下周考试，Issue 51求拍

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Issue 51 "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."


The author said that only when education is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student that can it be effective. Apprenetly the author put too much emphasis of individual needs and interests on education. However, they are just only two factors to which education will ultimately be effective.

At first, it goes without saying that interest is the best teacher. With an interest in learning, the students will find interesting and meaningful in studying and exploring in the scientific world. As there are three stages in studying--finding problems, analysising problems and solving problems, the aim of education is not only teaching the students some concrete techniques helping them to find a good job after graduation, but also some scientific methods that enable them to learn and then creat new knowledge themselves. Fortunately, studying with interests is the first step that would give students impetus to find problems initiatively.

However, people may take for granted that the education could always be designed to meet the individual needs and interests. Although modern educational system has been developed for dozens of years, especially during the recently two decades, when high-tech inventions and instruments were applied in education such as computers and the internet, education still couldn't meet every individual's needs and interests. On the other hand, it would be a waste of society-resources for education be designed to meet every individual's interests. Students need learn to find their interest in the existed education system.

Moreover, even if the society-resources are abundant, education should be designed that would help students become balance-developed persons. If the students just learn what they are really interested in, they would not fully developed. Because in the knowledge frame, the adjacent realms are linked with each other. Students just learning interesting subjects will become short sighted and will thus hinder their further study sooner of later. It is respondence for the school and society to let the students learn a wider spectrum of subjects.

In conclusion, I think effective education should not be designed to meet individual's needs and interests only. Give them a way so that they can retrospect themselves in the learning process and become properly developed is the ultimate aim.

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The author said that only when education is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student that can it be effective. Apprenetly the author put too much emphasis of individual needs and interests on education. However, they are just only two factors to which education will ultimately be effective.（虽然知道大概是啥意思，但此句疑有歧义：到底是说他们是那唯二的两个因素，还是说他们只不过是其中之二(just two factors out of many)?，这可是主题句啊，别拉下不好的印象）

At first, it goes without saying that interest is the best teacher. With an interest in learning, the students will find interesting and meaningful （名词宾语？） in studying and exploring in the scientific world. As there are three stages in studying--finding problems, analysising problems and solving problems, the aim of education is not only teaching the students some concrete techniques helping them to find a good job after graduation, but also some scientific methods that enable them to learn and then creat new knowledge themselves. （这句话，as是原因部分，the aim...是结论部分，然而这个逻辑值得推敲。“学习有三个阶段”——这能说明啥？跟后面提到的“不止要学技术，也要学方法”有啥关系？= =我想举个例子来类比说明都没办法，因为两部分没有关系，实在联系不起来）Fortunately, studying with interests is the first step that would give students impetus to find problems initiatively.（于是这一句我又不知道是哪来的联系了……”要学方法“，嗯，行，紧接下来”咱们有兴趣有动力去发现问题“——嗯？这中间断层了。怎么突然就从学方法扯到发现问题？= =||| ）（再来，本段主题是兴趣是最好的老师，奈何除了第一句和最后一句，兴趣这个东西就没出现过，逞论进一步发展了）

就批到这里，后面的看了，重伤还在于没有例子，通篇说理，且感觉思路没有打开。建议是每个观点都展开，要有联系，一定要例子！

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版面里 有这个题目的详细解说和介绍 建议楼主可以挖挖帖子
自己去挖掘一下 呵呵

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2# pluka
pluka: 感谢pluka的修改，我觉得您说的很有道理，再加些例子会好些。

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Issue 51 "Education will be truly effective only when it isspecifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of eachstudent."

The author said that only when education is specifically designed to meet theindividual needs and interests of each student that can it be effective. Apprenetly theauthor put too much emphasis of individual needs and interests on education.However, they are just only two factors to（觉得别扭。。with?） whicheducation will ultimately be effective. （总觉得中心论点不是很强势，试着把话说全，稍稍解释下可能会更好吧）

At first, it goes without saying that interest is the best teacher. With aninterest in learning, the students will find interesting（appealing,attractive？换些词，总看见interest…） and meaningful in studying and exploring in the scientific world.As there are three stages in studying--findingproblems, analysising（analysis 是名字。。）
problems and solving problems （可以改成in studyingprocess: problem finding, analyzing, and solving）, the aimof education is not only teaching
the students some concrete techniques helping（欧语法不好。。但这里确实奇怪。。） them tofind a good job after graduation, but also some scientific methods that enablethem to learn and then create newknowledge themselves. Fortunately, studying with interests is the first stepthat would give students impetus to find problems initiatively. （例子恩。。。）

However, people may take for granted that the educationcould always be designed to meet the individualneeds and interests(自己paraphrase下。。不要老用一个表述). Although modern educational system has been developed for dozensof years, especially during the recently twodecades, when high-tech inventions and instruments wereapplied in education such as computers and the internet

（语法问题：high-techinventions and instruments，such as computers and the internet, were applied in education）, education stillcouldn't meet every individual's needs and interests（still….）. On theother hand, it would be a waste of society-resources for education be designedto meet every individual's interests. Students need learn to find theirinterest in the existed education system. (支撑太少，略显单薄了。。。总觉得绕来绕去其实讲的都一样。。)

Moreover, even if the society-resources are abundant, education should be designed（换换词）
that wouldhelp（我没读懂还是这句不太通。。。） students become balance-developed persons. If the students justlearn what they are really interested in, they would not fully developed（STILL…）. Becausein the knowledge frame, the adjacent realms are linked with each other（我能理解。。但是有点Chinglish的感觉，没有例子支撑就不知道rater能懂不）. Students（who） justlearning interesting subjects will become short sighted and will thushinder their further study sooner of later. Itis respondence(这是名词。。) for the school and society to let the students learn a widerspectrum of subjects.

In conclusion, I think effective education should not be designed to meetindividual's needs and interests only. Give them away (别扭。。)so that they can retrospect themselves in the learning process andbecome properly developed is the ultimate aim.







大致改了下，思路还是可以的，就是例子好了点，文章的语言还需要加强！！
LZ加油啊！！！
BTW，前两天偶处女写也是issue51，不知楼主能帮忙改下不，大谢！！

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