duck的独立作文，自1月30日

duck2010UID: 2757376

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谢谢大家！

这篇文章的段落论述很有问题，观点很混乱，基本跑题，呵呵。大家多多包涵！

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To be well-informed people should get information from many different sources.
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Living in an information exploding age, I believe in the great importance of information. Personally, I agree with the statement that people need to acquire information from many different sources, in order to be well-informed.

Nowadays, as media technology develops, the world has witnessed so many sweeping changes. People are living in a way inconceivable only a few generations ago. For example, three decades ago, it would take weeks to send a mail across the Pacific Ocean. However, yesterday, I just received a new year greeting e-mail from my cousin, who is now studying in America. He even sent me very nice photos in his campus, which were only taken few hours before he sent me the e-mail. This is absolutely beyond the imagination of many elder people.

Indeed, the convenient communication has brought people better lives. However, at the same time, a world full of competition is being created. In this unique age, only the ones being well informed are the fittest that will survive and prosper. For example, people gather information in many different ways, such as TV, Internet, mobile phone, newspaper, and so on. With these newly developed technology and devices, people are able to listen to the latest musical albums released by their favorite singers, to know when exactly a train is about to arrive, to know the latest news from the Mid-East, to watch the live NBA match, and so on.

However, there seems to be another major source of information, which most people tend to neglect. That is book. Nowadays, with the prevalence of Internet and other efficient medias, most people, especially the young people, are spending very little time on reading books. In my opinion, both quantity and quality of information are of great importance. Compared with the other sources, book is much more reliable in its information quality, since the authors have worked very hard to compact the information interests people. In contrast, plenty of articles on Internet are being posted by so many irresponsible nobody. Being informed of waste information is not doing any good to people. Thus, book has its advantage.

In sum, I believe that people need many different sources, in full agreement with the statement. However, what the statement fails to clarify is that people should also pay attention to the quality of information sources, instead of mere quantity.

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To be well-informed people should get information from many different sources.+ r& d9 {6 C* K3 _8 f* e
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Living in an information exploding age, I believe in the great importance of information. Personally, I agree with the statement that people need to acquire （换词，好~）information from many different sources, in order to be well-informed.
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Nowadays, as media technology develops, the world has witnessed so many sweeping changes. People are living in a way inconceivable（inconceivable修饰什么呢？a way么？） only a few generations ago（应该是compared with a few generations before吧~）. For example, three decades ago, it would take （me）weeks to send a mail across the Pacific Ocean. However, yesterday, I just received a new year greeting e-mail from my cousin, who is now studying in America. He even sent me very nice photos in his campus, which were only taken few hours before he sent me the e-mail. This is absolutely beyond the imagination of many elder people.你这一段论述的是信息的发展便利了我们的生活，这个和主题好像……

Indeed, the convenient communication has brought people better lives. However, at the same time, a world full of competition is being created. In this unique age, only the ones being well informed are the fittest that will survive and prosper (你这里强调的是成为well-informed的人的重要性，而主题是怎么成为well-informed的人~~).（要是我，就会在下面举一个这样的例子，一个人如何努力从各方面获取信息，然后最终通过一个事情证明了他是个well-informed的人） For example, people gather information in many different ways, such as TV, Internet, mobile phone, newspaper, and so on(如果前面是way，后面是不是应该改为watching TV, surfing Internet, through mobile, seeing newspaper and so forth呢？）.（不过这个例子和前面的论点有点对应不上啊~） With these newly developed technology and devices, people are able to listen to the latest musical albums released by their favorite singers, to know when exactly a train is about to arrive, to know the latest news from the Mid-East, to watch the live NBA match, and so on.（这些话感觉对主题没什么作用啊~）

However, there seems to be another major source of information, which most people tend to neglect. That is book. Nowadays, with the prevalence of Internet and other efficient medias（media就是复数）, most people, especially the young people, are spending very little time on reading book. In my opinion, information should not be confined to the quantity of sources, but also the quality of its content（啥意思啊？改成neither….nor…如何？）. Compared with the other sources, book is much more reliable in its information quality, since the authors have worked very hard to compact the information interests people. In contrast, plenty of articles on Internet are being posted by so many irresponsible nobody（好词，赞一个）. Being informed of waste information is not doing any good to people. Thus, book has its advantage.这段主要说书可以作为一种重要的信息提供源~和主题好像…..
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In sum, I believe that people need many different sources, in full agreement with the statement. However, what the statement fails to clarify is that people should also pay attention to the quality of information sources, instead of mere quantity.
Duck学长的文章一直很流畅~语言几乎没什么可挑剔的~
对于结构和主旨：
先说一下我自己的理解吧，这个题目我前天写的，写完后和同学讨论了下，才发现自己写跑题了~囧~今天看了duck学长的作文，也觉得你论述的主题利题目的中心有点远啊，题目是说为了成为博学的人，人们是不是应该从各方面获取信息~换句话说，如果你同意题目，就应该说为什么只有从各方面获取信息才能成为博学的人，而duck主要说的是获取信息的多种途径，大秀咱们的时代有多么发达~~我个人认为这个题目有点抽象，纯粹说理不好说，而且容易说偏了~所以举一些具体的例子是最好的方法。我自己想到的例子，就是记者，记者由于自己的工作性质，必需从各方面获取信息，从而成为了博学的人。反面的例子我编了个身边的例子~呵呵～

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To be well-informed people should get information from many different sources.. D( ]* Y/ @2 `' i
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Living in an information exploding age, I believe in the great importance of information. Personally, I agree with the statement that people need to acquire information from many different sources, in order to be well-informed.

Nowadays, as media technology develops, the world has witnessed so many sweeping changes. People are living in a way inconceivable only a few generations ago. For example, three decades ago, it would take weeks to send a mail across the Pacific Ocean. However, yesterday, I just received a new year greeting e-mail from my cousin, who is now studying in America. He even sent me very nice photos in his campus, which were only taken few hours before he sent me the e-mail. This is absolutely beyond the imagination of many elder people.

Indeed, the convenient communication has brought people better lives. However, at the same time, a world full of competition is being created. In this unique age, only the ones being well informed are the fittest that will survive and prosper. For example, people gather information in many different ways, such as TV, Internet, mobile phone, newspaper, and so on. With these newly developed technology and devices, people are able to listen to the latest musical albums released by their favorite singers, to know when exactly a train is about to arrive, to know the latest news from the Mid-East, to watch the live NBA match, and so on.

However, there seems to be another major source of information, which most people tend to neglect. That is book. Nowadays, with the prevalence of Internet and other efficient medias, most people, especially the young people, are spending very little time on reading book. In my opinion, information should not be confined to the quantity of sources, but also the quality of its content. Compared with the other sources, book is much more reliable in its information quality, since the authors have worked very hard to compact the information interests people. In contrast, plenty of articles on Internet are being posted by so many irresponsible nobody. Being informed of waste information is not doing any good to people. Thus, book has its advantage.

In sum, I believe that people need many different sources, in full agreement with the statement. However, what the statement fails to clarify is that people should also pay attention to the quality of information sources, instead of mere quantity.
这是G文章issue的写法么，我没写过g的文章，但是总感觉这种漏洞攻击是g的风格~
我没有找到语法错误，用词错误也没发现，膜拜下~但是不大理解的是第二段论点是啥啊？好像与文章主题无关啊……还是因为我习惯了一段都有论点的，大人的这种风格第一次见……如果是从托的作文角度来看的话，第三段是立论段，第四段，不清楚你的态度啊，怎么又把书作为单独一段拎出来说呢？

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

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9 f  J0 y$ M$ bLivingin an information exploding age, I believe in the great importance ofinformation. Personally, I agree with the statement that people need toacquire information from many different sources, in order to bewell-informed.
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Nowadays,as media technology develops, the world has witnessed so many sweepingchanges. People are living in a way inconceivable only a fewgenerations ago.(至少是inconceivable for...吧) For example, three decades ago, it would take weeks tosend a mail across the Pacific Ocean. However, yesterday, I justreceived a new year greeting e-mail from my cousin, who is now studyingin America. He even sent me very nice photos in his campus, which wereonly taken few hours before he sent me the e-mail. This is absolutelybeyond the imagination of many elder people.(感觉你语言不错啊，但是你这段好像是跟全文关系微弱啊，你只是说改变很大这样，那跟多信息吸取有啥关系). [* P8 _, a0 a" y! c
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Indeed,the convenient communication has brought people better lives. However,at the same time, a world full of competition is being created. In thisunique age, only the ones being well informed are the fittest that willsurvive and prosper(这个词可以说经济或者国家，但是说人可能不是非常合适吧). For example, people gather information in manydifferent ways, such as TV, Internet, mobile phone, newspaper, and soon. With these newly developed technology and devices, people are ableto listen to the latest musical albums released by their favoritesingers, to know when exactly a train is about to arrive, to know thelatest news from the Mid-East, to watch the live NBA match, and so on.% x' C0 B  k; G+ @+ y' K' L0 f* E) j- R

) J. T' y/ c* d+ J7 i+ tHowever,there seems to be another major source of information, which mostpeople tend to neglect. That is book. Nowadays, with the prevalence ofInternet and other efficient medias, most people, especially the youngpeople, are spending very little time on reading books. In my opinion,both quantity and quality of information are of great importance.Compared with the other sources, book is much more reliable in itsinformation quality, since the authors have worked very hard to compactthe information interests people. In contrast, plenty of articles onInternet are being posted by so many irresponsible nobody. Beinginformed of waste information is not doing any good to people. Thus,book has its advantage.
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Insum, I believe that people need many different sources, in fullagreement with the statement. However, what the statement fails toclarify is that people should also pay attention to the quality ofinformation sources, instead of mere quantity.

其实感觉你的语言好像还是挺不错的，所以基本上没什么语法问题。
说下主题吧，我觉得第二段和主题的关系非常的薄弱啊，然后是第三段，不知道你有没有觉得你的例子和中心好像不是非常的一致，而且你的中心到底是哪个，我觉得你第三段的前三句话好像意思也是不一致的。

我觉得你的第四段还好，如果你能把第三段的意思再明确的提出来比如直接说：主流媒体给人补充了某一部分的知识，并且让我们变得知识丰富。

当然，我觉得这篇的确是非常不好写的，所以你写的还是挺好的。- M6 B, C; m& s2 _9 T* m) N
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duck2010UID: 2757376

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: teachers should be paid according to how well their students perform./ `.

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There is an ongoing discussion, with sharply rising volume, as whether teachers' salary should depend on how well their students perform. The statement sounds quite plausible as a way to stimulate teachers to concentrate on their profession. However, I hold a negative view on this issue, considering several drawbacks of the suggestion.

In the beginning of putting the suggestion into practice, it needs to be clarify that what is "good performance" as well as what is bad. Some might believe that students who get higher scores on final exams are better students than the others. However, that is not the case, concerning the complex real situation. For example, a student might not do well in his/her final math exam due to an untimely headache. Or, he shows much more talent on literature than on math. On this condition, people can not simply judge a bad student by his poor score on math. Each student is a unique individual, with his/her own interest and priority. Thus, how to define "good performance" is a very complex step of the alleged suggestion that teachers should be paid according to how well their students perform.

In addition, even if a detailed regulation or standard of good performance had been made, we would face another issue that teachers might all want to teach classes with more talented students. It is natural for every one to chase profit, including teachers, as people all have the right to make more money within the realm of law and regulation. If this happens, it would be totally unjust to those students falling behind on certain subjects. Many would be disappointed or even hurt. Thus, this issue would probably raise tremendous public concerns. I am afraid such an apparent discrimination would be seriously criticized by the mass.

In my opinion, it is necessary to raise salary to attract high-caliber teachers into this special profession. However, paying teachers according to how well their students perform is absolutely an inappropriate and impractical advice, for those reasons mentioned above.

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

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Thereis an ongoing discussion, with sharply rising volume, as whetherteachers' salary should depend on how well their students perform. Thestatement sounds quite plausible as a way to stimulate teachers toconcentrate on their profession. However, I hold a negative view onthis issue, considering several drawbacks of the suggestion.

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Inthe beginning of putting the suggestion into practice, it needs to beclarify(clarified) that what is "good performance" as well as what is bad. Somemight believe that students who get higher scores on final exams arebetter students than the others. However, that is not the case,concerning the complex real situation. For example, a student might notdo well in his/her final math exam due to an untimely headache. Or, heshows much more talent on literature than on math. On this condition,people can not simply judge a bad student by his poor score on math.Each student is a unique individual, with his/her own interest andpriority. Thus, how to define "good performance" is a very complex stepof the alleged suggestion that teachers should be paid according to howwell their students perform.

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Inaddition, even if a detailed regulation or standard of good performancehad been made, we would face another issue that teachers might all wantto teach classes with more talented students. It is natural for everyone to chase profit, including teachers, as people all have the rightto make more money within the realm of law and regulation. If thishappens, it would be totally unjust to those students falling behind oncertain subjects. Many would be disappointed or even hurt. Thus, thisissue would probably raise tremendous public concerns. I am afraid suchan apparent discrimination would be seriously criticized by the mass.% d# _# L9 z7 @

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Inmy opinion, it is necessary to raise salary to attract high-caliberteachers into this special profession. However, paying teachersaccording to how well their students perform is absolutely aninappropriate and impractical advice, for those reasons mentioned above.

唉，我觉得你写的已经非常好了，我也是像你这么想的，所以其实我也看不出来有啥逻辑错误（要么我就不这么写了)呵呵，但是感觉你比我要说的清楚很多。佩服佩服。

duck2010UID: 2757376

3.2：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

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Modern society is indeed becoming increasingly complex. As democracy and technology advances, people are provided with many more choices of how to live their lives, many of which might be inconceivable only a few generations ago. To better adapt to modern society, I believe it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Compared with any other periods in history, the era we are living now is much more complex. The word "complex" not only refers to that we manage to invent the extremely delicate computer and microchip, or we are able to explore the mysterious heaven with spaceship, but also the unique life style we are now living in- that never in history have people's lives intertwined so much with the others'. For example, a hundred years ago, one might lead a peaceful life in a serene and isolated village, appreciating intimate relationship with the other villagers. However, nowadays, as Internet stretching to every corner, he is able to chat with some people with similar interests in the other side of this planet. An even more telling example would be that the ongoing climate change, driven by some other countries, might have threatened the living condition in his community and force him to negotiate with the others. Thus, the world is getting increasingly complex.

While realizing the macro-trend of complexity of modern society, we would then need to equip ourselves, especially the young people, to adapt well to the shift. Actually, many have already been working in this direction. At school, students are educated to be more sociable and cooperative. Many books are published, as well as many programs on TV are designed, to guide the young people to have better career plan. In addition, through communicating with the others by Internet and other media, the young people are able to meet more people and exchange their ideas about everything, which leads to better choices about their lives. For instance, as a young man, I once was hesitating to further my study on America, with the major of sociology. This was a hard decision to make. However, I met many kind and passionate friends on Internet, who are studying sociology in America. By email and MSN, they had given me very valuable advices, encouraging me to "just do it". Finally I made a detailed plan of apply to schools in America.

In sum, realizing the complexity of modern society, I fully believe in the vital importance of the ability to plan and organize for the young people. Moreover, I also witness that the young man are already moving in this direction.

小白虎UID: 2603242

23# duck2010

Modern society is (去掉)indeed becomes increasingly complex. As democracy and technology advances, people are provided with many more choices of how to live their lives, many of which might be inconceivable only a few generations ago. To better adapt to modern society, I believe it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Compared with any other periods of (改成in)history, the era we are living now is much more complex. The word "complex" not only refers to that we manage to invent the extremely delicate and powerful computer and microchip, or we are able to explore the mysterious heaven with spaceship, but also the unique life style we are now living in- that never in history have people's lives intertwined so much with the others'（太长了难易让人读懂，建议把or那个地方修改一下或去掉）. For example, a hundred years ago, one might lead a peaceful life in a serene and isolated village, appreciating intimate relationship with the other villagers. However, nowadays, as Internet stretching to every corner, he is able to chat with some people with similar interests in the other side of this planet. An even more telling example would be that the ongoing climate change, driven by some other countries, might have threatened the living condition in his community and force him to negotiate with the others. Thus, the world is getting increasingly complex.3 ]# Z5 b. m5 l: v2 f" n" {/ p  R
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While realizing the macro-trend of complexity of modern society, we would then need to equip ourselves, especially the young people, to adapt well to the shift. Actually, many have already been working in this direction. At school, students are educated to be more sociable and cooperative. Many books are published, as well as many programs on TV are designed, to guide the young people to have better career plan. In addition, through communicating with the others by Internet and other media, the young people are able to meet more people and exchange their ideas about everything, which leads to better choices about their lives. For instance, as a young man, I once was hesitating to further my study on America, with the major of sociology. This was a hard decision to make. However, I met many kind and passionate friends on Internet, who are studying sociology in America. By email and MSN, they had given me very valuable advices, encouraging me to "just do it". Finally I made a detailed plan of apply to schools in America.

In sum, realizing the complexity of modern society, I fully believe in the vital importance of the ability to plan and organize for the young people. Moreover, I also witness that the young man are already moving in this direction..

PS：长句使用太多了，其实T没有必要用太多那么长的句子，用的不恰当更容易暴露自己的缺点。O(∩_∩)O~  文章写得很好，加油！

duck2010UID: 2757376

非常谢谢你的建议。

但是，我文章中的长句子好像不多呀，也就你指出的那一个吧。。。
我写文章并没有刻意去写长句子，而是仅仅以逻辑意群来断句。

小弟不才，谢谢你的夸奖！:)

24# 小白虎