2.2 作文

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2.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is being in a group led by a tourist guide

Personally, I agree with the statement that travelling in a group is the best way for people as the author says, especially which comprised our good friends and releatives. Yet, as for the another suggestion that leading by a tourist guide I hold opposite view.

First of all, common experiences infrom us that travelling in a group would be the economic way. For example, the price of a ticket would be much cheaper if you would buy a great amount than that of just one or two. There is a concrete illusion about the park in my city. Even though the price of the ticket is not expensive, just 20 yuan, if you bought tickets more than 10, the price would decrease by 5 yuan.
In this condition, if you were travelling in a group, you can share tickets to members and hence everyone would save 5 yuan. But, the person who are travelling single would have to pay it for 20 yuan. Generally, if you want make your travelling economic, travelling in group would be an effective way.

Secondly, besides the factors involves economy, travelling in a group would enlarge the happiness during the process, especially the members are your good friends or family. No one can deny that the main purpose of travelling always be releaxive and enjoy the outside. So we can share this kind of happiness with our family and friends dur the travelling, and also it can be a good oppotunity to communicate with them. What‘s more, if during the travelling, when you are in trouble and has problems, family and friends would be strange dependency. In short, travelling with friends and family would make your travelling a nice experience.

Lastly, even assuming that travelling in a group would be a effective
way, I always hold the negative view about the suggest that leading by guide. It is because in all likelihood we would lose our freedom led by a tourist guide. This is to say we have to listen the order of the guide, which would result in the missing of numerous beauty sense. Particulary, guide always lead people to a series of places to shop, from this they can gain the extra-revenue. In this condition, you will lose the real nature of travelling and even have a feeling of being cheated. Considering this possible but realistic phenomenon, I disagree with the adivce that leading by guide.

Summarily, in my opinion, I agree insofar as with that travelling in a group would be a effective to enjoy the process and benefit it in various respects. But, since leading by guide would make the travelling lose its natural meaning, I disagree with this assertion.



谢谢审阅O(∩_∩)O~

arlenezxyUID: 2487145

Personally, I agree with the statement that travelling in a group is the best way for people as the author （topic)says, especially which comprised (companied with ) our good friends and releatives. Yet, as for the another(other) suggestion that leading(led) by a tourist guide I hold opposite view.
First of all, common experiences infrom us that travelling in a group would be the economical way. For example, the price of a ticket would be much cheaper if you would buy a great amount than that of just one or two. There is a concrete illusion ( what "illusion"mean for?) about the park in my city. Even though the price of the ticket is not expensive, just 20 yuan, if you bought tickets more than 10, the price would still decrease by 5 yuan. In this condition, if you were travelling in a group, you can share tickets to(with) members and hence everyone would save 5 yuan. But, the person who are travelling single would have to pay it for 20 yuan. Generally, if you want make your travelling economic (economical), travelling in group would be an effective way.

Secondly, besides the factors involves economy, travelling in a group would enlarge the happiness during the process, especially the members are your good friends or family. No one can deny that the main purpose of travelling always be releaxive and enjoy the outside. So we can share this kind of happiness with our family and friends dur the travelling, and also it can be a good oppotunity to communicate with them. What‘s more, if during the travelling, when you are in trouble and has problems, family and friends would be a strange dependency (the using of "strange dependency" rarely been seen,although it may be correct in grammar.I 'd rather suggest you change to another custom use )  . In short, travelling with friends and family would make your travelling(travel) a nice experience.
Lastly, even assuming that travelling in a group would be an effective way, I always hold the negative view about the suggestion that leading(led) by guide. It is because in all likelihood we would lose our freedom led by a tourist guide. This is to say we have to listen the order of the guide, which would result in the missing of numerous beauty sense. Particulary, guide always lead people to a series of places to shop (I can't follow you), from this they can gain the extra-revenue. In this condition, you will lose the real nature(meaning) of travelling and even have a feeling of being cheated. Considering this possible but realistic phenomenon, I disagree with the adivce that leading by guide."

Summarily, in my opinion, I agree insofar as with that travelling in a group would be a effective to enjoy the process and benefit it in various respects. But, since leading (being led)by guide would make the travelling lose its natural meaning, I disagree with this assertion.'


Generally, you made a clear structure supported by certain examples, however, you should pay more attention to your wording and structure of sentence,since too many obscure expressions appear in your essay caused by errors of grammar. Try to make sure the correct using of every word, especially some important verbs, and avoid using words that unfamiliar to you.  

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2# arlenezxy
^_^ 感谢您的批改，因为是第一次写T的作文，写的很烂，辛苦了。 语言方面确实是自己最大的弊病，能告诉我您是怎么练的么^_^谢谢了。还有就是不是很清楚，我写的这种结构（把这个题目分开来阐述。。。）是否可以，请不吝赐教^_^