【InEffable】小组第一次作业 Issue 69

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TOPIC: ISSUE69 - "Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

Referring to the question of what’s should be the government’s attitude towards scientific researches, the speaker asserts that the fewer restrictions that the government placed, the better it would be. I basically agree with this contention, in that a lenient environment is a best motivation for scientists and also have many other merits. However, in the mean time we should not totally ignore some specific researching fields that would bring hazards to human races.
  Admittedly, scientific research plays an indispensible role in the modern world. Especially after the industrial revolution in the 1800's, people's lives have changed greatly in every aspect: from the convenient communication brought by cell phones and satellites, to the easy and fast way of travelling by airplane or magnet-train. In most cases, scientific development brings nothing but improvement of our daily life. As for many fundamental subjects such as mathematics, astronomy or geography, there may not be many chances to influence people's life; the scientists in such fields only discover the mysteries of the universe. Therefore, put any restrictions on them would be definitely unwarranted and unwise. Telling scientists in such fields what to do and what not to would be certainly an impediment to the development of science.
  Another point for a non-restriction researching atmosphere is that researchers are likely to be more efficient. When they are conducting some researches, they needn't to be too careful about breaching lines our rules that the governments imposed on them. Only when people are focused can they truly make something creative or magnificent. A telling example showing how fierce restrictions became major obstacles for scientists is that the dark time in Mid-age, when the religious authorities opposed any theory against the so-called canons. Many scientists dared to challenge the existing flawed or even absolutely incorrect theories which acknowledged by the authority paid a bloody price: including Bruno, a supporter of Copernicus ' solar system theory, was burn to death in Rome; and some scientists revealing the correct blood circulation system which disproving the classic one were also executed. During that time, very few developments in scientific area had been made, and human civilization had therefore been paused for hundreds of years.
  Nevertheless, to idea of fewer restrictions doesn't amount to a lassie-faire attitude to the scientist. They must always be aware that they should never break laws or moral rules. Any research posing a threat to the existence of human being (such as the research on biological weapons) or causing society disturbances (such as the development in cloning technology) should be checked in time. In a word, we must maintain a sustainable development for our human society.
  In sum, I basically support the idea of putting fewer restrictions on scientific researches, which would guarantee the rapid development on science, and would in turn promote people's daily life. Only the most necessary limits that assure us a sustainable future should be established. We should be confident that science can always be a positive force in our modern society, as long as the scientists don't break the bottom line.

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Referring to the question of what’s should be the government’s attitude towards scientific researches, the speaker asserts that the fewer restrictions that the government placed, the better it would be. I basically agree with this contention, in that（建议不要） a lenient environment is a best motivation for scientists and also have many other merits. However, in the mean time we should not totally ignore some specific researching fields that would bring hazards to human races.

  Admittedly, scientific research plays an indispensable role in the modern world. Especially after the industrial revolution in the 1800's, people's lives have changed greatly in every aspect: from the convenient communication brought by cell phones and satellites, to the easy and fast way of traveling by airplane or magnet-train. In most cases, scientific development brings nothing but improvement of our daily life. As for many fundamental subjects such as mathematics, astronomy or geography, there may not be many chances to influence people's life; the scientists in such fields only discover the mysteries of the universe. Therefore, put any restrictions on them would be definitely unwarranted and unwise.（建议这里写详细一点，即这些理论知识给我们带来什么好处，因为你这段的主旨是科学给当今社会带来好处） Telling scientists in such fields what to do and what not to would be certainly an impediment to the development of science.(分情况讨论，即实用的和理论的，不该限制)
  Another point for a non-restriction researching atmosphere is that researchers are likely to be more efficient. When they are conducting some researches, they needn't to be too careful about breaching lines our rules that the governments imposed on them. Only when people are focused can they truly make something creative or magnificent. A telling example showing how fierce restrictions became major obstacles for scientists is that the dark time in Mid-age, when the religious authorities opposed any theory against the so-called canons.（感觉这句话写得很好啊） Many scientists dared to challenge the existing flawed or even absolutely incorrect theories which acknowledged by the authority paid a bloody price: including Bruno, a supporter of Copernicus ' solar system theory, was burn to death in Rome; and some scientists revealing the correct blood circulation system which disproving the classic one were also executed（persecuted ）. During that time, very few developments in scientific area had been made, and human civilization had therefore been paused for hundreds of years.（不限制的好处和限制的坏处）你的论证和主题句不是很搭调啊，你举得例子都在说明限制带来的不好，但你的主题句说的是不限制让科学家更efficient 的问题，建议统一一下

  Nevertheless, to idea of (不太懂这儿的意思)fewer restrictions doesn't amount to a lassie-faire attitude to the scientist. They must always be aware that they should never break laws or moral rules. Any research posing a threat to the existence of human being (such as the research on biological weapons) or causing society disturbances (such as the development in cloning technology) should be checked in time. In a word, we must maintain a sustainable development for our human society.（是时间不够了吗。感觉这段没能很好的展开）

  In sum, I basically support the idea of putting fewer restrictions on scientific researches, which would guarantee the rapid development on science, and would in turn promote people's daily life. Only the most necessary limits that assure us a sustainable future should be established. We should be confident that science can always be a positive force in our modern society, as long as the scientists don't break the bottom line.（结论还是比较明确的）

语言上我觉得挺不错的，我水平也有限，只能给你提点思路上的建议。我觉得文章总体上是不错的，但是每一段之间的论证感觉不是很有力，就是你举的例子不能很好阐述你该段的中心思想。个人意见，仅供参考