1.5 作文 听明星的意见 请改

yuminjiaUID: 2659628

1.5 When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Considering the positive influences brought by the some famous people and their opinions on both society and individuals, I agree with the statement that we should pay attention to these opinions from predominant people, such as actors, athletes and rock stars.

To begin with, it's undeniable that those famous people are successful in their career and they have various experiences which led them to the success. So, they can provide us some convincing opinions than other common people. Take a preeminent athlete Liu Xiang, who was the winner in 2004 Olympic Games , for example. When he won his first Olympic award, he was only twenty years old. However, although he didn't have plenty of experience about attending Olympic Games and should face several competitive rivals at that time, he conquered himself and won the champing. Through the TV interview after Olympic Games, he said it was the confidence that helped him win the success. he suggested the juveniles should be confident while facing plights. from the case of Liu Xiang, it is more convincing for us to believe that every miracle would happen if we keep confidence.

Furthermore, it is indisputable that we can find some beneficial effects from the opinions of these famous people. Take another instance of a famous film star Zhang in China. Although she was not too beautiful to be a film actor, she still chased her dream of being a super star in the stage. after a persistently playing some unimportant roles and correcting hands-on acting experience, she finally became a well-known actor as her accepted acting skills. In a ceremony for her outstanding film, she gave her opinions to many fans at present that if someone wants to be successful, he should pay his effort persistently and never give up. For me, among one of her fans, was deeply encouraged by her words when I meet some problems or challenges.

Judging from the evidence I mentioned above, the opinions from famous people can provide us a wiser suggestion when we face some problems or making some choices. it is worthwhile to listen to their opinions, which will bring us positive effects.

shirley072UID: 2712200

Considering the positive influences brought bythe some famous people and their opinions on both society and individuals, Iagree with the statement that we should pay attention to these opinions from predominant(觉得这个词一般是指占据优势的或者流行的，用来形容stars感觉不太合适)
people, such as actors,athletes and rock stars. (开头简洁明了，并且句式的应用恰到好处呵呵)


To begin with, it's undeniable that thosefamous people are successful in their career and they have various experienceswhich led them to the success. So, they can provide us some convincing opinionsthan other common people. Take a preeminent athlete Liu Xiang, who was thewinner in 2004 Olympic Games , for example. When he won his first Olympicaward, he was only twenty years old. However, although he didn't have plenty ofexperience about attending Olympic Games and should face several competitiverivals at that time, he conquered himself and won the champing. Through the TVinterview after Olympic Games, he said it was the confidence that helped himwin the success. he suggested the juveniles should be confident while facingplights. from the case of Liu Xiang, it is more convincing for us to believethat every miracle would happen if we keep confidence.

Furthermore, it is indisputable that we canfind some beneficial effects from the opinions of these famous people. Take anotherinstance of a famous film star Zhang in China (take…asan example,保持句子完整). Although she was not too beautiful to be a filmactor, she still chased her dream of being a super star in the stage. after apersistently playing some unimportant roles and correcting (collecting?) hands-on acting experience, she finallybecame a well-known actor as her accepted acting skills (by mastering the secrets of acting skills). In aceremony for her outstanding film, she gave her opinions to many fans atpresent that if someone wants to be successful, he should pay his effortpersistently and never give up. For me, among one of her fans, was deeplyencouraged by her words when I meet (confront)some problems or challenges.

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Judging from the evidence I mentioned above,the opinions from famous people can provide us a wiser suggestion when we facesome problems or making some choices. it is worthwhile to listen to theiropinions, which will bring us positive effects.

总的来说，楼主在句子与词汇的应用上比较熟练。我觉得需要注意的一点就是在内容上，虽然有两个具体的例子，但是我觉得这两个例子非常的相似，并且在写的时候的顺序安排也差不多，主要就是star给与成功的秘诀，一个是confidence，还有一个是persistence，在我看来实际上楼主只谈到了一个方面，就是我们要听他们的话是因为他们会告诉你成功的经验，而confidence和persistence都是属于成功的经验，并且。所以我觉得可以添加一些其他的内容方面
个人意见啦~~~~~