小弟憋了足足三个多小时的人生第一篇argument，求各位帮忙拍拍呀~~~

bensonseuUID: 2707369

鼓足勇气加上点好奇心，昨晚我终于憋完了人生的第一篇argument，看范文跟自己写真的不是一个味道啊。。。11月底机考，已似乎渐渐感到时间之仓促，废话就

不多说了，求各位好心人帮帮忙拍拍砖，狠狠地拍，我不怕疼的。。。小弟感激不尽，不尽感激啊。。。

45．The following appeared as an editorial in a wildlife journal.

"Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."

According to reports from the local hunters, it is seemingly that the number of the Arctic deer living in Canada’s arctic region is declining. Given the fact that the deer searches for food by travelling over ice from island to island during the course of a year and a coincidence that the recent world trends to be warming up, the author makes a conclusion that the deer population decline is the result of being able to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. After a close scrutiny of this argument, I find several logical flaws and unconvincing evidences in it.

First of all, based on the reports from the local hunters, the author holds the opinion that the deer population is declining. However, whether the reports are convincing is still open to doubt. It is entirely possible that the hunters assess the population of the deer depending on the number of the deer they hunt. As is known to all, animals have a natural ability that they can gradually adapt to habitat they live in. If it is this case, it is not impossible that the local deer have got the ability to get away from consistent hunting skills, which may add to the difficulties in hunting the deer for the hunters. Without providing more reliable evidences, I cannot be convinced that the deer population is really declining as the hunters put.

Even assuming the decline of the deer population, the author hastily relates the decrease with the coincidence of global warming trends. Apparently, the global warming trend, which is an average value, makes no indications of the local warming trend. It is quite possible that Canada’s arctic region’s climate is as usual or even turning colder recently while the world, as a whole, is warming up. The author fails to offer sufficient evidence to prove the local is also turning warmer.

Even if Canada’s arctic region typifies the whole world phenomenon and the frozen sea becomes melting, the arguer supplies no direct evidence to support this assumption that it is the loss of age-old migration patterns that make the deer number decrease. Unrestrained hunting, polluted air and a lack of food resource, which are all possible reasons to explain the decline, are all neglected by the author. Without ruling out all these possibilities, the author cannot convince me that the deer are killed by the warmer climate alone or to a large degree.

In summary, in order to enhance the editorial’s reliability, the author needs to supply more evidences to prove the decline of the deer population and the trends of the local warming. To persuade me that it is the result of the deer being unable to continue their age-old food searching patterns that makes the decrease, the author should undertake a further survey, instead of an unjustifiable coincidence, to ensure the causal relationship between them.

lazyboyUID: 2314767

author makes a conclusion that the deer population decline is the result of being able to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea是being unable吧？然后我觉得第二个理由稍微有点牵强，别的我也说不出什么来了，呵呵，我也还么考

bensonseuUID: 2707369

哦。。。好低级的错误哦。。。
谢谢啦~~~好人会有好报的。。。:)
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