【草莓酱拌饭组】Issue集 by StupidSteve囧

stupidsteveUID: 2704849

首先，是补上的一篇Issue 7,憋了45min草草写就的，大家狠拍:curse: 别客气:lol～～～
先上文章，提纲在后面


TOPIC:ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing recordof contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentationthan written records."
WORDS:631        TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2009-11-5 10:31:33

I concede the speaker's opinion that sometimes video camera indeed provide a much more accurate and convincing record compared with written records in some fields where abstract factors could hardly be observed. However, it doesn't mean that video camera turns to be a more important form of documentation than written records. At the same time, I don't think accurate and convincing should be the only criteria when valuing a documentation form's efficiency. Thus we could hardly draw a conclusion on which one is more important since each of them cannot be easily replaced by another.


There're several reasons that I partly agree to the speaker's opinion that, in somefields, video camera does be more accurate and convincing than a written record. People would prefer to enjoy a tiny video clip on the Olympics 100-meter race rather than reading several lines' report of the same topic. Since human beings could easily capture visual motions without a profound analyzing, thus within an aspect who mainly requires the documentation to record a simple and physical process, e.g. a dash, video clips provided by a video camera could re-perform the details of the physical process more objectively than a written record.      


However,I am afraid whether the speaker has evidence sounding enough to convince me with his conclusion that video camera is a more important for documenting than written records because of the reasons above.


First of all, I was wondering whether it's proper for us to value a documentation form only concerning its accuracy, or, does a documentation sole effectiveness lies in showing accurate and convincing factors? I think a vital purpose of a documentation is to establish the abstract circumstances or situations of a event or process at the same time recording the superficial accurately. We may watch TV news to acquire what's happening today while we finally choose reading to know how it happens. Since a video camera cannot provide anything except an accurate or convincing superficial visual record, which could be hardly entitled effective by these readers who are hungry for an abstract but profound analyze or insider details provided by the documentation form.   


Furthermore, even if the speaker's criterion on judging a documentation form was accepted, written records are still more effective than a video camera in certain fields. On one hand, since the recording of a video camera, mainly a mechanic process,are still facing technical obstacles because it does require a proper situation to record an event. We cannot imagine how could a photographer, no matter how experienced, offering high quality video clips on an event or process, which might easily be disturbed by lights, in a pretty dark night. While, if a reporter knows the same insider process, s/he could definitely write them down next morning and make the process known by the public easily. On the other hand, video clips might also offense the privacy which a written record could effectively avoid. To illustrate: the US court abandons any video camera when a early youth sentence is proceeding, since even several pictures could betray a person’s privacy and ruin his or her future easily, while a reporter could choose appreciate rhetoric,e.g. Alias, to report the court and protecting privacy at the same time. For the reasons above, written records could be more effective and important than asingle video camera in certain fields.   


To sum up, there's no doubt that video camera could be more accurate and convincing than writtenrecords sometimes, however, in other fields, written record plays a vital role since its effectiveness, to which accuracy could hardly run as the only criterion to value, is above a video camera's. Since their advantages in different aspects cannot be replaced by another, we could hardly draw a conclusion on which one is more important.   




提纲：
p1：提取各段首句 主线：两者的重要性并不针对同一方面，难以说明谁更重要
p2:  承认在记录 单纯强调简单物理过程 事件时，V更加精确-->人类天生易于无脑接受画面信息  e.g.百米冲刺（事后发现酱饭组的 奶男兄 也列举此例...真是...okay,我承认我思想确实很大众化...:L）
p3:  但是，作者不能由此得出结论说V>W
p4:  首先质疑 把精确与否 看作衡量记录手段的唯一标准是否合适-->抽象的内在过程vs.精确直观的表象
p5:  同时，让步阐述 V受到限制  kw1.技术受限 e.g.如何在漆黑的夜晚记录一个 存在光干扰量的过程？    kw2.隐私问题 V的精准是以牺牲隐私为代价       的，e.g.美国法庭审判未成年罪犯     而以上两个限制对W不存在威胁
p6:  p1的改写


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cinderella1016UID: 2666652

单词分隔还是再改改吧~~

乱成一团了~~

stupidsteveUID: 2704849

2# cinderella1016
已经修改啦：）

dairymanUID: 2683905

百米冲刺（事后发现酱饭组的 奶男兄 也列举此例...真是...okay,我承认我思想确实很大众化...

事实上我不只是举了这个例子……这种大众例子写起来快
草莓mm说了，重点解释论述importance的评判标准啊，你的标准呢？

NaperyUID: 2710990

根据小组安排，我来给S平方改作文。
第一次给别人改。。。。嘿嘿。。。。偶不会手下留情的。。。。哼哼。。。。。

I concede the speaker's opinion that sometimes video camera indeed provide a much more accurate and convincing record compared with written records in some fields where abstract factors could hardly be observed. However, it doesn't mean that video camera turns to be a more important form of documentation than written records. At the same time, I don't think accurate and convincing should be the only criteria when valuing a documentation form's efficiency. Thus we could hardly draw a conclusion on which one is more important since each of them cannot be easily replaced by another.

第一个一句好长了啊，读的快断气了，稍微断下句子好了。。。

Compared with written records，I concede the speaker's opinion that sometimes video camera， in some fields where abstract factors could hardly be observed[加条件限制，不错]，indeed provide a much more accurate and convincing record.

valuing a documentation form's efficiency 这貌似是你定义的important的标准。先标注一下。

观点表达的很明确，很清楚的点出了自己的立场。。。。
不过北美味儿很重啊。。。。
感觉有点像是ARGUMENT了。。。
我个人觉得，还是不用模板的好。。感觉很生硬。。。

先发第一段。。。

NaperyUID: 2710990

呃 偶下午训练 困了 先休息一下

完了就给你接着改。。。。