第二次作业 by moon

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题目：ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
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   The speaker asserts that the groups of people play essential roles in history as well as the individuals. I agree with this assertion. However, we should not place too much emphasis on individuals.
    In the first place,the famous few made the most significant events and trends. For example, the first American president Gorge Washington is the most greatest leader in the United States. His role in gaining independence for the American colonies and unifing them under the new federal government can not be overestimated. Beacuse what he did for the country, he got the title of "Father of His Country". Aother great president is Thomas Jefferson who is the author of Declaration of Independence. He was also one of the most briliant individuals in history who made the most significant events in history.
    However, besides these great individuals in history, there are groups of ordinary people who can make the events in history possible. Usually it is the great leaders who give the general outline to groups of people. Then groups of people put the great ideas into actions.  Without groups of people, it seems impossble to realize the great ideas.
     In the second place, is it good to place too much emphasize on individuals? I don't think it is good. If we put too much emphasis on individuals, maybe it will cause too much wide public concern which will play an unfavorable influence on individuals. The success of many scientists show this, like Newton, Edison, Curie. If they got too much emphasis and too much concern from the public, can they have the scientific success in history? Maybe the wide public concern distracted them so much that they could not concentrate on their research.
   In sum, the study of history need to have a clear view about individuals and groups of people. Admittedly individuals play essential roles in history, however, we should not emphasis its role so much. Meanwhile, we should emphasis the role of groups of people. It is wise to keep the balance role between individuals and groups of people so that they can enhance the development of history.
   
   
   
  

题目：ARGUMENT97 - The following appeared in a memo from the manager of television station KICK.
"A nationwide survey reveals that a sizeable majority of men would like to see additional sports programs on television. After television station WACK increased its sports broadcasts, its share of the television audience in its viewing area almost doubled. To gain a larger audience share in our area, and thus increase company profits, KICK should also revise its broadcast schedule to include more sports coverage."
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   The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By based on a nationwide survey and after WACK incresed its sports broadcasts, its audience has doubled. It seems like reasonable. However, should Kick also revise its broadcast schedule to have more sports coverage? I don't think the manager consider other alternatives in KICK.
  First, the arguer fails to give the evidence the why the number of audiences who watch the sports programs has been doulbed. Maybe there are also lots of audience who are watching their favorite programs at the same time instead of only the sports programs. Also it is possible that more people have more time to watch TV at that time while there broadcasts the sports program. Or maybe there is a big sports event on TV so they watch WACK.
  Second, the arguer asserts that KICK should add more sports programs. However, he didn't take into account other audiences who are not interested in sports programs. According to different ages, the need of audiences is different. For example, old people enjoy operas more while kids enjoy cartoons more. Young people like fashion and entertainment programs. So if KICK only add more sports program, maybe it will have more audience who love sports, but meanwhile, it will lose lots of other kinds of audiences to lead to the decline of the station's profits.
    Third, even though Kick include more sports programs, is it necessary to revise broadcast schedule?It seems that the manager fails to consider the whole management of the station. There are lots of different programs in the station, maybe these programs can bring more profits to the station.
    In sum, the arguer need to consider more alternatives between these two stations.

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题目：ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：352          用时：00:42:57          日期：2009/12/14 20:39:38
   The speaker asserts that the groups of people play essential roles in history as well as the individuals. I agree with this assertion. However, we should not place too much emphasis on individuals.（这段话似乎会让人觉得作者审题有误，首先原题中强调的是人们群众的作用是很重要的，但是没有说一般人和伟人对于历史的推动作用是一样的，而且groups of people和individuals最好加有限定语，这样太笼统了，individuals特指的是那些为人。）
    In the first place,the famous few made the most significant events and trends.
（本段的主题句背离通篇的中心思想，既然通篇的观点是支持题目的观点，也就是说The most significant events and trends in history were made by groups of people whose identities have been forgotten.那么这段再说……是由少有名人做的，就是游离于通篇的观点之外了，虽然让步在很多文章中是有必要的，但是还是要注意主题句的写法）For example, the first American president Gorge Washington is the most greatest leader in the United States. His role in gaining independence for the American colonies and unifing them under the new federal government can not be overestimated. Beacuse what he did for the country, he got the title of "Father of His Country". Aother great president is Thomas Jefferson who is the author of Declaration of Independence. He was also one of the most briliant individuals in history who made the most significant events in history.
    However, besides these great individuals in history, there are groups of ordinary people who can make the events in history possible. Usually it is the great leaders who give the general outline to groups of people. （给人感觉还是再说那些少数leaders的作用）Then groups of people put the great ideas into actions.  Without groups of people, it seems impossble to realize the great ideas.
     In the second place, is it good to place too much emphasize on individuals? I don't think it is good.If we put too much emphasis on individuals, maybe it will cause too much wide public concern which will play an unfavorable influence on individuals. The success of many scientists show this, like Newton, Edison, Curie. If they got too much emphasis and too much concern from the public, can they have the scientific success in history? Maybe the wide public concern distracted them so much that they could not concentrate on their research. （个人理解，既然我们是今人谈历史，那么我们会不会妨碍古人的研究？）
   In sum, the study of history need to have a clear view about individuals and groups of people. Admittedly individuals play essential roles in history, however, we should not emphasis its role so much. Meanwhile, we should emphasis the role of groups of people. It is wise to keep the balance role between individuals and groups of people so that they can enhance the development of history.
    给人感觉文章没有在很好的论证平常人在历史上起到的作用~~~

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The argument is well-presented, but not thoroughly well-reasoned. By based on（Based on） a nationwide survey and after WACK incresed its sports broadcasts, its audience has doubled. It seems like reasonable.(前面已经点出not thortoughly well-reasoned了，这句直接点出speaker的论据有问题就可以了) However, should Kick also revise its broadcast schedule to have more sports coverage? I don't think the manager consider other alternatives in KICK.
  First, the arguer fails to give the evidence the why the number of audiences （audience）who watch the sports programs has been doulbed. (似乎不太严谨，原题是说share of audience翻倍了，没有说是看sports programs的观众翻倍了)Maybe there are also lots of audience who are watching their favorite programs at the same time instead of only the sports programs. Also it is possible that more people have more time to watch TV at that time while there broadcasts the sports program. Or maybe there is a big sports event on TV so they watch WACK.
  Second, the arguer asserts that KICK should add more sports programs. （最好在句首就点出这段到底要讲什么，也就是明确在哪方面反驳speaker的观点）However, he didn't take into account other audiences who are not interested in sports programs. According to different ages, the need of audiences is different. For example, old people enjoy operas more while kids enjoy cartoons more. Young people like fashion and entertainment programs. So if KICK only add more sports program, maybe it will have more audience who love sports, but meanwhile, it will lose lots of other kinds of audiences to lead to the decline of the station's profits.
    Third, even though Kick include more sports programs, is it necessary to revise broadcast schedule?It seems that the manager fails to consider the whole management of the station. There are lots of different programs in the station, maybe these programs can bring more profits to the station.
In sum, the arguer need to consider more alternatives(首段就出现了alternatives,是要表达两家电视台的不同吗？alternatives 似乎没有不同的意思？) between these two stations.