issue212=美丽G程小组=小组冲刺第三次作业 BY岁月静好

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TOPIC: ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
WORDS: 561
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-2-6 23:12:02

Although the speaker asserted that any means to attain a worthy goal is justifiable, and to some extent, it seems reasonable to fulfill one's aspiration, I do not agree with the speaker for the following reasons.

In the first place, due to the horrendous complexity and diversity of the whole society, sometimes it is almost impossible to allege whether one's goal is justifiable. Different people share different backgrounds and characters and intimates, thus even when two of them share the exact goal, the means they take to fulfill and the results they lead to might be the opposite, and the beneficial goals for one group might be considered deleterious for another group. In the case of the development of industries in a region, it is reasonable for industries to pursue the maximum of profits, and in that comes the boost of the economy of the region. The goal of industries is worthy for workers and managers for much more profits while the case maybe the opposite for denizens of the region. The side production of the boost is the harm to environment, which to some extent is deleterious for denizens. Every sword has two blades, in many cases, whether a goal is worthy depends on the perspective they take and position they stand.

In the second place, there are certain goals that no one can deny the benefits of them and can be considered as worthy, such as the willing to get NO.1 in the class, the aspiration to get a decent and well paid job, the obligation to give their parents a better life. However, even for those worthy goals, it is difficult to tell whether the methods to fulfill are justifiable. First of all, the means people take to achieve worth more discussion. the process of striving might result in harm to others
If a man fighting for a decent job emulate other candidates in an appropriate way such as depreciation and bribing, it is unfair for others and the regulation of the market is ruined, if a prize was granted to a professor who achieve through plagiarism, the ward is immoral. In addition, goals should be weight against interests and costs and the best for the majority. If the leader of a country tries to improve the standard of peoples' lives, to boost the economy, promote so many industries regardless the level that the environment can suffer, in this cases what the interests are the development of economy and what the costs are the harm to environment, the leader should weighted interests and costs seriously in order to make the right decision.

Finally, sometimes there need the sacrifice of somebody for the whole society. It may be unfair or unjustifiable for the minority, but in a higher view, it is really worthy. The magnate of a market give up the opportunity to achieve the monogamy, the sacrifice of the magnates provides more positions for more people to apply, and more opportunity for others, it is worthy in a higher perspective, and can be called worthy for achieving more sublime goals.

To sum up, it is not only hard to determine whether a goals is worthy, the methods people take to achieve them is also important, and to the sacrifice of minority sometimes leads to sublime better results for the majority, which can be called worthy in another perspective.

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TOPIC: ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
WORDS: 561
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-2-6 23:12:02

Although the speaker asserted that any means to attain a worthy goal is justifiable, and to some extent, it seems reasonable to fulfill one's aspiration, I do not agree with the speaker for the following reasons.
although 放到 it seems 之前
In the first place, due to the horrendous complexity and diversity of the whole society, sometimes it is almost impossible to allege whether one's goal is justifiable（worthy). Different people share different backgrounds and characters and intimates(密友？）, thus even when two of them share the exact(same) goal, the means(这段不是讲goal吗，means来的忒早）they take to fulfill and the results they lead to（get）might be the opposite, and the beneficial goals for one group might be considered deleterious for another group. In the case of the development of industries in a region, it is reasonable for industries to pursue the maximum of profits, and in that comes the boost of the economy of the region. The goal of industries is worthy for workers and managers for much more profits while the case maybe the opposite for denizens of the region. The side production of the boost is the harm to environment, which to some extent is deleterious for denizens. Every sword has two blades, in many cases, whether a goal is worthy depends on the perspective they take and position they stand.(这是现象，您得提出一个解决方案来）
（说明同标不同果）

In the second place, there are certain goals that no one can deny the benefits of them and can be considered as worthy, such as the willing to get NO.1 in the class, the aspiration to get a decent and well paid job, the obligation to give their parents a better life. However, even for those worthy goals, it is difficult to tell whether the methods to fulfill are justifiable. First of all, the means people take to achieve worth more discussion. the process of striving might result in harm to others
If a man fighting for a decent job emulate other candidates in an appropriate way such as depreciation and bribing, it is unfair for others and the regulation of the market is ruined, if a prize was granted to a professor who achieve through plagiarism, the ward is immoral. In addition, goals should be weight against interests and costs and the best for the majority.（主角是means，第一段的goals不要跑过来） If the leader of a country tries to improve the standard of peoples' lives, to boost the economy, promote so many industries regardless the level that the environment can suffer, in this cases what the interests are the development of economy and what the costs are the harm to environment, the leader should weighted interests and costs seriously in order to make the right decision.（是should 这样做，但具体怎样做，作者要给出自己的评价体系）
（意义上和上段 有重复，最后没有给出总的段结论，只是分例子点了一下）

Finally, sometimes there need the sacrifice of somebody for the whole society. It may be unfair or unjustifiable for the minority, but in a higher view, it is really worthy. The magnate of a market give up the opportunity to achieve the monogamy, the sacrifice of the magnates provides more positions for more people to apply, and more opportunity for others, it is worthy in a higher perspective, and can be called worthy for achieving more sublime goals.
（大局为重，很中庸，建议加上推理论证，为啥，举例之前需要解释)
To sum up, it is not only hard to determine whether a goals is worthy, the methods people take to achieve them is also important, and to the sacrifice of minority sometimes leads to sublime better results for the majority, which can be called worthy in another perspective.
(能够读懂你纠结的情绪，但是这样说IMPORTANT，又说适当牺牲，貌似少了避免牺牲避免伤害大局的论证）

语法，不知你查不查语法，复杂句子用的较多容易语法错，小心谨慎。思路确实有些混乱，论证段都是means goals混打，整体过于中庸 大话，没有立下一个自己的评价体系，一直是在小例子中说这个人要妥善解决，但是怎么个妥善解决，解决过程中有什么个底限、标准却没有说明。
另外，简单句挺好的，简单词也挺好的，可以句子词汇适当简单些。