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    對人們的生活而言，電話影響大還是電視影響大.

Undoubtedly, telephones serve as a means to communicate with whomever one likes to talk to, as long as he remembers the other’s phone numbers. However, the advent of televisions as a visible and audible medium in modern society, has changed the way people speaking, acting and living, thus impacting the mass far more than the one of phones.

Initially, provided with vivid pictures and authentic sounds, the information of news and shows on TV has never been so trustworthy and attractive than today. Television news are forever telling audiences the true story with memorable sights or even witness descriptions, usually about the scene, compared with the tiredness and boredom of reading words printed and the doubt of unreliable but advanced Internet news. In addition, a variety of well-edited entertainment shows, full of superstars, animals, and unbelievable magic, never fail to arouse laughter and interests among viewers.

Moreover, when family and friends are accustomed to comment on last nights' shows, televisions definitely penetrate into the daily life and change the lifestyle. It is the family-together TV time that drives people to faster the pace to home, to gulp up the dinner and to rush to finish the rest of the homework and housework. It is also nothing but the television topics that attract strangers exchanging their opinions and argue heatedly much like old friends. Again, it is the televisions that guide the outsiders to buy a professional washing machine and cook a delicious dinner.

What is equally crucial for the point is that the changing culture is increasingly marked by the brand, TV. As the term "television culture" is not newly invented, only those bookworms do not understand what American Idol is. With the phenomena that the more excellent TV shows are, the more ads insert, the slogan of the TV ads influence the consumers more than the purchasing habits. Once a melodic advertisement song comes out, it is the only song that everybody involuntarily remembers and sings. Odd enough, the more disgusting they are, the more quickly audiences learn the song by heart and remember the brand.

Conclusively, while telephones only convey ones' voices quickly, TVs transmit the information, ideas and concepts in a visible and audible way, even unconsciously, possessing a dramatic influence on the public, as well as the culture.

mpromanusUID: 2565872

Undoubtedly, telephonesserve as a means to communicate with whomever one likes to talk to, aslong as he remembers the other’s phone numbers. However, the advent oftelevisions ('Television' as 'the mass communication medium' is not countable. 'Televisions' is actually a short form of 'television sets'. This is similar to the difference between 电视 and 电视机, while interestingly 电视 could also mean both.)as a visible and audible medium in the modern society, haschanged the way people speaking, acting and liveing, thus impacting themass far more than the one of phones do (I think your intended comparison is between 'the advent of TV' vs. 'the advent of telephones', that's why you used 'the one of..'. But since 'the advent' is so far away, your reader would likely associate your comparison with the nearest reasonable entity - in this case the verb 'impact', and that's why I've changed the phrase to 'do'. Take note that this is not saying you're wrong. It's just difficult to understand what's being compared when the target is too far away. Humans by nature can only hold about 6-8 words in their memory cache at one time, so in order to make you expressions clear, you'll need to keep ideas close to each other if you intend them to be associated. The same principle goes with using pronouns and making comparisons.).

Initially (This word means 'in the beginning' rather than 'first', signalling a sequence in time or space, rather than a sequence in the order of things. I'd suggest a more generic 'to begin with'), provided with vivid pictures and authentic sounds, theinformation of (I'd suggest 'from'.) news and shows on TV has never been so trustworthy andattractive than today. Television news are forever telling audiencesthe true stories with memorable sights or even witness descriptions,usually about the scene (What scene?), compared with the tiredness and boredom ofreading printed words printed and the doubt of unreliable but advanced Internetnews (I'm not sure what you're trying to express here, because this basically reads 'the doubt of..Internet news', something I can't quite guess at.). In addition, a variety of well-edited entertainment shows, fullof superstars, animals, and unbelievable magic, never fail to arouselaughter and interests among viewers. (Yeah, but you're expected to compare this with TELEPHONES, not printed media or the Internet.)

Moreover, when families and friends are accustomed to commenting on lastnights' shows, televisions definitely penetrates into the daily life andchange the lifestyle. It is the family-together TV time that drivespeople to fasten their pace to home, to gulp up the dinner and to rush tofinish the rest (Normally you don't put two to + v. phrases right next to each other as it's very hard to read. And why must it be 'the rest'? Is there any particular issue you wish to stress on about 'the rest' of homework and housework? If not, this sentence would read cleaner if you take 'the rest' out. If you insist on keeping it, I'd suggest '..and to rush to the finish of remaining homeword and housework'. ) of the homework and housework. It is also nothing butthe television topics that attract strangers into exchanging their opinionsand arguing heatedly much like old friends. Again, it is the televisionsthat guide the outsiders (Judging from what you've written after this word, I'd suggest 'amateurs'. 'Oursiders' are people who are not 'inside'. They can be people who are not members of a group/organization, but more often are people who don't know the 'secrets' of the group/organization.) to buy a professional washing machine and cooka delicious dinner. (Again, you're not comparing this influence of TV with that of telephones. Without a comparison and a proper conclusion, you're creating an open-ended argument - one that anybody is free to refute. For example, one can easily argue that phones change people's lifestyle as much as TV does - e.g. the hurry home to tend to phone messages; the necessity of waiting for calls; the birth of telemarketing; the birth of an entire set of social etiquette on the topic of making effective, polite phone calls - it doesn't even need to be GOOD influence. Your writing therefore amounts to NOTHING.)

What is equally crucial for the point is that the changing culture isincreasingly marked by the brand, TV. As the term "television culture"is not newly invented, only those bookworms do not understand whatAmerican Idol is. (What does American Idol has to do with the invention of 'television culture'? Why must people know about American Idol because 'television culture' is not a new term? You're making a very absurd connection. It's as if saying people must all know about the different shapes of Italian pasta by now because noodle was invented some 4000 years ago!) With the phenomenon that, the more excellent TV showsare, the more ads inserted,
the slogans of the TV ads influence theconsumers more than on their purchasing habits. Once a melodic advertisementsong comes out, it is the only song that everybody involuntarilyremembers and sings. Oddly enough, the more disgusting? they are, the morequickly audiences learn the song by heart and remember the brand. (Do you have any solid example on this? Also, you're expected to compare TV with telephones. Without doing the due, you're basically not fulfilling your task.)

Conclusively (This more often means 'definitely' rather than 'in a manner of making a conclusion'.), while telephones only convey ones' voices quickly, TVstransmit the information, ideas and concepts in a visible and audibleway, even unconsciously, possessing a dramatic influence on the public,as well as the culture.

总结：

语法 - 没有很大的问题，偶尔会犯错误。需要注意的一个是介词，一个是定冠词the该用才用，不要什么地方都扔。。

词汇 - 很好，但是有些词用得不是很准确。

逻辑 - 嗯。议论文的议和论两个事情中，只能说你论得很好，但是议得不够，也就是中间大段光分析阐述，没意见没结论。。似乎你不是很明白这种作文应该怎么写，基本上说和八股文类似。。开头破题+立主论点，中间议论是每一段提出一个分论点，进行具体论述，然后指出分论点如何推得主论点，最后一段结尾简单总述主要分论点再次确认主论点结束。。说白了就是要紧密围绕在以题目和主论点为中心的中央周围。。你这篇的写法是立论电视比电话影响大之后就开始写电视影响多么多么大最后结论说电视比电话影响大，要证明A>B结果你证明了一通A有多么大而已，道理就像要是你光说自己有好多好多好多好多钱，不能证明你一定比你邻居有钱；你得说你有这么这么多数字的钱，你邻居有那么那么多数字的钱，大家一比才能证明你比你邻居有钱一样。。

jjooyyUID: 2704028

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When facing some big moments, people tend to have someone to discuss about, or rely on. Turning to families and friends for suggestions are universally accepted, while strangers' points may also be taken into account. However, are we truly too helpless or hesitant to decide by ourselves? The question is simple: we are merely looking for someone to assist us to get the answer.  

First of all, there is no one but ourselves that could clearly analyze the situation and make up our mind to select what really matters. During the process of discussing decisions, it is we ourselves that spend most of time explaining to others the current condition and the complex thoughts of our own. Also, it is our existing views and values that decide whether to take the advice and take a step further or not. By speaking to a variety of different people and denying all sorts of seemingly attractive options, the awareness of the choice we make emerges from the bottom of our heart. Frankly, it is only a matter of time to find the answer by our own, with a little help from acquaintances.

Moreover, referring to others might not be an optimal approach to the suitable decision, considering the complexity of people involved. No one is able to offer sound proposal as we ourselves are, derived from the fact that nobody virtually live our lives. And we never know whether they really propose for our good, regardless of their own interests. I myself, for instance, once had a tough time planning what to do after graduation. When suggestions arouse, to my surprise, few are conflict with the sake of their owners.

Last but not least, it really is less wise for investing time and energy to exchange ideas with others, instead of meditating thoroughly and prudently. Because of the time for the irrelative chitchats about recent news, the repeated illustration about the condition, and the unnoticeable vacancy before response, it is far more rush to make up the mind under considerable discussion. Supposing the time during which we require for opinions from others is rearranged for a second thought, the result would be more convincing to us.

To conclude, it is also advisable to decide on one's own, in view of the superiority in condition analysis and preference of our own to others, the complexity of people's values and views, and the wasted time for requiring for suggestions.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.9 r, y. O/ t  Y! |# o
- ^/ q3 h% `% R: ~9 L& OWhen facing some big moments, people tend to have someone to discuss about, or rely on. Turning to families and friends for suggestions are universally accepted, while strangers' points may also be taken into account. However, are we truly too helpless or hesitant to decide by ourselves? The question is simple: we are merely looking for someone to assist us to get the answer.  - D: p; c: `  B9 j0 ^8 d8 e
First of all, there is no one but ourselves that could clearly analyze the situation and make up our mind to select what really matters. During the process of discussing decisions, it is we ourselves that spend most of time explaining to others the current condition and the complex thoughts of our own. Also, it is our existing views and values that decide whether to take the advice and take a step further or not. By speaking to a variety of different people and denying all sorts of seemingly attractive options, the awareness of the choice we make emerges from the bottom of our heart. Frankly, it is only a matter of time to find the answer by our own, with a little help from acquaintances.
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; v6 @, |$ k) UMoreover, referring to others might not be an optimal approach to the suitable decision, considering the complexity of people involved. No one is able to offer a sound proposal as we ourselves are, derived from the fact that nobody virtually live our lives. And we never know whether they really propose for our good, regardless of their own interests. I myself, for instance, once had a tough time planning what to do after graduation. When suggestions arouse, to my surprise, few are conflict with the sake of their owners. ' C( k& A2 q( @5 {. l$ \! m1 K

1 I2 [/ B7 \( `5 s; TLast but not least, it really is less wise for investing time and energy to exchange ideas with others, instead of meditating thoroughly and prudently. Because of the time for the irrelative chitchats about recent news, the repeated illustration about the condition, and the unnoticeable vacancy before response, it is far more rush to make up the mind under considerable discussion. Supposing the time during which we require for opinions from others is re-arranged for a second thought, the result would be more convincing to us.7 X  z1 D4 f/ G2 A8 D! r

! c6 O5 T' R: F) @8 J. w* G; {. B- eTo conclude, it is also advisable to decide on one's own, in view of the superiority in condition analysis and preference of our own to others, the complexity of people's values and views, and the wasted time for requiring for suggestions.

可能俺水平有限, 没太能改出来什么语法和词汇的错误. 这个文章里面楼主挺喜欢用反身代词的,我觉得有点用的多;
对于主体的论证部分,我觉得楼主应该写的具体点.这个模式的作文应该是用具体的例子来支持论点的.你的例子我觉得偏抽象的论述比较多.
如果说的不对,咱们再切磋.:)

jjooyyUID: 2704028

As the growing focus on atmosphere pollution, water pollution, global warming, how to take effective measures to use less natural resources and to prevent contaminating environment is under heated debate. Although complex, great efforts could and should be made by every one that realizes the seriousness of environmental issues.



First of all, the great awareness of the essential role that environment problems play can degrade the complexity before other attempts come into being. We always take actions after careful consideration, especially for those which cost much energy or time to reach moral standards. Truly, when we know the ever increasing rate of icebergs melting that will threaten us to have a cozy and comfortable vacation at beach, we would love to turn the air conditioning temperature to 28 centigrade or higher in summer. And we are more likely to substitute paper bags for plastic ones, by the thought of plastic bags devastate the arable soil, leading to spread starvation.



Another reason that supports my viewpoint is that a little effort made by people can accumulate to influence the environment problems tremendously. As an old saying goes, "United we stand, divided we fall", those seemingly neglectful factors count when they come as a whole. One button-sized battery, for instance, can pollute nearly 600 thousand liter water, the same amount that one use for lifetime. Imagine how much clear water can be saved if the majority of people are aware of this astonishing fact. Another example is that one water tap left loose results in 1 up to 6 ton water per month, while 600 million loose taps left a moderate size of city billions of tons of clean water.



In conclusion, the solutions of the environment issues are related to everyone around the world. Only by acknowledging how severe the problems are and gradually taking steps further, can we finally reach the progress of environment problems.

字少了 先放上来 看到的筒子有没有什么建议啊？

daboraUID: 2574809

As the growing  好词focus on atmosphere pollution, water pollution, global warming, how to take effective measures to use less natural resources and to prevent contaminating 好词 environment is under heated debate. Although complex, great efforts could and should be made by every one that realizes the seriousness of environmental issues.楼主遣词造句的功底深厚,但是建议一开头明确表达自己的观点
First of all, the great awareness of the essential role that environment problems play can degrade the complexity before other attempts come into being. We always take actions after careful consideration, especially for those which cost much energy or time to reach moral standards. Truly, when we know the ever increasing rate of icebergs melting that will threaten us to have a cozy不错的词! and comfortable vacation at beach, we would love to turn the air conditioning temperature to 28 centigrade or higher in summer. And we are more likely to substitute paper bags for plastic ones 赞一个!, by the thought of plastic bags devastate the arable soil, leading to spread starvation:victory:.   这段的语法和词汇都是用的很好的,但是值得注意的是楼主还是没有揭开论证的面纱,而是坠入叙述事实的边缘,观点不清晰,论点和论证模糊
reason that supports my viewpoint is that a little effort made by people can accumulate to influence the environment problems tremendously. As an old saying goes, "United we stand, divided we fall", those seemingly neglectful factors count when they come as a whole. One button-sized battery, for instance, can pollute nearly 600 thousand liter water, the same amount that one use for lifetime. Imagine how much clear water can be saved if the majority of people are aware of this astonishing fact. Another example is that one water tap left loose results in 1 up to 6 ton water per month, while 600 million loose taps left a moderate size of city billions of tons of clean water.
In conclusion, the solutions of the environment issues are related to everyone around the world. Only by acknowledging how severe the problems are and gradually taking steps further, can we finally reach the progress of environment problems.
小小总结下,修辞和语法都不错,但是内容还是有问题,论证到底靠个人还是不靠个人来解决问题呢,没有给人明确的印象,总给人雾里看花的感觉,一开头大段的铺垫却不切入正题,等到终于亮出自己观点时突然发现文章快结束了,小小建议,仅供参考,呵呵!
by 明日萌

jjooyyUID: 2704028

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As the development of society and the improvement of the quality of life, people are free of doing what they could, instead of doing what they should. Therefore, the debate of whether it takes too much time for pleasure or enjoyment than expected is over heated. Personally, I tend to hold the belief that the entertainment time of people is never enough.

To start with, the advancement of science and technology has burdened the mass far more than 100 years ago. An average senior or junior high school student, for instance, are facing much more subjects, such as biologics and  computers, than 100 years ago, thus occupying their free time twice times than before or more. Employees are also supposed to undertake a growing number of tasks, since global economy forcing the competitions more fierce. Once new inventions come into being, more jobs remain to be done to promote and produce them into the potential markets. To be honest, the more achievement we attain, the more work to be done.
     
Another reason that is essential to the point is that the sense of unsatisfactory has pushed people to obtain more, obviously though hard working, which definitely costs some of their spare time. To some extent, satisfactory means less progressive, which may lead to failures or defeated. That is the situation that everyone would find it unpleasant, far more unpleasant than we spend less time entertaining ourselves. Consequently, the majority of people are prone to have less fun in life, in order to decrease the possibility of losing in the compet5tion and to realize their goal more efficiently.

Admittedly, the advancement of media and entertainment allows us to possess more fun, and sometimes to be addicted. There are forever movies, soap plays and talk shows making you laughing on TV. Computer and video games are designed to drive players to mad. Also, A variety of dangerous or safe sports are there challenging people. These are all modern society offer, which lure a minority of people to spend their valuable time "enjoying life".

Conclusively, based on the improvement of science and technology, although some spend more time than they can afford, for enjoyment, the majority of people are forced to accomplish increasing jobs, or to occupy more spare time driven by the sense of unsatisfactory.

jjooyyUID: 2704028

Compared with trains and bicycles, automobiles are the symbol of freedom and speed, attracting a tremendous scale of people. However, the popularity of cars also brings serious problems, such as air pollution and traffic jam, thus leading to a heated debate on whether or not the autos are beneficial for man recently. Personally, I tend to maintain the benefits they bring are far more than troubles they involve.

To start with, cars facilitate the majority of people by saving unnecessary time for travelling, with the development of economy and the improvement of people’s life quality. For example, we used to spend two hours or more to commute in big cities, by bus or subways. Then, as the use of automobiles, it only takes one hour or so to travel. The time saved is always most precious, such as for sleeping in the morning, or cooking at evening. Moreover, when travelling in long distance, we are free from the tight schedule to catch a train or an airplane. Now, we have enough time to pack bags, to greet strangers in different places, or even to stop constantly to collect souvenirs along the trip.

What is more, the convenience cars bring about is also notable. No matter it is a winter morning or a summer midnight, if we desire to reach to some place, just fill up the oil can and manipulate the driving wheel. By certain hours driving, can we reach to barely every corner of the country. No more night buses or sleeping trains are needed to take into consideration. Also, we will never suffering from travelling light, since how many pieces of luggage we are going to carry are all according to the space of our cars. Nor to mention the huge amount of boxes and bags that mobiles convey when going shopping or moving apartment.

Admittedly, due to the prevalence of autos on the roads, traffic jam is inevitable, forcing more efficient traffic system to be designed and more financial support to be offered. What is equally crucial is the seriousness of the atmosphere and noise pollution mobiles involve. The quality of life in cities decline dramatically since mobiles came to dominate the streets.


In conclusion, despite of the heavy traffic and the severances of the pollutions, because of the time saved and the convenience automobiles provide, the benefits that automobiles offer overweigh their weakness.


今天还是超时到1小时了， 我要加油，明明那么简单的题目

shirley072UID: 2712200

呵呵，我选题目的时候就从别人分好类的题目中各取一个，估计没有考虑到具体的，下次注意啦呵呵
晚上回来改：）

milixiaoUID: 2643068

As the development of society and the improvement of the quality of life, people are free of doing what they could, instead of doing what they should. Therefore, the debate of whether it takes too much time for pleasure or enjoyment than expected is over heated. Personally, I tend to hold the belief that the entertainment time of people is never enough.2 i- ^# u5 _3 T: W& x
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To start with, the advancement of science and technology has burdened the mass far more than 100 years ago. An average senior or junior high school student, for instance, are facing much more subjects, such as biologics and  computers, than 100 years ago, thus occupying their free time twice times than before or more(句子主语变了). Employees are also supposed to undertake a growing number of tasks, since global economy forcing the competitions more fierce. Once new inventions come into being, more jobs remain to be done(do jobs?) to promote and produce them into the potential markets. To be honest,(the truth is that) the more achievement we attain, the more work to be done.
     
Another reason that is essential to the point is that the sense of unsatisfactory has pushed people to obtain more, obviously though(through) hard working, which definitely costs some of their spare time(这句话有点别扭). To some extent, (being)satisfactory means less progressive, which may lead to failures or defeated(defeat). That is the situation that everyone would find it unpleasant, far more unpleasant than we spend less time entertaining ourselves. Consequently, the majority of people are prone to have less fun in life, in order to decrease the possibility of losing in the compet5tion and to realize their goal more efficiently.
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Admittedly, the advancement of media and entertainment allows us to possess more fun, and sometimes to be addicted. There are forever movies, soap plays and talk shows making you laughing(laugh) on TV. Computer and video games are designed to drive players to mad. Also, A variety of dangerous or safe sports are there challenging people. These are all modern society offer, which lure a minority of people to spend their valuable time "enjoying life".
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Conclusively, based on the improvement of science and technology, although some spend more time than they can afford, for enjoyment, the majority of people are forced to accomplish increasing jobs, or to occupy(spend) more spare time driven by the sense of unsatisfactory.
第一个观点感觉不太明确，其他是一些小错误。

shirley072UID: 2712200

哎，实在不好意思啊，刚刚回来。。。聚会。。且看了阿凡达。。。明天一定改:dizzy:

shirley072UID: 2712200

Compared with trains and bicycles, automobiles are the symbol of freedom and speed, attracting a tremendous scale of people. However, the popularity of cars also brings serious problems, such as air pollution and traffic jam, thus leading to a heated debate on whether or not the autos are beneficial for man recently. Personally, I tend to maintain the benefits they bring are far more than troubles they involve.% H, ~% t! q& G+ A5 o1 ?
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To start with, cars facilitate the majority of people by saving unnecessary time for travelling, with the development of economy and the improvement of people’s life quality
(这句话在后面有点脱离主干的嫌疑呵呵，是不是一般都喜欢放在句首哦，不然主语感觉就变成cars…with…). For example, we used to spend two hours or more to commute in big cities, by bus or subways. Then, as the use of automobiles, it only takes one hour or so to travel. The time saved is always most precious, such as for (better,觉得这里应该强调更多的睡眠时间之类的) sleeping in the morning, or cooking at evening. Moreover, when travelling in long distance, we are free from the tight schedule to catch a train or an airplane. Now, we have enough time to pack bags, to greet strangers
(relatives,是不是用亲戚举例更好些？) in different places, or even to stop constantly to collect souvenirs along the trip. ; `1 N9 i6 g. a. [
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What is more, the convenience cars bring about is also notable. No matter it is a winter morning or a summer midnight, if we desire to reach to some place
(if possible we are required to go to some particular place, 感觉说we desire有点奇怪，并且reach to place也貌似不太对，reach一般作及物动词用吧), just fill up the oil can and manipulate the driving wheel. By certain hours driving, can we reach to barely every corner of the country. No more night buses or sleeping trains are needed to take into consideration
(take into account也可以). Also, we will never suffering from travelling light
(?是指的轻装旅行么？为什么是suffer from呢？我觉得轻装旅行也非常舒服呢), since how many pieces of luggage we are going to carry are all according to the space of our cars. Nor to mention the huge amount of boxes and bags that mobiles convey when going shopping or moving apartment.1 S! i4 p: P, d+ E
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Admittedly, due to the prevalence of autos on the roads, traffic jam is inevitable, forcing more efficient traffic system to be designed and more financial support to be offered. What is equally crucial
(后面是不是少一个名词，problem之类的) is the seriousness of the atmosphere and noise pollution mobiles involve. The quality of life in cities decline dramatically since mobiles came to dominate the streets.# X3 t) Z4 H: U1 p! e' r4 F9 g
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In conclusion, despite of the heavy traffic and the severances of the pollutions, because of the time saved and the convenience automobiles provide, the benefits that automobiles offer overweigh their weakness.

学习到了很多用法，有些词汇很出彩嘿嘿，句子都很连贯。

第二个例子我觉得可以重点强调一下比如说当我们需要携带很多行李的时候，一般的交通工具就很不方便，因为我觉得从第一个例子moreover后面拜访各个地方的人和第二个例子前半段随便开车去哪里，实质上都是相似的内容呵呵，就是随便去哪里都可以，所以我觉得可以再具体细化一下。

jjooyyUID: 2704028

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Do you agree or disagree：Technology helps to make people's lives simpler or make people's lives more complicated.
彻底的一个小时的作文。。。

With the ever increasing trends of science and technology, the majority enjoy the convenience and speed provided by modern technology. On the other hand, many find themselves lost in a tremendous amount of electrical equipments. So, the discussion of whether hi-tech facilities really simplify our life has never been so heated than today. As for me, the complexity they bring about is more apparent.

First, the further technique advances, the more options it could offer, and the more hesitant one would be. People used to do some exercises and readings in their spare time, to entertain ourselves 100 years ago. However, one can hardly be satisfied by this simple life style nowadays, as wonderful TV programs and excellent websites are always available and accessible. How common it is for family members to fight for a set in certain period, with little time playing basketball together! Or how usual it is for friends to discuss about the latest movies or news instead of a popular book! Life is never simple with a great variety of temptations associated with modern technology.

What is more, another reason that also supports my viewpoint is that the continuous advent of inventions results in much energy and time to keep pace of them. One best illustration is the computer, which contains all sorts of softwares that need to be updated. Every day, at least one new version of antivirus softwares are coming out, and so are the viruses. Nor to mention new generations of hardware keeping dated every other year. Maybe the money invests in the new products is not our center concerns. More importantly, the precious time and energy that consumes is the one most valuable. We could have had some healthy and relaxing time by doing some housework with families and friends, rather than to take great effort to learn how to deal with household chore by new machines we purchase for a better living, or to fix them.  

Admittedly, at some level, modern hi-tech facilities do bring simplicity in our daily life. For instance, by typing into keywords and clicking, we can have easy access to a great deal of information related. Shopping is no longer a tired and time-consuming activity, with the prospect of television shopping and e-commercial.

In conclusion, not only does modern technology provide convenience and speed, it also offer a more complicated life, because it promotes more choices for the public, and demands more time and energy to follow.

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Do you agree or disagree：Technology helps to make people's lives simpler or make people's lives more complicated.
彻底的一个小时的作文。。。

    With the ever increasing trends of science and technology, the majority enjoy(s) the convenience and speed provided by modern technology.（这里可以拓展更好，加点背景材料，不如你可以说根据某个材料显示，百分之多少的人很喜欢或者不能离开什么什么） On the other hand, many （people）find themselves lost in a tremendous amount of electrical equipments. So, the discussion of whether hi-tech facilities really simplify our life has never been so heated than today. As for me, the complexity they bring about is more apparent.（第一段写得很好，有背景，有把抽象的题目具体化，还加上自己的观点）
    First, the further technique advances, the more options it could offer, and the more hesitant one would be. （the more…the more 学习）People used to do some exercises and readings in their spare time, to entertain ourselves（与people对应 是否是themselves？） 100 years ago. However, one can hardly be satisfied by this simple life style(lifestyle) nowadays, as wonderful TV programs and excellent websites are always（听别人说 少用always 因为太肯定的 好像） available and accessible. How common it is for family members to fight for a set in (a/the)certain period, with little time playing basketball together! Or(on the other hand) how usual it is for friends to discuss about the latest movies or news instead of a popular book! （我觉得要把例子更具体化一点，就那么一句话带过一个例子可能不太好）Life is never simple with a great variety of temptations associated with modern technology.（病毒这个例子说得很好，的确是计算机本来是应该使得我们生活简单的，但却有病毒 使得更加繁琐）
    What is more, another reason that also supports my viewpoint is that （有特意啰嗦的嫌疑）the continuous advent of inventions（单数） results in much energy and time to keep pace of them. One best illustration is the computer（顺利的引入例子）, which contains all sorts of softwares(单数？) that need to be updated. Every day, at least one new version of antivirus softwares are（is 因为前面是one of） coming out, and so are the viruses. Nor to mention new generations of hardware keeping dated every other year. Maybe the money invests in the new products is not our center concerns.
    More importantly, the precious time and energy that consumes（consumed） is （are）the one most valuable. We could have had some healthy and relaxing time by doing some housework with families and friends, rather than to take great （a）effort to learn how to deal with （a）household chore by new machines we purchase for a better living, or to fix them.  （这个例子有点牵强 你单单说做家务的好处使得我们怎样怎样 文章还是在与simple 和 complicated ）
    Admittedly, at some level, modern hi-tech facilities do bring simplicity in our daily life. For instance, by typing into keywords and clicking, we can have easy access to a great deal of information related. Shopping is no longer a tired and time-consuming activity, with the prospect of television shopping and e-commercial.（用得太精彩啦 佩服 应该是考过g的人吧）
    In conclusion, not only does modern technology provide convenience and speed, it also offer（s） a more complicated life, because it promotes more choices for the public, and demands more time and energy to follow.（可以再拓展一下）


总结：楼主写的作文很好，逻辑性很强，第一段引入的非常自然 第二段 第三、四段分论点 然后第五段是让步 结尾稍微可以再拓展一下。不过分论点是否太多，个人觉得两个已经足够，你可以再这两个分论点用具体的事实去说明（比如你那个电脑的病毒 就可以说“千年虫”弄得全球怎样 怎样）楼主加油！~其实我也写得不好 呵呵。