to a " swamp gas"  is not convincing which differs from the main idea in the reading.

First, the professor begins by pointing out that the lack of  fragments cannot fully prove the explosion wasn't the reason of asteriod exploding. For 19 years after the explosion, any traces would be destoryed by the force of nature. While the fragments found in the Canada was only two weeks after the meteoric explosion. The reading, in contrast, holds a different view, saying that if the explosion was resulted from the asteriod, something would be found like in Canada.

Then, the professor goes on to maintain that there was no crater becasue the asteriod can explode before hitting the ground that became into huge fireball.According to the author, however, the asteroid must caused a huge crater on land and the researchers cannot find one. Therefore, the lecture goes against what is presented in the reading.

Finally, the professor states that if the explosion was caused by the "swamp gas" the trees cannot find in one spot because there was no trace of single destrucation which challenges the standpoint made by the reading passage, which considers that based on the butterfly pattern of trees knocked sideways, it was the "swarp gas" bring the explosion

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11.5 日 独立 In some high schools and universities, the students have group works, giving the members of a group the same grade(credit),do you think it can evaluate the students?5


whether it is acceptable to give the same mark to group members is a prevalent topic undergoing serious debate. After pondering several aspects, I firmly contradict with such statement and the conspicuous reasons and instances go as follows.

To begin with, if everyone in the group get the same credit, there must be some bad influence on the whole group. Since any member in the team can get the equal payment then someone who are not studious enough will probably behave absenteeism or refuse to work on time. Those actions will absolutely delay the work process and decline the productivity. My high school classmate, Jerry, studying in Montana University, complained to me last month one of his partner didn't do any study work which would be graded the same as him. And almost all the job was done by him that no matter how hard he worked he cannot meet the deadline. So it is not wise to make the team member get the equivalent award for its potential problem that may bring up.


Another equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that students achieve the same grade in a team is unfair . As it known to all, the responsibilities varied in a project that different positions acquire different people to take on. Thus if each one get an identical mark in a project, it is unfair for those who handle difficult and intractable sections. Persuasive instances refute this point are Apple and Carrefour, both of which have highly manifest evaluation system on the praise for workers. The payment is according to the employees' performances and the specific parts they do in a group. Apparently it is such a harmonious competition atmosphere that virtually results their success. And any group fail to realize this point will suffer serious outcome.



Finally, I want to mention that such evaluation can bring untoward influences for students' future development. For at school they get used to get the same grade in a group, after graduation they might likewise behave on job, being absente or reluctant to do extra work that doubtless would keep them away from success.

In brief, after the forgoing discussion, we can safely come to the conclusion that to give the same mark to students in a group is actually against with the spirit of teamwork and can cause the decrease of efficiency of the team, unfair award as well as the untoward outcome for students future study and work. So I totally disagree taking such way to evaluate students.

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没看到你11、4的作文，翻了下帖子才发现还有回复这一说。寄托咋都米有提醒呢？
我不太记得之前的那篇是写啥的了，看了下你回的例子，还是不够具体。我以前也喜欢写抽象的话的，看着这篇帖子深深领悟ets所谓细节的要求以及一个作文帝的成长。希望对你有帮助。链接贴这里了。http://bbs.taisha.org/thread-1352715-1-4.html

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11.5 日 独立 In some high schools and universities, the students have group works, giving the members of a group the same grade(credit),do you think it can evaluate the students?

whether it is acceptable to give the same mark to group members is a prevalent topic undergoing serious debate. After pondering several aspects, I firmly contradict with such statement and the conspicuous reasons and instances go as follows.

To begin with, if everyone in the group get the same credit, there must be some bad influences on the whole group. Since any member in the team can get the equal payment then someone who are not studious enough will probably behave absenteeism or refuse to work on time. Those actions will absolutely delay the work process and decline the productivity. My high school classmate, Jerry, studying in Montana University, complained to me last month one of his partner didn't do any study work which would be graded the same as him. And almost all the job was done by him that no matter how hard he worked he cannot meet the deadline. So it is not wise to make the team member get the equivalent award for its potential problem that may  bring up.(be brought up)

Another equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that students achieve the same grade in a team is unfair . As it known to all, the responsibilities varied in a project that different positions acquire different people to take on. Thus if each one get an identical mark in a project, it is unfair for those who handle difficult and intractable sections. Persuasive instances refute this point are Apple and Carrefour, both of which have highly manifest evaluation system on the praise for workers. The payment is according to the employees' performances and the specific parts they do in a group. Apparently it is such a harmonious competition atmosphere that virtually results their success. And any group fail to realize this point will suffer serious outcome.

Finally, I want to mention that such evaluation can bring untoward influences for students' future development. For at school they get used to get the same grade in a group, after graduation they might likewise behave on job, being absente or reluctant to do extra work that doubtless would keep them away from success.

In brief, after the forgoing discussion, we can safely come to the conclusion that to give the same mark to students in a group is actually against with the spirit of teamwork and can cause the decrease of efficiency of the team, unfair award as well as the untoward outcome for students future study and work. So I totally disagree taking such way to evaluate students.

呃，是我不认真么……没有挑出什么大的毛病吧。语言结构够很好。提点小建议吧。就是虽然有例子，但是感觉例子也很泛泛，能再detail一些就好了。

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写的不错，有些小错误，总体词汇量很大，句式也很灵活值得学习。
whether it is acceptable to give the same mark to group members is a prevalent topic undergoing serious debate. After pondering several aspects, I firmly contradict with such statement and the conspicuous reasons and instances go as follows.0 ~! S3 z# |' a+ C
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To begin with, if everyone in the group get the same credit, there must be some bad influence on the whole group. Since any member in the team can get the equal payment then someone who are not studious enough will probably behave absenteeism or refuse to work on time. Those actions will absolutely delay the work process and decline the productivity. My high school classmate, Jerry, studying in Montana University, complained to me last month one of his partner didn't do any study work which would be graded the same as him. And almost all the job was done by him that no matter how hard he worked he cannot meet the deadline. So it is not wise to make the team member get the equivalent award for its potential problem that may bring up.- C' y! L; ~1 j1 L8 X- Z: a
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kAnother equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that students achieve the same grade in a team is unfair . As it known to all, the responsibilities varied in a project that different positions acquire different people to take on. Thus if each one get an identical mark in a project, it is unfair for those who handle difficult and intractable sections. Persuasive instances refute this point are Apple and Carrefour, both of which have highly manifest evaluation system on the praise for workers. The payment is according to the employees' performances and the specific parts they do in a group. Apparently it is such a harmonious competition atmosphere that virtually results their success. And any group fail to realize this point will suffer serious outcome.
OFinally, I want to mention that such evaluation can bring untoward influences for students' future development. For at school they get used to getting the same grade in a group, after graduation they might likewise(这个词好像一般都不放在句子的中间)) behave on job, being absente or reluctant to do extra work that（这个前后是什么关系呢） doubtless would keep them away from success. ) W. A9 u8 q7 x9 j$ q: X


In brief, after the forgoing discussion, we can safely come to the conclusion that to give the same mark to students in a group is actually against with the spirit of teamwork （你前面的观点有表达这个意思吗？）and can cause the decrease of efficiency of the team, unfair award as well as the untoward outcome for students future study and work. So I totally disagree taking （我怎么觉得是用to do ）such way to evaluate students.
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34# HYPS2011 我真的指不出什么错误来，综合写作我很摸不到头脑，并且这个的听力也没听太清楚。你的文章成为了我的范文，我只能这么说，不好意思没有评出什么来。因为在我现在的综合写作能力来看，你写的很不错~

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综合：test 5

The lecture discusses people's doubt on the prescribed burning is invalid which differs from the main idea in the reading.

First, the professor begins by pointing out that fire is a powerful force of nature that prescribed burning can not only speed up the process of decay but also reduce ash. At the same time prescribed burning can bring some nutrients to the land.The reading, in constract , holds a different view, saying that prescribed burning causes serious air pollution and plays a role in global warming.

Then, the professor goes on to maintain that all the workers received training on  when, where, and how to burn that they can behave safely and under ecological goals, contradicting what is stated in the reading passage that prescribed fire is unpredictable and dangerous for there are lots of uncertain issues.Therefore, the lecture goes against what is presented in the reading.

Finally , the professor states that the cost of prescribed burning is relatively small compared to the loss of the home and family that fire resulted. Sometimes the loss of the fire is 10 times higher than the fee of  prescribed burning, which also challenges the standpoint made by the author who says that varied size and nature of the burn determines the cost ranging from $10 to $1,000 per hectare that is so expensive.

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11.7 独立写作making decisions on our own or having some else making decisions for us.(08.2.2)


When concerning some important issues in life we need to choose which road to go forward. Depends on different personalities, life values, and background, people's opinions are varied on whether making decisions on our own or having someone else making for us. As for me I am in favor of people making decisions by themselves and the substantial reasons go as follows.

To begin with, the first reason why I advocate making decisions on our own ascribes the sake that we are the person who most familiar with the situations when confronted by choices. Other people even family members or good friends may not know us well. Examples as such are numerous. For instance, when I have to choose a major for my college study. My mother and father insisted on me learning Internet science with the expectation for my future job. My best friend, Jerry suggested me choose chemistry because I did quite well in chemistry learning. However, Internet science might be an excellent choice for finding a decent job after four years study and I can grasp chemistry with ease. The most important for me is that I am infatuated in biology science and I always believe that interest is the best tutor not only on school study but also concerning on the whole life journey. And I chose the biology in the end. Thus, it is wise for us making decisions by our own hand.


Another equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that most decisions made by ourselves can motive us struggle hard. And a recent research published in human development confirmed this point. In this study two groups of students, for age 12-17, were compelled to accomplish a same task. One group was guided by a professional teacher helping them to decide on every tiny step during the process. While the other group of students only being provided necessary articles. The result of this study shows that students making their own decisions on how to finish the task behave more studious and higher efficiency. When asked about those children why they were quite different from other ones they all pointed out that there seemed more responsibilities and pressure inspiring them work harder than before. Similarly, in my own life I always perform better on particular things I determined for myself. Most obviously, people's own decisions usually can bring striking influence to benefit progress thus it is perfect for making decisions on our own.


However, we have to admit that sometimes others’ suggestions are helpful and necessary. For sometimes they view the same matter from a different aspect that may draw different conclusions. If we happen to come across some intractable or paradox decisions, we should ask others' help or advices on how to make decisions.


In the final analysis, after discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that considering we know the decisions deeper than others and the impetus that making decisions on our own may bring to us. I totally agree that people make decisions by themselves rather than having someone make decisions for us.

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The lecture discusses people's (reading passage’s) doubt on the prescribed burning is invalid which differs from the main idea in the reading. (这句话两个谓语)

First, the professor begins by pointing out that fire is a powerful force of nature that prescribed burning can not only speed up the process of decay but also reduce ash. At the same time， prescribed burning can bring some nutrients（nutrition） to the land. The reading, in contrast , holds a different view, saying that prescribed burning causes serious air pollution and plays a role in global warming.$ S9 P- S; T* O; I1 f9 j$ k

Then, the professor goes on to maintain that all the workers received training on  when, where, and how to burn that they can behave safely and under ecological goals, contradicting what is stated in the reading passage that prescribed fire is unpredictable and dangerous for there are lots of uncertain issues. Therefore, the lecture goes against what is presented in the reading.' X- ~' n7 f" U: W7 v1 w% m, e

Finally , the professor states that the cost of prescribed burning is relatively small compared to the loss of the home and family that fire resulted. Sometimes the loss of the fire is 10 times higher than the fee of  prescribed burning, which also challenges the standpoint made by the author who says that varied size and nature of the burn determines the cost ranging from $10 to $1,000 per hectare that is so expensive.

写的不错，听到的内容很全，看来我遗漏了很多！

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11.7 独立写作making decisions on our own or having some else making decisions for us.(08.2.2)

话说你又写的题不一样啊
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When concerning some important issues in life we need to choose which road to go forward. Depends on different personalities, life values, and background, people's opinions are varied on whether making decisions on our own or having someone else making for us. As for me I am in favor of people making decisions by themselves and the substantial reasons go as follows.

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To begin with, the first reason why I advocate making decisions on our own ascribes the sake觉得这个太罗嗦了。像在凑字数哇 that we are the person who （are） most familiar with the situations when confronted by（confronting用主动） choices. Other people even family members or good friends may not know us well. Examples as such are numerous. For instance, when I have to choose a major for my college study. My mother and father insisted on me learning Internet science with the expectation for my future job. My best friend, Jerry suggested me choose chemistry because I did quite well in chemistry learning. However, Internet science might be an excellent choice for finding a decent job after four years study and I can grasp chemistry with ease. The most important for me is that I am infatuated in biology science and I always believe that interest is the best tutor not only on school study but also concerning on the whole life journey. And I chose the biology in the end. Thus, it is wise for us making decisions by our own hand./ . |! z5 \! `" w3 Y

Another equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in（感觉同上段开头。看下第二版OG第259面。）the fact that most decisions made by ourselves can motive us struggle hard（比较级）. And a recent research published in human development confirmed this point. In this study two groups of students, for age 12-17, were compelled to accomplish a same task. One group was guided by a professional teacher helping them to（去掉） decide on every tiny step during the process. While the other group of students only being provided necessary articles. The result of this study shows that students making their own decisions on how to finish the task behave more studious and higher efficiency. When asked about those children why they were quite different from other ones，they all pointed out that there seemed more responsibilities and pressure inspiring them我没有查到搭配，貌似这里要加介词work harder than before. Similarly, in my own life I always perform better on particular things I determined for（根据题目用法by的意思似乎好些。虽然用for也说得通） myself. Most obviously, people's own decisions usually can bring striking influence to benefit progress应该还是说得通的，但是这个搭配太诡异了 thus it is perfect for making decisions on our own.# k: b5 _0 Q0 p

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However, we have to admit that sometimes others’ suggestions are helpful and necessary. For sometimes they view the same matter from a different aspect that may draw different conclusions. If we happen to come across some intractable or paradox decisions, we should ask others' help or advices on how to make decisions.个人觉得其实这一段让步地很没有必要，反正不是写绝对性观点，命题本身就米有否定他人意见的作用。还有关键你有时间写也就罢了，觉得你貌似写了很多的样子，不知道超时间没有，这一段没时间就算了。



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In the final analysis, after discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that considering we know the decisions deeper than others and the impetus that making decisions on our own may bring to us. I totally agree that people make decisions by themselves rather than having someone make decisions for us.

个人觉得观点论证都米有问题，表达过于纠结了。不知道你看了没上次发给你的那个连接。写的纠结了改卷老师看着也要死啊~~

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:)记得帮我改下吧~~有两篇都米有帮我改呢~~

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When concerning some important issues in life we need to choose which road to go forward. Depends--depending on different personalities, life values, and background, people's opinions are varied on whether making decisions on our own or having someone else making for us. As for me I am in favor of people making decisions by themselves and the substantial reasons go as follows

To begin with, the first reason why I advocate making-->that make decisions on our own ascribes the sake that we are the person who most familiar with the situations when confronted by choices. 一般不建议首句写这么长. 比较繁琐. Other people even family members or good friends may not know us well. Examples as such are numerous. For instance, when I have to choose a major for my college study. My 合成从句 mother and father insisted on me-->adviced me to learn learning Internet science??啥??没见过 with the expectation for my future job. My best friend, Jerry suggested me choose chemistry because I did quite well in chemistry learning. However, Internet science might be an excellent choice for finding a decent job after four years study and I can grasp chemistry with ease.这个放这里有点突然. 可以单独另起一句 The most important (thing) for me is that I am infatuated in biology science and I always believe that interest is the best tutor not only on school study but also concerning on the whole life journey. And I chose the biology in the end. Thus, it is wise for us making decisions by our own hand. 例子不错的

Another equally important factor accounting for my propensity lies in the fact that most decisions made by ourselves can motive us(to)句子一长谓语就多了我觉得你都认为有点乱吧.. struggle hard. And a recent research published in human development confirmed this point.头重脚轻. the research published recently comfirms that point. In this study two groups of students, for age 12-17-->a group of teenagers, were compelled to accomplish a same task. One group was guided by a professional teacher helping-->to help them to decide on every tiny step during the process. While the other group of students only being provided necessary articles.没有谓语. 而且不知道啥意思这句子. The result of this study shows that students making their own decisions on how to finish the task behave more studious and higher efficiency. When asked about those children why they were quite different from other ones they all pointed out that there seemed more responsibilities and pressure inspiring them work harder than before. Similarly, in my own life I always perform better on particular things I determined for myself. Most obviously, people's own decisions usually can bring striking influence to-->on benefit progress thus it is perfect for making decisions on our own.
这段语法错的多比较影响理解

wever, we have to admit that sometimes others’ suggestions are helpful and necessary. For sometimes they view the same matter from a different aspect that may draw different conclusions. If we meet happen to come across some intractable or paradox decisions, we should ask others' help or advices on how to make decisions.

In the final analysis, after-->with what discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that considering we know the decisions deeper than others and the impetus that making decisions on our own may bring to us....??? I totally agree that people make decisions by themselves rather than having someone make decisions for us.以前改过你几篇, 写的还不错.这个是限时写的么??错的地方较多, 很多话不需要说,显得累赘.句子也得调整