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复习计划

1月25日----31日       I 高频每天仔细列15个提纲（按类别）  找论据整理论据      I高频前100道提纲搞定，I写足7篇
                              I 每天写一篇 修改
                              A 每天10个提纲                                                        A提纲给I让道，写足7篇，通过写来背模版
                              A每天写一篇 修改
2月1日-----15日       I低频每天10个提纲
                              I 高频每天写3篇 修改                                                 写足45篇 45+7=52篇
                              A每天10个提纲
                              A每天写1篇 修改                                                       写足15篇      15+7+8=30篇
2月16日----24日       模考 每天3次 加修改                                                  I 3*8=24篇   总 24+52=76
                                                                                                           A 3*8=24篇  总 24+30=54


目标：I   4
        A  5

要求：A能迅速分析题干中的逻辑错误，并攻击要点，用自己的语言和模版结合，20分钟内完成文章。
        I 能不偏题，找到合适的论点，迅速反映出论据，有深度地进行论述。

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第一次作业：awintro修改

Sample Issue Topic

“In our time, specialists of all kinds are highly overrated. We need more generalists—people who can

provide broad perspectives."

Essay Response * – Score 6

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons in Western society call for a balance in which there are both specialists and generalists.
观点：Partial disagree

Specialists are necessary in order to allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new information and knowledge that have come out of research and have been widely disseminated through mass global media. As the head of Pharmacology at my university once said (and I paraphrase):"I can only research what I do because there are so many who have come before me to whom I can turn for basic knowledge. It is only because of each of the narrowly focused individuals at each step that a full and true understanding of the complexities of life can be had. Each person can only hold enough knowledge to add one small rung to the ladder, but together we can climb to the moon." This illustrates the point that our societies level of knowledge and technology is at a stage in which there simply must be specialists in order for our society to take advantage of the information available to us.一个中心重复2遍，一个例子能为中心服务，语句不错。

Simply put, without specialists, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of

information overload. While it was fine for early physicists to learn and understand the few laws and ideas
that existed during their times, now, no one individual can possibly digest and assimilate all of the knowledge in any given area.

On the other hand, Over specialization means narrow foci in which people can lose the larger picture. No one can hope to understand the human body by only inspecting one's own toe-nails. What we learn from a narrow focus may be internally logically coherent but may be irrelevant or fallacious within the framework of a broader perspective. Further, if we inspect only our toe-nails, we may conclude that the whole body is hard and white. Useful conclusions and thus perhaps useful inventions must come by sharing among specialists. Simply throwing out various discoveries means we have a pile of useless discoveries; it is only when one can make with them a mosaic that we can see that they may form a picture. 本段段首转折，举例生动形象。

Not only may over-specialization be dangerous in terms of the truth, purity and cohesion of knowledge, but it can also serve to drown moral or universal issues. Generalists and only generalists can see a broad enough picture to realize and introduce to the world the problems of the environment. With specialization, each person focuses on their research and their goals. Thus, industrialization, expansion, and new technologies are driven ahead. Meanwhile no individual can see the holistic view of our global existence in which true advancement may mean stifling individual specialists for the greater good of all.简单论述，

Finally, over-specialization in a people's daily lives and jobs has meant personal and psychological compartmentalization. People are forced into pigeon holes early in life (at least by university) and must consciously attempt to consume external forms of stimuli and information in order not to be lost in their small and isolated universe. Not only does this make for narrowly focused and generally pooprly-educated individuals, but it guarantees a sense of loss of community, often followed by a feeling of psychological displacement and personal dissatisfaction.

Without generalists, society becomes inward-looking and eventually inefficient. Without a society

that recongnizes the impotance of braod-mindedness and fora for sharing generalities, individuals become isolated. Thus, while our form of society necessitates specialists, generalists are equally important. Specialists drive us forward in a series of thrusts while generalists make sure we are still on the jousting field and know what the stakes are.

本文先用一段论述了specialists的必要性，然后又用了3段，逐层递进，由over-specialists的弊端到generalist，由个体延伸到全社会，论述了generalist的存在意义。

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Essay Response – Score 5

Specialists are not overrated today. More generalists may be needed, but not to overshadow the specialists. Generalists can provide a great deal of information on many topics of interest with a broad range of ideas. People who look at the overall view of things can help with some of the large problems our society faces today. But specialists are necessary to gain a better understanding of more in depth methods to solve problems or fixing things.作者表达了倾向于disagree的观点

One good example of why specialists are not overrated is in the medical field. Doctors are necessary for people to live healthy lives. When a person is sick, he may go to a general practitioner to find out the cause of his problems. Usually, this kind of "generalized" doctor can help most ailments with simple and effective treatments. Sometimes, though, a sickness may go beyond a family doctor's knowledge or the prescribed treatments don't work the way they should. When a sickness progresses or becomes diagnosed as a disease that requires more care than a family doctor can provide, he may be referred to a specialist. For instance, a person with constant breathing problems that require hospitalization may be suggested to visit an asthma specialist. Since a family doctor has a great deal of knowledge of medicine, he can decide when his methods are not effective and the patient needs to see someone who knows more about the specific problem; someone who knows how it begins, progresses, and specified treatments. This is an excellent example of how a generalied person may not be equipped enough to handle something as well as a specialized one can.就一个论点，举了一个领域的例子，罗索的要命，怎么得的5分啊。

Another example of a specialist who is needed instead of a generalist involves teaching. In grammar

school, children learn all the basic principles of reading, writing, and arithematic. But as children get older and progress in school, they gain a better understanding of the language and mathematical processes. As the years in school increase, they need to learn more and more specifics and details about various subjects. They start out by learning basic math concepts such as addition, subtraction, division, and multiplication. A few years later, they are ready to begin algebraic concepts, geometry, and calculus. They are also ready to learn more advanced vocabulary, the principles of how all life is composed and how it functions. One teacher or professor can not provide as much in depth discussion on all of these topics as well as one who has learned the specifics and studied mainly to know everything that is currently known about one of these subjects. Generalized teachers are required to begin molding students at a very early age so they can get ready for the future ahead of them in gaining more facts about the basic subjects and finding out new facts on the old ones.又举了一个领域的例子，与上一段并列

These are only two examples of why specialists are not highly overrated and more generalists are not necessary to the point of overshadowing them. Generalists are needed to give the public a broad understanding of some things. But, specialists are important to help maintain the status, health, and safety of our society. Specialists are very necessary.简单的总结

本文结构较简单，通过两个并列例子的引导，准确地表达和论述了作者disagree的观点，但是例子冗长罗索，逻辑简单。

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Sample Argument Topic

Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within this group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots were not wearing any protective clothing (helmets, knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material (clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads, etc.). Clearly, these statistics indicate that by investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident.

Essay Response * – Score 6

The notion that protective gear reduces the injuries suffered in accidents seems at first glance to be an obvious conclusion. After all, it is the intent of these products to either prevents accidents from occurring in the first place or to reduce the injuries suffered by the wearer should an accident occur. However, the conclusion that investing in high quality protective gear greatly reduces the risk of being severely injured in an accident may mask other (and potentially more significant) causes of injuries and may inspire people to over invest financially and psychologically in protective gear.开头直接否定作者的结论和暗示

First of all, as mentioned in the argument, there are two distinct kinds of gear - preventative gear (such as light reflecting material) and protective gear (such as helmets). Preventative gear is intended to warn others, presumably for the most part motorists, of the presence of the roller skater. It works only if the "other" is a responsible and caring individual who will afford the skater the necessary space and attention. Protective gear is intended to reduce the effect of any accident, whether it is caused by another, the skater or some force of nature. Protective gear does little, if anything, to prevent accidents but is presumed to reduce the injuries that occur in an accident. The statistics on injuries suffered by skaters would be more interesting if the skaters were grouped into those wearing no gear at all, those wearing protective gear only, those wearing preventative gear only and those wearing both. These statistics could provide skaters with a clearer understanding of which kinds of gear are more beneficial.

本段从论据的瑕疵，和gear本身与accident的联系入手攻击，对两类gear分别攻击，论述比较合理，逻辑清晰。

The argument above is weakened by the fact that it does not take into account the inherent differences between skaters who wear gear and those who do not. If is at least likely that those who wear gear may be generally more responsible and/or safety conscious individuals. The skaters who wear gear may be less likely to cause accidents through careless or dangerous behavior. It may, in fact, be their natural caution and responsibility that keeps them out of the emergency room rather than the gear itself. Also, the statistic above is based entirely on those who are skating in streets and parking lots which are relatively dangerous places to skate in the first place. People who are generally more safety conscious (and therefore more likely to wear gear) may choose to skate in safer areas such as parks or back yards.

本段从skaters本身的性质、skate的地点，与事故的联系入手攻击，用了他因法。

The statistic also goes not differentiate between severities of injuries. The conclusion that safety gear prevents severe injuries suggests that it is presumed that people come to the emergency room only with severe injuries. This is certainly not the case. Also, given that skating is a recreational activity that may be primarily engaged in during evenings and weekends (when doctors' offices are closed), skater with less severe injuries may be especially likely to come to the emergency room for treatment.

作者的错误假设

Finally, there is absolutely no evidence provided that high quality (and presumably more expensive) gear is any more beneficial than other kinds of gear. For example, a simple white t-shirt may provide the same preventative benefit as a higher quality, more expensive, shirt designed only for skating. Before skaters are encouraged to invest heavily in gear, a more complete understanding of the benefit provided by individual pieces of gear would be helpful. NO evidence

The argument for safety gear based on emergency room statistics could provide important information and potentially saves lives. Before conclusions about the amount and kinds of investments that should be made in gear are reached, however, a more complete understanding of the benefits are needed. After all, a false confidence in ineffective gear could be just as dangerous as no gear at all.好句子

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Essay Response – Score 5

The argument presented is limited but useful. It indicates a possible relationship between a high percentage of accidents and a lack of protective equipment. The statistics cited compel a further investigation of the usefulness of protective gear in preventing or mitigating roller-skating related injuries. However, the conclusion that protective gear and reflective equipment would greatly reduce. risk of being severely injured" is premature. Data is lacking with reference to the total population of skaters and the relative levels of experience, skill and physical coordination of that population. It is entirely possible that further research would indicate that most serious injury is averted by the skater's ability to react quickly and skillfully in emergency situations. 论述乏力

Another area of investigation necessary before conclusions can be reached is identification of the types of injuries that occur and the various causes of those injuries. The article fails to identify the most prevalent types of roller-skating related injuries. It also fails to correlate the absence of protective gear and reflective equipment to those injuries. For example, if the majority of injuries are skin abrasions and closed-head injuries, then a case can be made for the usefulness of protective clothing mentioned. Likewise, if injuries are caused by collision with vehicles (e.g. bicycles, cars) or pedestrians, then light-reflective equipment might mitigate the occurrences. However, if the primary types of injuries are soft-tissue injuries such as torn ligaments and muscles, back injuries and the like, then a greater case could be made for training and experience as preventative measures.
例子能够说明问题

结构不清晰，论述不透彻，逻辑错误排序比较混乱而且没有分段。

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第一次作业：习作


5. "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
一个国家应该要求所有的学生在进入大学之前都学习由国家统一制定的课程，而不是允许由国家不同地区的学校去决定课程的安排。

中心：disagree

开头：统一课程忽略了同学的个性发展，忽略了天赋，这样的学习缺乏效率。


1.        1.统一课程忽略了学生的个性发展，忽略了天赋，会使学生的潜力得不到充分开发。
例子：BILL GATES.

2.       2.统一课程使学生浪费很多时间在自己不擅长的课程上，降低了学习效率。
例子：偏科生韩寒。
例子：各类艺术学校，音乐学院。


3.       3.统一课程打造出同一个模式学习的学生，缺乏自主性，进入大学后需要主动选择自己的专业，并且在课外的自主研究成为相当重要的一部分，会造成他们的不适应。
论据：建筑学，学到建筑理念之后需要在课外自己挖掘精髓建立自己的风格。


总结：应该由各学校根据自己学生情况制定学习课程，使他们的优势得以充分发挥。


Whether a nation should require the students to study the same national curriculum or not remains a complex problem, while the arguer claims that a nation should make a uniform national curriculum for students until they enter college rather than allow schools determine which academic courses to offer.
It is such a presumptuous conclusion that the choice neglects the characteristics and talents of students, which play a important role in their school life and future in society. In addition, the study efficiency will drop under the pressure of unconcentrating curriculum.

First of all, considering that the students do have their own gift for some certain subjects, the uniform curriculum, which contain same courses about study and practice, will lead to an poor-exploitation on their potential. Many years ago at the end of 20th century, a great man
called BILL GATES recognized the certain point and leave the most famous university-Harvard, whose classes was becoming a block on his way to success. Even in the most famous university, where there are different kinds of professional resource and courses in different fields, a person's characteristic talent could be held up by the regular courses. Not to mention the uniform curriculum for young students before college.

Second, it is a kind of waste once students spend time on the courses which is not refering to their major. The time they waste on unfamiliar subjects, could be used to study other courses concentrating on their major. There is an adage tells “As one falls, another rises”. Under this situation, the uniform curriculum will surely make a poor effect on the study efficiency. A famous writer called Hanhan, full of literary talent in China, who leave school at his age of 17, once claimed on a TV show that the most awful flaw of education in China is the uniform curriculum, which affects the efficiency of major study and products mediocrity into the society. Perhaps his argument is somehow opinionated, but what the nation education care more ought not to be the similarity of students, but the interest and potential of them .

Third, as we all know, the college study is upon the major, and it is a kind of conduction to the student's interest, which requires an independent study outside the class. If the students take the national curriculum before, when they enter the college, they will find themselves a bit lost between the traditional study and independent study. After choosing the major, it is necessary for them to choose a point of penetration in the certain field and make own study plans, which will be much different from the high school study. Some subject as architecture, the college student need to form their own style and design new creative architecture. Unless the schools have trained them ability upon independent study by providing different offers to academics, this kind of challenge will render the fresh college student extra pressure and passiveness in their education.

Overall, to accomplish today's education, it is necessary to allow schools to determine the academic courses to offer and give the students a free choice to decide their own majors. Every student has their own talents and interest, which need respect and suitable conductions. The evolution of the society relies on these talented students who should be provided free choice on their own interest and major.

处子作，随便拍。

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我是2月24日...差不多。春节的十天左右没有列到计划的可用时间中，相对更紧。
Issue的提纲列100篇会不会多了一些呢?


你的作文中韩寒这个例子貌似老外看不懂，即使能看懂，你连“韩寒”这个名字都没写进去...
第二段的最后一句话和前面的并无强逻辑关系。

刚开始写就用一边倒的模式，很有魄力。
一起加油^_^

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7# zunge


谢谢这位仁兄的评价。
那个我这篇文章写完了因为太晚了自己没看也没改就睡了，现在我改了一下，应该稍稍改掉了点毛病。

我也想修改下策略，我觉得A一定要把它写好，这个是拿分的关键。
ISSUE的话，还是尽量多列点吧。

我会回拍的~~

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5. "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
一个国家应该要求所有的学生在进入大学之前都学习由国家统一制定的课程，而不是允许由国家不同地区的学校去决定课程的安排。

中心：disagree

开头：统一课程忽略了同学的个性发展，忽略了天赋，这样的学习缺乏效率。


1.        1.统一课程忽略了学生的个性发展，忽略了天赋，会使学生的潜力得不到充分开发。
例子：BILL GATES.

2.       2.统一课程使学生浪费很多时间在自己不擅长的课程上，降低了学习效率。
例子：偏科生韩寒。
例子：各类艺术学校，音乐学院。


3.       3.统一课程打造出同一个模式学习的学生，缺乏自主性，进入大学后需要主动选择自己的专业，并且在课外的自主研究成为相当重要的一部分，会造成他们的不适应。
论据：建筑学，学到建筑理念之后需要在课外自己挖掘精髓建立自己的风格。


总结：应该由各学校根据自己学生情况制定学习课程，使他们的优势得以充分发挥。


Whether a nation should require the students to study the same national curriculum （or not去掉） remains a complex problem, while the arguer claims that a nation should make a uniform national curriculum for students until they enter college rather than allow schools determine which academic courses to offer（这里需要改变下句式，直接抄原题不太好吧）. It is such a presumptuous conclusion that the choice neglects the characteristics and talents of students, which play a important role （play important roles）in their school life and future in society. In addition, the study efficiency will drop under the pressure of unconcentrating(单词写错了) curriculum.

First of all, considering that the students do have their own gift for some certain subjects, the uniform curriculum, which contain same courses about study and practice, will lead to an poor-exploitation on their potential. Many years ago（好像是十几年前吧） at the end of 20th century, a great man called BILL GATES recognized the certain point and leave the most famous university-Harvard, whose classes was becoming a block on his way to success. Even in the most famous university, where there are different kinds of professional resource and courses in different fields, a person's characteristic talent could be held up by the regular courses. Not to mention the uniform curriculum for young students before college.

Second, it is a kind of waste once students spend time on the courses which is not refering（referring） to their major. The time they waste on unfamiliar subjects, could be used to study other courses concentrating on their major. There is an adage tells “As one falls, another rises”. Under this situation, the uniform curriculum will surely make a poor effect on the study efficiency. A famous writer called Hanhan, full of literary talent in China, who leave school at his age of 17, once claimed on a TV show that the most awful flaw of education in China is the uniform curriculum, which affects the efficiency of major study and products mediocrity into the society. Perhaps his argument is somehow opinionated, but what the nation education care more ought not to be the similarity of students, but the interest and potential of them .(这2个but 逻辑上好像不对)

Third, as we all know, the college study is upon the major, and it is a kind of conduction to the student's interest, which requires an independent study outside the class. If the students take the national curriculum before, 1、when they enter the college, 2、they will find themselves a bit lost between the traditional study and independent （把1放到2的后面）study. After choosing the major, it is necessary for them to choose a point of penetration in the certain field and make own study plans, which will be much different from the high school study. Some subject（subjects） as architecture, the college student(s) need to form their own style and design new creative architecture. Unless the schools have trained them ability upon independent study by providing different offers to academics, this kind of challenge will render the fresh college student extra pressure and passiveness in their education.

Overall, it is necessary to allow schools to determine the academic courses to offer and give the students a free choice to decide their own majors. Every student has their own talents and interest, which need respect and suitable conductions. The evolution of the society relies on these talented students who should be provided free choice on their own interest and major.

文章中许多+the的地方我不是很肯定是否错误，建议多看看toefl语法精要，bill gates的例子不错但韩寒的那个可能略逊一筹，观点比较明确，但在本人看来这篇issue最好还是8分否定2分肯定，这样的文章会更有见地~

嘿嘿 不当之处还请见谅啊 O(∩_∩)O~

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改丹心的链接
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewth ... age=2#pid1773544625

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第二次作业

28. "Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little."
学生们在记忆知识的时候应该先学习有助于解释那些知识的理念、潮流和概念。仅仅死学知识的学生是学不到什么东西的。

1.        1.在学习知识的过程中，记忆事实是必须的，必须通过记忆掌握最基本的东西，才有工具对深层的东西进行理解，才能用自己的力量去挖掘知识。

论据：语言类学习，先记住单词的意思才能理解句子，记忆句式的作用才能理解语意学懂语言。

数学的学习，不记忆公式、理论、运算法则，无法解题。

2.       2.同时，了解事实背后的ideas trends concepts是帮助记忆的有效途径，是学习知识的过程，只有理解了事实背后的内容，才能举一反三，深入研究。

举一反三draw inferences about other cases from one instance

论据：结构工程的学习，不能死记结构的样式，必须知道结构的受力原理，才能设计出更合理的结构。

3.       3.在大部分情况下，两者需要进行有机结合。记忆事实的学习方法有助于提高学习效率，在某些应急情况下迅速掌握需要的知识量；在需要深入研究的学科，必须要学习ideas trends concepts，光凭记忆事实的方法无法达到目的。

论据1：地理学习，山脉河流名称，再记流向，和形成原因。
论据2：化学实验，虽然要记录实验现象，但是更重要的是透过现象了解反应原理。

Nowadays it is a general dilemma between memorizing facts first and making comprehension about the ideas, trends, and concepts first upon study under the situation that efficiency and understand are both critical points in almost every field. The author claims that students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts, which is somehow presumptuous. It's hard to make choice on this confusing alternative. However, things could not be general discussed. In different field, we should hold different priority between the two choices.

To begin with, we must recognize that memorizing is a necessary part for students in process of learning knowledge. By memorizing some primary information, we could start to learn some secondary knowledge, which is hard for beginner to get understood. For instance, when we start learning a kind of language as English, we must memorize basic words and grammar rules and restrictions; we must manage the method to organize the words and sentences and the pronunciation so as to talk, write, and read some advanced articles. Similarly, the math’s learning also need memorizing the formulas and mathematic axioms, so that we can solve the problems. It is an obvious regulation that in such field before we master the subject, we should understand it; and before we understand the object, we need memorizing it.

At the same time, the comprehension of ideas, trends, and concepts before memorizing such knowledge in some fields will help to explain the facts. Apprehension is no doubt an important process in study. There is an example upon structural engineering about this conclusion. Before studying structural engineering, we need know the theory of mechanic and material science, which are the basic concept consisting the structural engineering. After learning this basic knowledge, compared with memorizing the settled style, we enter a free land in structure，in which we could design our own structure. In today’s study, the facts we catch play a critical role on drawing inferences about other cases from one instance.

In addition, in most fields, it is necessary to equally relate and assort with such two ways. In order to raise the efficiency on study, we should never disagree that the former should always precede the latter. Sticking adherence to the speaker’s advice would surely lead to a terrible situation full of ideas and concepts in disorder. When we study country history in high school, it is a regular order that after remember the name of a country, we research the development, history, cultural and politics. We could know neither further information nor general knowledge about the country if we don't memorize some basics. On the other hand, the most important knowledge is not the name and position, but the history, culture and politics. From the evidence we can conclude that the point of the study is not the order that memorizing first or understanding first, but the wise use and reasonable combination of the two factors.

Overall, it is not an advisable method to hold the extreme aspect that we must memorize facts before understanding the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. In fact, the best choice on study is linked to an organic integration of the two factors.

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第三次作业

112. "Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."
一些教育体系强调学生逻辑推理思维能力的发展，但是那些教学生们探究自身情绪的教育对学生们才更有好处。

1.
逻辑思维能力是工作生活学习的基础，现代教育必须重视这一点。进一步说，无论在哪个学科领域研究和学习或者工作，逻辑思维能力都是最最基本的工具。没有这种能力将寸步难行。
例子：证券公司员工stockjobber


2.       2. 主观情感的教育是也是不容忽视的，除了基本的工作能力，人类要处理好社会上存在的人际关系，探索真身的价值，需要依仗主观的调节能力。
论据：社会现象：白领工作压力大，抑郁症depression精神分裂Schizophrenia，自杀。


3.       3.。当今教育体系应该关注的重点是把握这两者的平衡，而不是选择其中之一。


例子：姚明和孙悦NBA经历的对比，他们都是头脑聪明有天赋的篮球运动员，但是姚明成功，孙悦失败，除了努力和球技，也有主观情感控制的原因。


In today's technological advanced society, people face more challenges than before in their works which require various personal capability. The increase of working pressure and financial need make it hard for people to survive and enjoy their lives. Thus, the core direction of education concentrating on reasoning and logical thinking or one's own emotions plays an important role in children's future. The author asserts that educational systems should place more emphasis on exploring student's own emotions than the capacity for reasoning and logical thinking.
As I concerned, giving up any side of the two factors will lead to a terrible circumstance in the current world.

To begin with, the ability to survive and thrive in a society is based on the reasoning and logical thinking. As is known to us, what we speak and act in daily life according to the language logics and behavioral logics are all basic skills, which we have started to learn from our parents and relatives at a early age. If we lose this kind of abilities, just like the wolf girl in the news report, we could not even keep alive in this society. Not mention to the study and work in any professional require much higher-grade capacity. For example, the economic occupations in stockjobber keep a high demand on workers' reasoning and logical thinking ability. With any little flaws on logical and math’s account, you will make a disaster and lose your job immediately. As a result, the basic life and advanced social behaviors as working, exchanging both acts according to the demands of reasoning and logical thinking.

On the other hand, without exploring students' own emotion, they are not able to survive in such a complex society with so many challenges and accidents. A certain amount of self-introspection into one's emotions will help to develop a student as an overall person. The pressure from work and family life are increasing with each passing day. There are so many white collar workers suffering from mental disease as depression and schizophrenia, which is changing into a new kind of terrible disaster from the 20th century. Some people could not come to deal with the relationship between work and family. They fail to achieve some success in works and don't have friends to bare towards each other the secrets of their soul; they don't even know the value of their lives. To solve this kind of problem, it is necessary to develop the emotions of a person, which help them to explore their true value, their own interest and some other facts keeping them positive in the current society.

Finally, the real purpose of today's educational system should be point out that to produce a kind of students who are socially adaptable with healthy body and mentality. We must keep a balance on the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking and their own emotions. There is a comparison between the two famous talented basketball players Yao Ming, who is an all-star player in Huston Rocket, and Sun Yue, who has made an awful season on the bench in Los Angeles Lakers. Compared with Sun Yue's lack of positivity and confidence in training，Yao Ming's success attributes to his hard works and the most important factors, his never give-up mind when suffering several serious hurts. In short, unless a person has both working capacity and mental modified ability, could he survive and live a happy life in this society.

Overall, the most important thing to discuss is not on the choice of developing logical thinking and reasoning or emotions, but on how to balance these two factors in students' regular education. In order to improve the students’ competitive power and indirectly provide them a bright prospect, it is necessary to make a rational combination of the training on these two abilities.

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Nowadays it[it 指代什么？] is a general dilemma between memorizing facts first and making comprehension about the ideas, trends, and concepts first upon study under the situation that[in which] efficiency and understand are both critical points in almost every field. The author claims that students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts, which is somehow presumptuous. It's hard to make choice on this confusing alternative. However, things could not be general discussed. In different field【s】, we should hold different priority【priority用得不妥，而且应该是复数，建议用different levels of priority】 between the two choi·ces.[开头观点明确，简洁]

To begin with, we must recognize that memorizing is a necessary part for students in process of learning knowledge【动词不对，knowledge 只能用gain或者get】. By memorizing some primary information, we could start to learn some secondary knowledge, 【最好做一下概念解释，否则读者会不知所云】which is hard for beginner to get understood. For instance, when we start learning a kind of language as English, we must memorize basic words and grammar rules and restrictions【conditions较好】; we must manage the method to organize the words and sentences and the pronunciation【这个并列关系有误，words和pronunciation重复了】 so as to talk, write, and read some advanced articles. Similarly, the math’s learning also need 【s】memorizing the formulas and mathematic axioms, so that we can solve the problems【answer questions 】. It is an obvious regulation that in such field before we master the subject, we should understand it; and before we understand the object, we need memorizing it.

At the same time[最好说明一下time指的是什么？], the comprehension of ideas, trends, and concepts before memorizing such knowledge in some fields will help to explain the facts. Apprehension is no doubt an important process in study. There is an example upon structural engineering about this conclusion. Before studying structural engineering, we need[to] know the theory of mechanic and material science, which are [is]the basic concept consisting the structural engineering. After learning this basic knowledge, compared with memorizing the settled style, we enter a free land in structure，in which we could design our own structure. In today’s study, the facts we catch play a critical【crucial】 role on drawing inferences about other cases from one instance.【结构明晰，有观点，有例子，注意到了逻辑关系】

In addition, in most fields, it is necessary to equally relate and assort with such two ways. In order to raise 【increase】the efficiency on study, we should never disagree that the former should always precede the latter. Sticking adherence【两个词的词义重复，删掉一个把】 to the speaker’s advice would surely lead to a terrible situation full of ideas and concepts in disorder. When we study country history in high school, it is a regular【common is better】 order that after remember the name of a country, we research the development, history, cultural and politics. We could know neither further information nor general knowledge about the country if we don't memorize some basics. On the other hand, the most important knowledge is not the name and position, but the history, culture and politics. From the evidence we can conclude that the point of the study is not the order that memorizing first or understanding first, but the wise use and reasonable combination of the two factors.

Overall, it is not an advisable method to hold the extreme aspect that we must memorize facts before understanding the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. In fact, the best choice on study is linked to an organic integration of the two factors.[结尾观点明确]

1、文章的结构清楚，观点明确
2、一些语法问题需要注意一下，这个建议多看范文
3、词的用法建议自己不确定的时候多查查韦氏字典，很有用；

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第五次作业


170. "The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general welfare of all its people."
一个伟大国家最真实的体现不是它的统治者、艺术家或者科学家的成就，而是他所有老百姓的普通福利（幸福）。


中心：most disagree
开头：正如作者所言，一个国家伟大与否，与老百姓的福利是分不开的，百姓安居乐业是基础。但是同时，他的统治者，艺术家和科学家的成就，也是反映这个国家国力的重要因素。

1.        1.老百姓的福利，是一个国家应该关注的焦点，也是象征一个国家国力的标志只有当一个国家的政府解决了他的国民的基本民生问题，这个国家才被认为是个好国家。相反，如果一个国家不能像那样保证人们有健康正常的物质生活，无论在政治科学艺术上有多么大的成就，能成为一个伟大的国家。

反例：前苏联，统治者，艺术家科学家有很多成就，但是老百姓社会生活不幸福，不能说是一个伟大的国家。


2.    2.同时，一个国家的艺术、科学成就，也是评判它是否伟大的重要标准。其实，一个国家国民的幸福与物质条件和精神生活两个方面密切相关。在，除了有社会福利保障，生存无忧，一个国家的国民还必须有健康的精神生活，包括文化的熏陶，自由的理念等等。而政治家、艺术家、科学家的成就与此息息相关。

论据：政治家：引导人民走向正确的发展道路。林肯Lincoln，正是他的引领反奴运动，使美国国内走上和谐发展的道路，有了今天的成就。He successfully led his country through its greatest internal crisis, the American Civil War, preserving the Union and ending slavery.

科学家：研究科技，提高国家科技水平，科学是第一生产力，是保证国民物质条件的基本要素。
瓦特发明的蒸汽机，推动社会发展。There's a words said by Marx,"Science and technology are the primary productive forces


艺术家：艺术家的成就反映了一个国家的文化水平，也与人民的精神生活息息相关。



          总结：所以，反映一个国家伟大与否有两个方面，一个是人民的生活水平，一个是国家政治科技艺术的发展水平。





As the author claims, the judgment of whether a country is great or not cannot be separate from the general welfare of its entire people. However, it is a false dilemma the author states that only one factors between the achievements of the rulers, artists, or scientists and the general welfare of people could decide the country's great. In fact, the sorts of achievements are related with the general welfare of people and main impulse of it.

To begin with, I must recognize that the general welfare plays an important role in a country, which stands for the country's comprehensive national strength. Only if a country solves the basic general livelihood issues of people, it will be qualified to the judgment of might. On contrary, a country will never be a great one when some of the people cannot even guarantee that there's something to eat tomorrow. Just like the former Soviet Union, it is a powerful country in the military field but not a warm home for the people there. Many researchers throughout the world consider it a great country because of the advanced technology and various modern weapons, but they never recognize that there are so many people down and out in a corner of the freezing country. The politicians, as Josef Stalin, make great accomplishment in the world relying on its military power. But they cannot even make the country held together like a country.

You may misunderstand my discussion above with one side pointed about the general welfare. However, it is not the case. Another important part of general welfare is the spiritual life of citizens, which is directly improved by the achievement of rulers', artists', and scientists. So the author's claim that the surest indicator of a great nation is not the sorts of achievements is a confliction at all.
First, the politicians are the country leaders, who will decide the development direction and launch and follow policies leading to be prosperous and strong. One of the greatest American presidents Lincoln successfully led his country through its greatest internal crisis, the American Civil War, preserving the Union and ending slavery. The presidents have made great progress as a politician, which indirectly makes the general welfare of people better in every field. He gave the citizens real peace and steady life and create a great condition for development. Can't you claim that America's great is independent of Lincoln's achievements?

Second, it is no doubt that the artists' and scientists' achievements are closely bound up with the general welfare of people and the country's great. Artists, like Van Gogh and Da Vinci as painters, Shakespeare and Tagore as writers and Beenthoven and Mozart as musicians, are all make great contribution to improve people's spiritual life. Their achievements are the most beautiful part of the world, which are regarded as precious with no price to their country. And the scientists as Edison and Einstein, whose achievements almost change the world, are part of the representatives of their national strength. There's a word said by Marx, "Science and technology are the primary productive forces." Science and technology impulse the development of the society and improve the general welfare indirectly. It is no reason to separate the science achievements from the country's great.

Overall, the author misses the point that general welfare is the produced and improved by individual achievements. As the conclusion mentioned above, the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists is closely related to the general welfare of people. They both stand for a country's comprehensive strength. Without any section of them, a country can't grow in its greatness.

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As the author claims, the judgment of whether a country is great or not cannot be separate from the general welfare of its entire people. However, it is a false dilemma the author states that only one factors between the achievements of the rulers, artists, or scientists and the general welfare of people could decide the country's great. (驳论)In fact, the sorts of achievements are related with the general welfare of people and main impulse of it.（立论）
To begin with, I must recognize that the general welfare plays an important role in a country, which stands for the country's comprehensive national strength. Only if a country solves the basic general livelihood issues of people, it will（will it） be qualified to the judgment of might. On contrary, a country will never be a great one when some of the people cannot even guarantee that there's something to eat tomorrow. Just like the former Soviet Union, it is a powerful country in the military field but not a warm home for the people there. Many researchers throughout the world consider it a great country because of the advanced technology and various modern weapons, but they never recognize that there are so many people down and out in a corner of the freezing country. The politicians, as Josef Stalin, make great accomplishment in the world relying on its military power. But they cannot even make the country held together like a country.（很好的反例）
（这一段单纯看来很好，但是与提纲中说的“物质生活”不尽相同。个人建议修改提纲，其实不一定要用material与下文的spiritual想对应）

You may misunderstand my discussion above with one side pointed about the general welfare. However, it is not the case. Another important part of general welfare is the spiritual life of citizens, which is directly improved by the achievement of rulers', artists', and scientists. So the author's claim that the surest indicator of a great nation is not the sorts of achievements is a confliction at all.

First, the politicians are the country leaders, who will decide the development direction and launch and follow policies leading （the country）to be prosperous and strong. One of the greatest American presidents Lincoln successfully led his country through its greatest internal crisis, the American Civil War, preserving the Union and ending slavery. The presidents have made great progress as a politician, which indirectly makes the general welfare of people better in every field. He gave the citizens real peace and steady life and create（created） a great condition for development. Can't you claim that America's great (greatness) is independent of Lincoln's achievements? （正式论文中用反问句做总结不知道是否显得有些informal？）

Second, it is no doubt that the artists' and scientists' achievements are closely bound up with the general welfare of people and the country's great. Artists, like Van Gogh and Da Vinci as painters, Shakespeare and Tagore as writers and Beenthoven and Mozart as musicians（用排比句一笔带过很常见的例子，大赞）, are all make (all made) great contribution to improve people's spiritual life. Their achievements are the most beautiful part of the world, which are regarded as precious with no price (误用) to their country. And the scientists as（like） Edison and Einstein, whose achievements almost change the world, are part of the representatives of their national strength. There's a word said by Marx, "Science and technology are the primary productive forces." Science and technology impulse the development of the society and improve the general welfare indirectly. It is (there is) no reason to separate the science achievements from the country's great.
Overall, the author misses the point that general welfare is the produced and improved by individual achievements. As the conclusion mentioned above, the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists is closely related to the general welfare of people. They both (all) stand for a country's comprehensive strength. Without any section of them, a country can't grow in its greatness.

有一些小的语法和词语上的错误
行文逻辑清晰，论述翔实。其中用到的例子都恰到好处，正反结合。